| "False Pretenses" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: DJ On: January 06, 2003 08:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a really good story here! Please, continue or finish it! I really would like to see on what happens next! It would be cool, in my opinion, to see Misty and Hotaru go into a catight over Ash! That would be sweet to read! And, of course, Hotaru wins. Keep it up! |
Reviewed By: DJ On: December 27, 2002 15:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Come on! Please finish this story! I really like to see on what happens next!
I really like the pairings, especally the Ash/Hotaru one. There are way too many Ash/Misty fanfics out there, and this one is actually a good change of pace! I would really love to see more of Ash paired up with someone else (like Sasami {Tenchi Muyo}, Rini {Sailor Moon}, etc.).
Please, finish this awesome fanfic! Keep it up! |
Reviewed By: Katrina Kadabra [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2002 09:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I totally LOVED the story! (That's so cute... Tracey has a crush on Michelle!) You combined the two words very well. Everything seemed so natural that I forgot at couple points I was reading a crossover. Excellent job.
Your writing style is pretty good. You vary well-written dialogue with description so it's not like we're not reading a script, but we're not reading a huge block of descriptive text either. My only concern is that your describing sentences are a bit bland. You tend to write short sentences that often start with the same word or phase. Example:
"He slowly turned on the doorknob and he came inside the living room. There was a man standing by the window. He had his arms placed behind him. He was wearing a distinctive tailored dark suit."
Most of the sentences follow the same format. The word "he" is followed by some kind of action. Trying combing some sentences together, and vary the words you begin sentences with. So the preceding paragraph might change to something like this:
"Slowly he turned on the doorknob and came inside the living room. A man wearing a distinctive tailored dark suit was standing by the window with his arms placed behind him."
These are just suggestions as far as the writing is concerned. Everyone has their own style. Again, the story is awesome; I enjoyed it a lot. I look forward to reading more of your work.
-Katrina |
Reviewed By: DJ On: November 11, 2002 10:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please continue this story! I would really like to see what happens next! I hope Hotaru and Ash hook up and stay together! Keep it up! |
Reviewed By: Usagi Malfoy (from ff.n) On: July 01, 2002 00:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Loved it! Myst Lady i didnt know you were on MediaMiner! i just found it! do my a fav and send my a chap. early! at Kaylakoo@aol.com!! Jk Jk!!! but send me an e! i need a fellow Sailor Moon/ Pokemon fan to talk to! plus someone to get me to write instead of writing stories that i never finish!! Please? Arigato in advanced!! |
Reviewed By: Blushing_Pink On: June 27, 2002 00:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story I think it is creative and it has flare and it combines two of my favorite animes. Pokemon and Sailormoon. Post the next chapter as soon as possble. |
Reviewed By: Skya On: April 06, 2002 22:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story I love what you have written so far and I would really love to have you finsish it. I want to know what happens in the next chapter as well as how it ends. EXCELLENT!!!! story. Keep it coming.:) |
Reviewed By: gold_fish [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2002 21:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm... I like it so far. I've liked all of your previous work and so I believe this should turn out all right! I like the setup of the story so far, it makes me want to read more I hope you more comes up soon and keep up the fabulous job you are doing right now!! Ciao. |
