| "The dragon amongst wolves" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: Yue no Rei On: October 19, 2007 22:54 CDT
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Oh man, I dont think Ranma would actually take this lightly... At least at first it would cause some problems... The merger was a brilliant idea and not one that I've heard people write about. Keep up the great work
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Reviewed By: nikichan On: October 14, 2007 23:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am glad that you have written more chapters like I asked you too. But, at the end of the last chapter updated, I didn't like it. About Ranma being a mix of both sex permanently. I hope this isn't truly going to be the case with how Ranma's going to be from the time of his disappearance. I hope that when Ranma gets better that he will be able change back and forth like he use too. If anything I hope that happens. For I can't see Ranma surviving as a mixed sex. If you think about his personality. I SERIUOSLY ask you to revise that part about him or have write it a way where the curse happens the old way. Because, if he stays a mixed sex. I will not read this story anymore and it would be a shame too. For I was really getting into and enjoying the story. But, I won't make that decision until I read which way its going future updated chapters. bye!
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Reviewed By: passi' through On: October 09, 2007 21:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
While the idea of Ranma disappearing is not unique, your story suffers from the poor characterizations of the cast. *** They are so far off from their canon roots that it is impossible to connect these people with Ranma in any way. Akane is so far off from canon that she has yet to make an appearance in your story. She is not a "hate filled girl"; that is fanon. Akane is one of the more helpful and forgiving members of the cast. Nabiki doesn't have a "vast network", she is an opportunistic gold digger and wouldn't know the first thing about tracking people down - that is Shampoo's speciality.*** It is difficult to really judge Nodoka, but she is traditional. In other words: She wouldn't approve any women that dominates the relationship; it would be unmanly.*** You really need to read the manga and get a handle on the characters, as is this is more fanon-driven than anything and it robs any enjoyment that might have been derived from it. You need to also check your spelling. It is Saotome, not Satome. This is basic information that could be found on the web.
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Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2007 14:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
OUCH. Ranma the hermaphrodite. That's harsh. And as I've stated in my last review it's SAOTOME and not SATOME. And it's NERIMA, not NERMIA
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Reviewed By: nikichan On: October 01, 2007 21:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi I really like this story. So far it is going great. I enjoyed it from the very beginning. I would like to read more of this story until the end of it. I feel this is to good of a story to start and not finish it. Please update soon and you can and I wish you luck, time, and inspiration too complete this wonderful story. I will be checking every day for any new updates and I would like you to consider posting this story of Fanfiction.net too that way if one site is down. I can find new updates at another site. Bye! Good Luck!
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Reviewed By: Yue no Rei On: September 17, 2007 04:36 CDT
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Haha. Brilliant. I dont know why you dont have as many reviews as you should though!
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Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2007 04:48 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the story. Drama is always good (if there's a happy end). But it's Saotome and not Satome. Maybe you should correct that.
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Reviewed By: passin' through On: September 13, 2007 09:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting idea, Ranma being brought into a rival house of Nodoka's, however the story suffers from the overuse of fanon characters. I am finding it almost impossible to connect these people to the cast of Ranma 1/2. The NWC need to be brought back to their canon roots a bit. As is this is a collection of original characters masquerading as Ranma characters that have nothing in common with the characters that the readers have come to know and love in the manga. They are nothing more than bad fanon parodies of the characters, rather than the real characters that they needed to be for your story. Now contrast this with your original characters. They are interesting and fairly well presented here. They behave in a reasonable manner and the way you presented them shows that you put a bit of thought into each character. I can see how and why each of your original characters do the thing they do. Now, the same type of care and attention needs to be brought to the rest of the cast. Doing so will only improve your story.
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Reviewed By: TaiKhan On: August 30, 2007 02:19 CDT
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Definitely looks intriguing. Spelling and grammar could use more work, but I've read much worse. I only hope that this is not intended as yet another "Ranma runs away and becomes a girl while in hiding" fic. More acceptance of the curse is quite acceptable, but I find any fic wherein Ranma completely renounces his masculinity to be utterly unbelievable and no more enjoyable than those fics where the curse is completely removed if it even occurred in the first place.
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Title: the dragon amongst wolves
Reviewed By: blackice [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2006 21:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is a good story to read and wonder how ranma turns out with the problem with the combined curse of male and female. how does ranma react to see his family and fiancees.
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Reviewed By: Rignach O. On: February 21, 2006 15:12 CST
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Liked it and the first chapter.
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Reviewed By: Rowinr [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2006 11:18 CST
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Liked it so far look forward to your future updates.
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