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| "Conduit" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2006 14:47 CST
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Your story has been nominated at the Feudal Association! The Feudal Association is a group that presents awards to fanfiction and fanart in the InuYasha Fandom several times a year. Our official website can be found here - http://feudalassociation.cadkitten.com/ And our Yahoo Group, where the nominations and voting occurs can be found here - http://groups.yahoo.com/group/FeudalAssociation/ Voting continues through January 19th-20th, 2006. Congratulations and feel free to join and/or help us spread the word about our group! ~ The Daimyo Owner of the Feudal Association
| Reviewed By: velvetarms77 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2006 12:46 CDT
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That was a very interesting take on the connection between Sango and Kohaku through Kikyou. I was wondering about Sango's actual motivation to have sex with Kikyou - she says she wants to understand Kohaku's relationship with the miko, but does that mean that Kohaku has been sleeping with Kikyou too? Sorry, I think I'm a bit confused. A more realistic guess would be that Kikyou needs to touch the living donor's body in order to absorb their soul's energy, and Sango wants a part of her soul to be with Kohaku even if she can't be with him in person. But then the question of how Sango would have known about Kikyou's need for physical contact to perform the transfer would arise... Ah well, that's okay. I found some of the wording a bit awkward (i.e "hot moist domination" and Kikyou tasting Sango "for as much as she can"). I get the meaning you are trying to convey by saying "for as much as she can", but it just seems awkward. The domination part was completely lost on me. I get the feeling that you know the meaning that you want to convey to the reader, but it's just the actual clarity of the sentences that I'm having trouble with. On the whole, great job! The scene was hot (I liked that Sango's womanhood was 'heady' - that was really sexy) and Kikyou's unnatural body was really well described. I liked that realism a lot. I also got a really great image from that last part, with Kikyou holding Sango as she was sleeping. Nice touch there. Anyhow, just thought I'd stop by and do a little bit of reading in-between calls at work. Thanks! ^_^
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