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| "ShadowBaby" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Title: Ahh i wish you could finish shadowbaby
Reviewed By: -Samerra Kraft- [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2008 18:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i must say this story really relates me with a ghost that i ponder with every day since i got a close encounter with one all i must say its trully original heres a story that i could give you if you like to start on one its called the cronicales of ultraviolet but wait its has nothing to do with the movie ultraviolet but in a sence it like the xmen but with a woman with the exat detailes of v but as it goes the year is 9256 and theres a ubscure genetic trait that gets mutated into a mutant gene in the years following a devistating virus that the goverment got out of controle with like the aids virus so to speak and they were much covering it up but they found a cure for it but in its place like in aeon flux it sprang up anoher virus in its place that the female carriers pass on to there children and it get ramitied like a family tree web the mutant gene trait resulting in a massive breakout of mutant babys like in x men just a virus style like in ultraviolet and a little bit of aeon flux that a girl sent to boot camp to get strip down of her powers that she wouldnt let it die escaped within passing all the tryles of stripping yet unknowing to herself that her power was in her mind not like in the gene trait that the others had well the first person infested had the power in the blood and for this he was locked away in a remote location of africa the center of the jungle were there was a civil base plant militery style headquarters so that he will never escape and cause 300 years of caos for he was a demented do to the virus infecting his brain but not his mind so well after the new ultraviolet(the generation following the mutated genes) get away she passes a journey to uncover this old rival that matches her straight but though the blood and heres is the mind so he he mind versus using pysical words here so the new v has a better chance of destroying this guy but at the end it turned out that the demented guy has some good left in him and ended the evil virus created blood bond him saving the would and this creating a new peace between mutants and the already none mutants bye the way it was he who made the virus and got the first bit infection thus the other people thought it was a goody good other doctor... well i must say this storry is really action packed and has droids and all those good biomecanic tool handy i hope i gave you some inspiration on making another story based on the info that i gave you since its odvious i have to writting style i only play it in my head... well chow chow and i really loved reading your shadowbaby storry really hope you finish it soon...
| Title: Shinu 13th Sage Sage of Pain(not logged in... NUUUU)
Reviewed By: Shinu 13th Sage Sage of Pain [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2008 23:36 CST
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MARVELOUS! I would so go with them, too! John is going to hate me! (giggles) but anywho! This should be lots of fun to read, and I loved it! Keep it up!
| Title: Any more?
Reviewed By: Shinu 13th Sage Sage of Pain(not logged in -_-;;;) On: December 06, 2007 16:56 CST
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Hey! What happened? There isn't any more! What happened to it! ::gets sad:: I hope you update soon... and that my computers aren't stupid and don't bar me from it...
| Title: I love you, woman!!
Reviewed By: Shinu 13th Sage Sage of Pain [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2006 23:16 CST
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You're the best. You've nailed me to a T. Marvelous. And that is exactly the kind of thing that I'd pull on John!!! You're the best!! ::kisses your cheek:: Anywho, I love the way you portray Mona, and me. Lurrrr!!!!! Sorry, that's my new phrase!! I'm trying to get stuff done... I'd do more, but my teacher has my book. GAH!!!
| Title: LURVES to Mona!
Reviewed By: Shinu 13th Sage Sage of Pain [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2006 10:08 CDT
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YAY! Mona's perfect. That's her exact attitude. You're amazing. I think Mona would like it too. It's really cool. Simply wonderful! And like I said, I'm reading this at school today. It's not quite really school, the bell hasn't rung yet, but it's still school. I like this. It's simply amazing. :hugs DAOD: Keep it up!
| Reviewed By: Shinu 13th Sage Sage of Pain [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2006 00:09 CDT
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Very action packed! I'm working on reading that poem for you. THanks for reviewing other things too! Really, I like to find a kindred spirit in a writer. I enjoyed this. Hope the next is just as good.
| Title: A Stunned Silence
Reviewed By: Shinu 13th Sage Sage of Pain [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2006 01:49 CDT
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Have you ever thought about being a novelist? Seriously? This is amazing! I mean, it's not the BEST I've ever read, but it's pretty hard to live up to Orson Scott Card and Anne McAffrey. Just work on your spellings a bit and you'll go far. I really think that people would read this if you put it out there, got it published. I'm really eager to find out what happens next. Thanks for reviewing my poem, by the way. What did you think of Kcayryn's Lament? It's a bit confusing, I know, but actually, I'm trying to create a story around Kcayryn. He's got a really sad past. The poem is about his dead fiance, and how he would've killed himself if it hadn't have been for Zedric and his promise to her. I write so morbidly lately.... ::sighs:: And now I'm just babbling at you. Seriously, this is wonderful. I like it. I hope you update soon, because this is absolutlely amazing. If it were a novel, I would read it. If you'd like to get in contact with me, feel free to email me at japanesedragonofchina@hotmail.com. This is simply amazing!
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