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Title: And the end arrived...
Reviewed By: midcat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2010 05:43 CDT
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Well, I made it, and all I can say is that there is a sad smile in my face by now; it was sad to see Inu go, specially after all his suffering for Kagome, but he died doing something he always wanted to do (protect those important to him) and that took some of the edge away from the sadness. It's a bittersweet ending for me, because I felt sad for him & Rin, but it also warmed my heart to see the children and the legacy that he left behind. The love between Kagome & Sesshomaru stood death and time and everything in between, so that made the sweet part of the story, and the epilogue was just the perfect ending to a wonderful story! I look forward to more from you and wish you the best this life has to offer!! Thank you for writing, thank you for sharing and thank you for making all our heart strings vibrate with so many emotions!! Hugs: MidCat
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Title: Chapter 18 review
Reviewed By: midcat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2010 18:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!! That's the only word that comes to my mind after reading this chapter!! WOW!! It was so full of emotion that I was glued to my screen!! There is so much I could say but I guess that the only way to describe it is AMAZING!! One of the best chapters I have ever read!! And you are right, there is so much pain and anguish that it's hard to figure out who is going to suffer the most!! I also want to commend you on the realistic setting of this chapter in comparison to the chapter that I previously reviewed!! This time everything flowed in such an amazing way nothing could have pried me away from it!! Thank you again for sharing your writing skills with us!!
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Title: Chapter 9 Review Notes
Reviewed By: midcat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2010 15:13 CDT
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So far I love the story, however I just wanted to do a small thing of constructive criticism about this chapter. Usually while reading a story I picture everything in my mind the way the writer wrote it in, however I had a very hard time picturing Kagome standing up between Sesshomaru & Inuyasha right after giving birth to her baby; specially after such a difficult birth; I could see her probably screaming and stopping their actions even crying or throwing something at them, but not standing up. I know this is your story and I will not ever presume to tell you how to write your own story, but in order to make it believable, you must understand that some things could not be possible and would just take away from the story, by making the reader think "What? She did what? After all that?? NO way!!" I was reading the story and the continuity was perfect until that moment and then it was like "We interrupt this story to bring you..." and everything went out the window just to try to make sense of that small detail. As I said before, I love the story so far, and everything was developing nicely, until the aliens came down and Kagome realized that she was actually in love with one of them and decided to do the mating dance in order to show her love! See how that would just make you go "HUH??" Just the same way I went "HUH?" after reading Kagome actually standing up and rushing between Sesshomaru & Inuyasha. In a way, it didn't make sense because my mind kept telling me that it was not possible for a woman that went through such a difficult childbirth to just suddenly stand up and rush to stop a fight. I tell you this as a woman who has witnessed several births and who has given birth to children of her own, so perhaps if you could consider this it would allow you to see that writing that small part took away from the story by distracting some of the readers into thinking of the actual possibility of that happening and the rest of the story. I know it did to me at least because rather than continuing to read, it got me thinking about how unlikely that was to happen, and got me thinking back to my own experiences and the ones I have been part of and trying to see it happening and knowing that the possibility of that actually happen would be slim to none. Sorry for the long ramble, I just wanted to express my opinion on the matter (not that it matters much since the story is already written, but for future reference), that in order to keep the reader glued to the story, you have to make it as believable as possible, so they can relate to the plot and the characters and follow the story flawlessly. Thank you for understanding and once again, I apologize for the long rant. Hugs: Midnight Cat
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Reviewed By: junebug On: July 02, 2008 11:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read Incomplete and staryed this story today.It really has me hooked.
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Reviewed By: Tana-san On: March 27, 2008 04:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there my friend...I'm happy to see you decided to leave this fic on a more happy note. I found it most appropriate. I'm sorry I haven't come acrossed it sooner but so much has been happening in my life that the internet is a rare thing for me right now. Back on Jan. 7th Missouri was hit with tornados that put us on the national news. My family and I were home in our mobile home when 2 come out of no where and took our home, 3 vehicles and the roof off our barn. We lost alot but we are all alive and have ben moving from place to place as we have received little help with housing. It's truly a long story and we've learned that alot of people want to scam you after a traumatic thing as this and the "so called" government help like FEMA are nothing when these things happen. Red Cross gave us a card for $1,500 to get necessities and that was it. We called and wrote so many places and spoke to so many organizations, churches and such; nothing. After the first week and a half the man power of helpers my husband had no longer came. The weather turned bitter and rainy then freezing. I got the flu and the trauma threw the fibromyalgia and chronic fatigue into full gear. I fought to help as much as I could but my mom and I were really no help at all. Basically my husband, daughter and older sister and her girl friend were the only ones left to get anything done. But after 3 months of turmoil we've ended up in an apartment in Springfield and are awaiting the set up of our new manufactured home. It's a 2007, 3 bdrm, 2 bath, 28' by 60' home that cost us almost all the money Mom had insurance for. We believe my dad before he died did something to the policy so it wasn't very much. It's all going to be ok though because God is good all the time and we're alive to prove it. Did I tell you we were in the mobile home when we were hit? Hmmm, yeah and I never want to do THAT again!!! I get very little time to get online,usually just to pay bills but I just had to peek through to see if I could find something short to read before sleeping. My heart doctor increased one of my BP meds and and my family MD changed my pain and muscle meds so this keeps me fighting just to stay awake. Just as soon as the new place is home and I don't have to borrow someone's phone line, I'll be back to my reading again. Can't wait to read your new fic. Doesn't matter if it's S/K or I/K I'll read it because of your talent as a writer even tho I prefer S/K. I miss you all and my fics desparately and 2 of my fic writers actually worried enough to write my email to see if I was alive and well. Made me feel special, you know? I read their stuff on a daily basis and never miss an update so I guess I made real friends. You know, the friends I had here never called, stopped at the property or wrote me to see how I was. Ain't that a kick in the heart? We were all over the news and in the papers...makes me see the truth about some people. Out of sight, IS out of mind. At least my fanfic world friends care. Thanks for always being my friend, Langus. Take care and hopefully by the end of April I'll be back in full swing with reading and reviewing. Sorry to use this for personal note but I lost your email. Can you write me back? v-lazar@sbcglobal.net I have to pay bills weekly so I borrow a phone line and check my email too. Love and many gentle hugs, JEN
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Reviewed By: Katana_Kiba_63 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2008 18:18 CST
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that was definitely just that little something this fic needed to wrap itself up. this one goes in my top 10. : )
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Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2008 07:17 CST
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*crazy applause* Fabulous! Perfect ending. See, just needed that little something. And I love that they named their second child after Yash. Very touching. Now you can focus on LSR! Woo hoo!
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Reviewed By: Katana_Kiba_63 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2007 16:27 CDT
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I'd suggest an epilouge, going and getting permision from Takahashi-sensei, then making these stories into real books. Any InuYasha fan with half a brain would love them!
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Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2007 07:08 CDT
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I say go for the epilogue. *Sniffles* You really did kill him, didn't you? Well, that just sucks. But I understand plot-wise. Things could never be settled betweeen Kags and Inu - they'd always have that connection, and it would always piss of Fluffy. Yeah, nice neat little epilogue, something... happy and light.
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Reviewed By: Tana-san On: October 05, 2007 04:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm, if it must end here it was done sufficently enough to answer most questions and understand what Sesshoumaru had done when he changed time. No matter what anyone else might say, I totally love these 2 fics and I just hope that you will write another. If you do, please email me if you're posting here or at another site. Thanks, Love and hugs, JEN
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Reviewed By: inu_miko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2007 13:46 CDT
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i really loved this story although i do believe it is a good way to end it. if you choose to write more...i will read it.
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Title: inu_miko
Reviewed By: inu_miko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2007 22:13 CDT
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i love your story. you had me confused for awhile but i got through it. i hope you update soon. and i hope school is going good. until next time
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Reviewed By: Katana_Kiba_63 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2007 20:27 CDT
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that last chap (39) had me sobbing by the end! *sniffs* I'm still crying! ...but it was so sweet too....
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Title: loved your story!
Reviewed By: Alexjandra On: September 22, 2007 14:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely loved this story! I read the first and second in just a day. I could not stop reading. It is an addicting story. It was creative and awsome. Please write more!!!!!
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Title: You ARE alive! Yay!
Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2007 20:28 CDT
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Hmmm... interesting... gotta love Fluffy's resolution to keep her! He has that level head I envy! No impulsive behavior... haha... except that damn temper... anywhoodle, i know how that whole life thing goes... glad you came back to it
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Reviewed By: Tana-san On: September 19, 2007 08:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've had no worries that you would update. You have come too far with these fics to let them go and though we all appreciate quicker updates, you must keep your life on the other side of this world alive. This fic just keeps getting more intense and interesting with each new update. I couldn't possibly forget to look in to see if there's a new post. So now Sesshoumaru is having an inner battle with himself at the time of the battle...near death experience? I say slap the old dog, put a muzzle on him and put him back into his cage. That dog didn't know the whole truth about Kagome and her so called adultery. Life happens and sometimes things get screwed up. He didn't bother to show his master what HE did to hurt Kagome. He showed him only what he wanted to. I was glad Sesshoumaru put the dog in his place. I'll be looking forward to the next update. Hugs, JEN
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Reviewed By: Katana_Kiba_63 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 16:51 CDT
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And oh yeah... Kibo- Fred died, George just lost an ear, remember?
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Reviewed By: Katana_Kiba_63 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 16:50 CDT
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*sniffles* You killed off InuYasha!!!!!! Please update soon... and bring him back! You brought Kagome back, and your such a great writer I'm sure you can find a way... *continues flattering author* Well... if that didn't work I don't know what will... still an awesome fic. Don't keep us waiting!
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Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2007 00:09 CDT
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*sniffles* You made me cry! I can't believe you killed him! I mean... i dunno... just all depressed... I understand your plot motivations, but, damn... it's George and Tonks and Lupin all over again... (sorry for the harry potter reference) all this senseless death *sniffles*
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Reviewed By: Tana-san On: August 01, 2007 00:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woah... I didn't see that coming at all. I cried for Kagome. There she was with both the men in her life on deaths door and she couldn't do a dang thing for either one. It makes it harder for her knowing they both fought to protect her. It's also kind of sad knowing that Inuyasha and Rin won't have a future either. I really liked that coupling. I only wish more people would read these two fics. You have created such a wonderful and entertaining story here. It's filled with love, hate, drama, adventure, suspence...I am just saddened that more haven't reviewed. I know alot read but it's always such a gift to know if they like it or not. I don't get it. The actual writers with talent get less attention than those who are hardly talented at all. I just wish for you to know that I am happy to have found your talent and be able to encourage you on. I think I told you I read this one first and then just had to go read the first. I had never had a fic bring out so much emotion in me as this did. I'm glad you are finishing it and polishing it up because I for one intend to keep it. You are amazing. Hugs...Jen
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Reviewed By: dark_fairy_danica On: July 31, 2007 00:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
thanx somuch for finally updating, you don't know long I have waited for it. so how many more chapters until it's done? eitherway I am looking forward to reading it!
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Reviewed By: Tana-san On: June 21, 2007 05:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello my friend. I'm sorry for the delay in reviewing but I've been going thru the chronic fatigue part of my disabilities and my laptop got sick and was sent away to the doctor. Seemed like forever getting it back. I had to share my daughter's desktop in the living room and the chair irriates my tailbone sending emmence pain thru the damaged discs in my spinal cord. So, needless to say, my sharing her comp was close to nill. My laptop is back and I'm happily back in my bed playing catch up in between long sleep sessions. I was so thrilled to see that you updated and I caught the Star Trek reference and laughed. Thanks for remembering me. Does Sesshoumaru even realize that he's actually changed time? I am such a ditz right now, but I'll eventually catch on. You're doing a marvelous job with this. I so impressed with your ability to bring Kagome back in such a new and different way. I can't wait to see what changes occur. Can you please send me an email when you update? This whole saga is a very special fic to me and I'd like to give you a prompt reply after I read it. Thanks. Jen
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Reviewed By: dark_fairy_danica On: May 27, 2007 22:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I rated your fanfic an almost 10 becaue I honestly love this story it's even better than the first story 'Incomplete'. I hope you write another few chapters quickly I can't wait for them! p.s. the chapter when kagome dies made me cry that's how good your writing is! have you ever considered writing romance novels for a living? Update soon please! Thank You!
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Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2007 20:47 CDT
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So Yash never became a hanyou again, they never had an affair, and Akira was never born? You didn't say you were going back that far! Took me a minute... when you mentioned Yash becoming human and marrying the village girl, I finally caught on, but before was thinking "where's Akira?" Hmmm... can't wait to see where you go next!
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Reviewed By: Tana-san On: May 15, 2007 09:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Does this mean she's back or just in the afterlife remembering? I still haven't a clue as to how you can bring her back without messing with the time continueum. It's always exciting to see how you girls make all these things seem plausable. Maybe you should be writing for Star Trek and Stargate SG1. They always got me with the space and time continueum thing. Does make one wonder though. I'm a trekkie from way back and sci fi is another interest of mine. Can't seem to ever get my head into the real world. But then again, for me, the real world is such a bore.[my disabilities will never truly heal but I've learned to accept it and go with the flow] Your fics and others like you keep me ALIVE and wanting to go on. I truly thank you for that. As I told Rinseternalsoul, "I am so very grateful that you give your wonderful talents to us for free" and I am. To live through your imagination is such a gift to me. Thanks for emailing me when I sent you a personal message through ASS.net. I won't tell anyone. I was merely curious because these two fics are so amazing and emotional. This one especially. And I've noticed that each site seems to have their own fanbase but me, I tend to bounce between ASS.net/ AFF.net/ MediaMiner.org and FF.net. [Though FF.net is too tame for my hentai side.] But anyway, I think maybe I might be rambling on too much. Oh and yeah...I like that we share the same name. So, till the next posting...Hugs, Jen
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Reviewed By: half cat demon kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2007 17:02 CDT
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Ahhhh Noooo!!! I know you probably didn't mean to but THAT WAS THE WORST CLIFFY I EVER MET!!!! Sesshomaru is going to battle, the castle is under attack, and KAGOME IS ALIVE!!!! I need to know more, so please please please please please please please please please please please update soon\(^_^)/
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Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2007 05:57 CDT
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Sooo... can't have a happy ending, can you? Kags is finally back, but now you're gonna kill Fluffy? Then what? Or is that the purpose of part 3 perhaps? To bring back Fluffy? But it did leave me feeling all warm and squishy inside, so yay!
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Title: I LOVE THIS FIC
Reviewed By: Stusokei Wolf Miko [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2007 18:00 CDT
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I just wanted to tell you that i absolutley love this fic, it gives me a different point of view of life, serprisingly. but it also made me cry. a though also came to me. If Inuyasha was a good father than Kagome wouldn't die i doubt that you'll do it but i was thinking why not continue this sometime and show how it could be but then i know not all endings are happy and i'm rather content with it, i just wanted to say what i felt had to be done for a while if i hadn't allredy. by the way I know I'm a bad speller so pleas be nice. Thank you for making such a great piece of work I'v recamended this fic to a few friends. so i guess the last part i should say is goodbye! ^-^
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Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2007 16:24 CDT
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Awww... *wipes tear* sweet and sappy... How do I think Kags is going to come back? That'd take waaay too long to explain... it involves Akira not being all "my dad hates me" and not wanting to steal the sword in the first place, which means Fluffy's going to have to be nicer to him... and as far as her "reappearance", well... how to describe it... ever seen the Butterfly Effect? continue the story until the point of Kags death, but have Yash stop Akira... or stop Kags and his younger self when they first come through the well... or however you're envisioning it to have her not die... then do the fast forward like in that movie, showing flashes of scenes with Kags alive, until you return to the present again, with all alive and well and safely in the palace together... add sweet and sappy ending, and voila! ok, I'll stop now, but you asked for it! haha Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: half cat demon kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 22:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another great chapter! I'm so glad that you've updated, You are doing great work and i can't wait for Kagome's super awesome comeback!!!!
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