| "Camouflage" Reviews/Comments [ 27 ] |
Reviewed By: lexylou [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2011 06:19 EDT
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I think this fic had a really great beginning. I'm all for Bulma being a bad a**. 'KICK BUTT' ANIME GIRLS ROCK!! I hope to see more in the future |
Title: ch6
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2008 15:34 EDT
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My oh my, what a tale you weave, I had to read all the chapters in one go, as I couldn't tear my eyes away from it. Gosh I need to know what happens next I am so drawn in to the world you have created, I can't wait for the next chapter. I wonder what you have in store for Bulma, and just what does she have planned for the future, what does the resistance mean, and will Goku play a part in Vegeta's downfall along with Bulma. There's so much happening so much to look forward to!
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Title: prologue
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2008 12:52 EDT
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Wow, this story is fantastic, so original and exciting. I can't believe Vegeta, and yet at the same time, I can, how sinister of him, can't wait to find out what happens next
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Reviewed By: sfdkjlsfdjklsdf On: February 13, 2008 14:10 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: luvs it! On: May 26, 2007 02:33 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good!! Please update soon please!!!
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Reviewed By: Mely On: May 22, 2007 02:12 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! Great way to end the chapter. So will Bulma get back at Vegeta? I guess I'll have to stay tuned. I look forward to reading more.
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Reviewed By: Mely On: May 22, 2007 01:50 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter!!! Things are getting pretty interesting. I'm off to read the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Ravenreux [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2007 19:02 EDT
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Simply amazing...You write a great story. It's extremely detailed, but not in a maddeningly mundane way. It in no way distracts from what going on and I love that. I really enjoyed Bulma's perspective on the circumstances and of Vegeta, and that she refuses to allow herself to be overwhelmed by him. I'm glad she's not just going to just lie down and disappear. I'm very curious about the resistance that is sprouting up, and just how hard it's going to push the Prince's patience. Tying in that part learning from Frieza was something I don't think a lot of people do. Ok, there's only one more piece I'm going to add to this novel- and it's just how painfully tragic Goku is in this fic. It's like you just want to put him in a bubble and protect him from the hideousness of society. I loved it! Sorry if this is like a fic all in itself..I ramble. Can't wait for more! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Ravenreux [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2007 23:40 EDT
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uh-huh, yep...i love where this is going. The interaction between Veggie and Bulma is kindling just waiting for the spark, really love how you've portrayed his mindset..excellent. I'm glad Chichi made a reappearance too, side characters always make for wonderful happenings. I have to say that besides V&B, Piccolo would have to be my next fav...his attitude is great fun to read. I normally post on ff.net, but I saw it on here first. Can't wait for the next update! ^_^
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Reviewed By: kellya On: March 13, 2007 00:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update soon! it haven;t read this since december so it was awesome to get to read 4 chapters in a row! now i want more!!!
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Reviewed By: Feenux On: February 22, 2007 14:13 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
holy shit this is good.. i noticed it takes a while to update chapters, but i assume because you're perfecting this awesome story :)
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Reviewed By: Mely On: February 14, 2007 01:50 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are good! You sure know how to write a story. I can't wait to see what happens to Bulma.
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Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2007 10:36 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! What a story you have weaved here! This one is definitely going on my favorites list! I agree with your other reviewers, the character development in this story is amazing. And Vegeta is sooo bad ass! I can't wait to see what happens next. Will Bulma give in to her dark side?! I must admit, I wasn't crazy about Vegeta using cocaine but given the fact that Piccolo and Goku can't sense any traces of good or honor left in him, I can go along with the idea. I also like the first person writing you're doing. I also enjoy your development of Piccolo and the role he has to play in this world you've created. All around great character development. I read Unfaithful a while back and I must say that I am impressed with the range of creativity and difference between both of the stories. Not everyone can write two totally different stories, with completely different universes and they both come together so well. Great job! Please continue!
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Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: Katiefoolery [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2007 05:14 EST
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And my worst fears from that cliff-hanger are confirmed! This makes the situation rather fascinating indeed. I liked the fact that this chapter was written entirely from three different first person points of view - you managed to offer something new each time without overlapping or repeating anything. I also think it's fascinating the way the characters are dealing with both the changes in others and the changes in themselves.
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Title: Chapter 3
Reviewed By: Katiefoolery [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2007 04:00 EST
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This is just fascinating so far: it's well-written, intriguing and rather suspenseful. I like the way you've put the familiar characters in this dark situation and had them change or stay the same to varying degrees (and according to their character). The sections written in first-person are well-timed and always seem to offer some new insight or understanding of the character who's narrating them. All in all, I'm very much looking forward to the chapters to come.
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Reviewed By: wudelfin [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2007 02:08 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
intersting enough, i see bulma heading a rebellion of some type rather than wallowing in pain. as for the warriors, drugs and alcohol wouldn't be permitted. it dulls the mind as for vegeta. i think he would see it as a weakness. letting a substance control you. however this is a good story.
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Reviewed By: I On: February 03, 2007 09:13 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. I love it. For the love of god, don't Stop, this is amazing.
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Reviewed By: Happy Clam On: February 02, 2007 22:50 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AAAAAHHH!!!!! It's like going to the frigde at 2am looking for that pint of haagendaz only to find THE EMPTY CONTAINER!!!! This is soooo good! I'm so anxious to read the next chapter I could pee my pants!
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Reviewed By: Mely On: January 13, 2007 17:47 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Loving this story so far!
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Title: Title
Reviewed By: Required Name On: December 15, 2006 22:23 EST
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Wow. That's just vicious angst. It's not even the lovey-kind where it can be "repaired" or "mended". Bulma is out to save her own hide. I LOVE IT! It's a very welcome change; Bulma's ruthless; I sense a lot more angst and violence. Joy! Seriously I'm just sucking this up through a straw, so keep writing, you're very good at it. Don't feel rejected by the lack of reviews you get here; it's mm.org, nobody ever reviews. You can at least boast seven, which is more than many people can. So, please continue with your angsty story and the evil Vegeta/ruthless Bulma. Thanks!
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Reviewed By: Mely On: December 14, 2006 03:07 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm loving it. Keep the stories coming!!!
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Reviewed By: chiku [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2006 05:39 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is really brilliant and its only 1 chapter, i hope you keep us on the ropes for a while with this story, (just a thought what if marron (krillins ex) appears, gets killed and vegeta believes it bulma, just a thought) anyway excellent story, please update soon
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Reviewed By: Mely On: December 09, 2006 21:56 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story. You've captured my attention right away. I look forward to reading more.
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Reviewed By: chiku [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2006 15:34 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This sounds like its going to be a really interesting story, you dont get many where vegeta is really evil, im glad your doing this one, update soon
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Title: Title
Reviewed By: Required Name On: December 08, 2006 17:50 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
One word: WOW. I am hooked already. And seriously hoping for a chapter 1...maybe an epic. Seriously, this fic is boiling with potential. Your storyline is the first of its kind, I've never seen a plot like this one regarding B/V. A shitty fic would have had Bulma be a weakling and run off with Vegeta in the beginning. Thank you for not doing that, and giving her some more development than "Bimbo". I also like that she's a strong character - not a phony strong character. I'm sort of glad you've exploited Vegeta's true evil, and he's not a whipped softie. You've seriously taken these characters and you're pushing them to their maximums in character development. I love character development. Regarding your writing style - I love it. Very in-depth, no issues with continuity, and I enjoy the viewpoints of the characters. Goku isn't a moron, he actually has a brain in this fic, and I like that. I really look forward to a B/V reunion and some fun angst, but that's because I'm a B/V shipper bigtime. So, having typed...more than 1000 characters by now, I leave this here for you to read. And I expect an amazing chapter one - on your own time, of course. I give you no deadlines, only support. Thank you thank you thank you for writing this prologue...amazing so far.
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Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2006 09:57 EST
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Very original and creative. It's a welcome change to the norm. Please continue.
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Reviewed By: gina18 On: December 06, 2006 01:48 EST
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Thanks for sharing the story with us. It is different from the other B/V stories I read. I`d like to read more chapters.
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