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Title: Sweet
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2007 12:34 CDT
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I always felt sorry for chichi, just because i knew she had so much love for him. I only hope that gilu knew how much she loved him. very nice oneshot.
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Title: The Commander says "Hi!" :D
Reviewed By: MelizaMac NLI On: April 26, 2007 22:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
Look at you - keeping the faith! I... remember how to spell DBZ. Really! This was very bittersweet, even though it wasn't written about any of my favorite characters. It was honest from her point of view, and the only reason I didn't get choked up is that I know what's in store for ChiChi in a few years. (I really like how you let us know the timeframe of the fic.) Don't let your heavy pans get rusty, ChiChi!
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Reviewed By: Katiefoolery [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2007 22:02 CDT
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*beats self with ruler* I seriously had this lined up next on my list of things to look at. Not that I think there would have been much to suggest - it just flows so well and I really like the way you vary the sentences up. There are a couple of lines that almost rhyme - they have such a good rhythm to them. The only thing I'd suggest is removing those two ellipses towards the end - that final line has enough impact to stand on its own beautifully. :D There's so much in this piece that I keep surprising myself when I look back over it and realise how relatively short it is. It works so well as a glimpse into the impact choices can have on us all.
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