| "Dragons and Perfect Harmony" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Vilkath [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2008 22:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not a horrible idea over all, but nothing feels realistic or normal. Ranma gets dumped in a new world after watching Akane die, and he just goes ho hum I'll name my next kid after you! What kind of BS is that? Either he loves her and can hardly think of marring another girl so quickly, or he didn't really care and wouldn't be making such a promise. Then the rest the first chapter goes on to fix every single one Ranma's problems quickly and painlessly, because every one runs into an all knowing wizard in the middle of a forest willing to give away tons of free techniques and stuff. In the end I don't mind the idea but this story could use a rewrite to make the character interactions and dialog seem more like real people and not card board cut outs reading from a script.
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Reviewed By: Helmus On: October 20, 2007 15:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Enjoyable story here.. not one I have read the likes of before. I look forward to more!
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Reviewed By: jemtlen On: October 12, 2007 20:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
Style is very choppy, almost like a rough draft. originality can't give zero so... though thanks for making me think of fic this is based on I hadn't read it in a while. Not even basically original so not very fun to read. I must say however you appear to be trying so go for it just wing it and see what appears in front of you it may be better than you thought it would be.
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Reviewed By: richexs On: October 10, 2007 00:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice outline for Mordennights Dragon's Bond. Although it appears you did try to make a few changes it still follows the other story almost exactly. If you are going to use another author's work at least give them some credit. If you were to use this as an outline to create a story with it could be quite good. As it is it moves to fast and does not provide enough information to flow properly, it just jumps from scene to scene while making all of Ranma's problems disappear in a poof of smoke.
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Reviewed By: notBald [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2007 05:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
Eum... you lost the Ranma story so you posted a Naruto SI instead? Okay....
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