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Reviewed By: KayAkuma On: January 23, 2009 19:24 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dun, dun, dunnnnn.... lol.. Love the way this story is going. I lost track of it for awhile, then lost my place and was sad that I did because I forgot how good it was! I do have a weird feeling that you're being a 'sneaky little wench' and leading us to believe that Ki is made from Kikyo, and she's really not... Hmmm... Things to ponder.
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2009 16:45 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter!!! Loved these bits... Miroku agreed, and then chuckled. "Who would've thought Naraku would take up residence in an abandoned warehouse? Castles used to be more his style… this just seems cliché. I feel like we're in a dumb American action movie." Kagome rolled her eyes. "You're a youkai. I'm a miko." She fingered the chunk of Shikon around her neck. "We have part of a super-powerful jewel right here with us. You can order plants to do whatever you want… and you don't believe in time travel?" Kagome stared wide-eyed at the girl, obviously incredulous. Ki cocked an eyebrow. "You seem really sure this InuYasha is going to come for you. But my Master told me InuYasha loved me… so why would he be with you? How can you trust him?"
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Reviewed By: Deathmvp [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2009 15:56 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Do not worry about people prdicting where a story is flowing. While it make a story intresting to have surprises in it, it also needs to flow that is logical or it may as well not be a story at all. Very nice work on how it was going. I can not way for the next part. Only think they where missing was shippo to realy be the old crew fighting togher again.
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Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2009 15:53 EST
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beating a white dog: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_AJ0SkbPxAk ♦ or the not so work safe naraku's punishment: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3szNSSyyIgc ~ sorry about not warning you about the spongebob one. ♣ well, kagome tried to warn her. ♥
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2009 14:19 EST
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poor ki, i hope she remembers the truth soon
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2009 04:42 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kagome was purifing Inuyasha?? hmm interesting way for the communcation.. i like it ^___^ hmm i wonder about Ki.. you got me when Naraku said 'Inuyasha loved her' and that her spirit feels like Kikyo.. but I kinda had a feeling that Ki was instead a reincarnation of Kagome.. though Kagome is still alive in that time.. hmm i dont know anymore... :P ill wait for more chapters
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Reviewed By: kodiaqkitten [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2009 00:04 EST
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Da..Da da. Dramatic drumroll! So worth the wait for my wonderful vacation read! I'm glad I saved this one. Bring in the sinister bad guys! Getting really intense in there. Luvs the passion and mushiness between Inu and Kags. Bout time that hanyou got some of his feelings out in the open. Glad to see that the pair has patched some things up, although I am sure they will still have some complications in their relationship. I hope Kagome can reach out and find the softer side of Ki. I am interested in finding out more about Ki's past and her connection with Kagome. Very excited to see what happens when Inu makes his dramatic 'rescue' appearance. Well done and a very exciting read. Looking forward to the next installment!
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Reviewed By: Ai Kisugi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2009 16:07 EST
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Well, I enjoyed your story so far. I feel real bad for Kagome and Inuyasha though. In fact my heart hurt when I read about the well closing and how angry Inuyasha was over it. Please give my favorite duo a happy ending and hopefully the angst will ease up soon. Pretty Please???
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Reviewed By: Ai Kisugi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2009 09:04 EST
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OK. I just read the first chapter and I died laughing. "You broke the jewel again!" That was too hilarious! And he gave her a diamond ring! Oh how sweet, does he have any idea what it signifies? OK I'm reading some more.
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Reviewed By: sesshys_jaded_samuri [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2009 21:12 EST
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Congratulations psycho_chick32 - your story Pack Law has been nominated for Best Romance: Inuyasha/Kagome at the Inuyasha FanGuild for the Fourth Quarter of 2008! This is only the first step in the process though-all nominations have to be seconded in order to reach voting. Furthermore, each nominated story must pass a careful screening process in order to make certain that all stories nominated at the IYFG meet our standards for technical quality. In the event that your story is disqualified for technical reasons, the IYFG offers resources to help you make improvements so that you can appeal the disqualification and have the nomination of your story reinstated. These resources include a Grammar Guide (posted on our website) of helpful hints and common mistakes, as well as a newly created Beta Group to assist you in making any changes you wish to make. You are in no way obligated to use these resources, but they're here for anyone who is interested. If you would like to learn more, keep abreast of your story's progress, or perhaps even join the IYFG and participate in our proceedings yourself, visit our website at Inuyashafanguild.com (or search "Inuyasha FanGuild" if you cannot access the link). And feel free to contact a moderator if you have any questions-their contact info is available on the site. Congratulations again! Sesshys_Jaded_Samuri
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Reviewed By: Ichigohime [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2009 14:42 EST
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of course this would happen when their relationship gets more... stable. XDD. And its just like Kagome to be so trusting.... It almost makes you wanna knock some sense into her! But I suppose it wouldn't be right if she were any other way. I can't wait for the next update!!!
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2009 09:50 EST
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i think it's great that the power of the ring goes both ways. it's not like inuyasha to think that far ahead. now he can have contact with kagome even when they're not together. i still haven't figured out ki beyond the obvious fact that she somehow has at least a part of kikyou's spirit. how naraku came to control her is still a mystery to me. thanks for another great chapter
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Reviewed By: jfeulner [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2009 23:20 EST
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sorry if the last message is a bit jumbled, its 11:19 PM, so my brain is a little fried right now.
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Title: *bow*
Reviewed By: jfeulner [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2009 23:18 EST
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*bow* Thank you for letting me join the pack its nice and its great to meet everyone. This chapter was great, and I love how you can mold things that happened in the series, and actually give them, an actually explanation, like her father's plane crash, and make Rin and Kohaku part of the story. I just have to say one of the few best fanfics out there, and i am behind ya every step. If you guys every have any technical or computer problems, just send me out an email to jfeulner@live.com. Great FANFIC, GREAT STUFF. AWESOME!----------- 888888888---------- Anyone who would like to join me in Nominating Pack law for best Alternate Universe/Alternate Reality please email me at jfeulner@live.com.
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Reviewed By: catbaker [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2009 15:05 EST
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tricky, tricky wench!! I love the spin on the ring/mind/mood meld you did!! That was Brilliant!! Good luck with the IYFG noms...I always hate this part..I feel like I'm constantly on pins waiting for that dreaded DQ axe to fall!! Though I'm only in one catagory so far, it's still really nerve wracking!! I can't wait to see the big 'rescue' and the inevitable fall out from it!
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