| "Naruto Dragon Champion Lemons" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: KPhoenix On: June 14, 2010 01:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is not the best nor the worst naruto lemon I've read/ Though if you truly intended so many lemons from the start. You could have just as easily advanced the age of the rookie twelve to a more suitable age. The whole "Naruto looks physically twenty but is actually twelve really is strange. I haven't read the main story, and I shudder too. I have no problems with your other fics eternal freedom but a fic where NAruto gets all, and I mean all the women to succumb to his charms is just plain weird, and I have to move on from that. shadowisatis@gmail.com
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Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2009 08:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah looks like Kakashi got some Itcha Itcha of his own hehe...lucky bastard another awesome lemon hope you update soon.
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Title: Runon sentences go on and on and on...
Reviewed By: Vassago-Toxicity [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2009 19:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's pretty much one of the only problems I have with this entire fic. You lengthen your sentences to the point of ridiculousness. You use and way too much. Replace, at the very least, half of the ands with a comma or period and then some of the tenses and your story would flow so much more smoothly. There is also an occasional typo (like "their own littler world) or misspelling but nothing really big.
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Title: HOLY SHIT
Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2009 22:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW holy mother of god and all that is mighty that was the most intense and hottest longest lemon I have ever read, I'll be honest with you man I was really hard reading this I think I cum too. Can I ask you a question? while you writting this did you got hard because I know I would damn truly hot. This makes me think that Naruto is the luckiest son of a bitch alive godamn it any men would sell their soul to be in his shoes. I hope I get to see you at fanfiction.net and create an account there that is if you read your reviews because i have a feeling you don't. If you publish your stories in that site you will have thousands of reviews anyway I hope to read more my mentor farewell.
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Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2009 07:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another excelent lemon I amso jealous of Naruto damn so many hot women to do wow can't wait for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: fez On: December 28, 2008 23:48 CST
Comment/Review:
the best naruto lemon written by far keep up the good work :)
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Title: WOW HOLY SHIT
Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2008 19:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG this was the best lemon I have ever read dude I was so hard, it really turn me on I mean who wouldn't with four gorgeous babes like Tsunade, Anko, Kurenai and Shizune damn. I always knew you were the lemon master I swear my allegiance to you mighty lemon master keep writting your awesome stories and your awesome lemons.
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