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| "Urban Concubine" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: Review for Whole Story
Reviewed By: D.K. On: July 05, 2013 17:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sad that you don't have more reviews for this story because it's absolutely amazing! It's nice to see someone writing rare pairings, especially rare pairings involving Yamcha, and writing them so well on top of that. I liked how all three Saiyans had different kinds of things that they liked to get up to with Yamcha, so each sex scene was unique. I'm also impressed that you took the idea that Freeza molested Vegeta and managed to make it so that it wasn't completely cheesy and cliche and also that you didn't try to use it to justify Vegeta's more horrible behavior like many other people do. Also interesting how you depicted Vegeta freaking out when he realized that Yamcha had never been into the first relationship that they had. What else? Oh, I like that Yamcha is basically everyone's "second husband" and they give him gifts and money. Speaking of which, I liked your characterization of Yamcha. I usually think that even after breaking up with Bulma and learning to manage his social anxiety, he might still be awkward around his love interests. Even so, it was interesting to see him being all seductive instead, because he is quite sexy. I bet those other teachers and that hall monitor girl might be pestering Gohan to bring back his handsome "family friend" again so they can drool over him. I guess the other thing I liked was Puar worrying over Yamcha because their friendship is awesome. Anyway, good story. | Reviewed By: fruits_punch_samurai [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2010 03:39 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Excellent work, I loved it. All three (and Yamcha of course) were well portrayed. My personal favorite was the Vegeta part, I can totally see him having some crazy kinks. Yamcha's such a ho!! lol ;)
| Reviewed By: MaraiTrunks [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2009 13:10 EDT
Comment/Review:
Very. Well. Done. One of the most well written, insightful and well-thought out fanfics I've read in a while. Amazing!
| Title: Wow!!
Reviewed By: DBZ4EVA On: July 05, 2009 13:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Loved it. I love Yamcha and personally I found this so enjoyable to read! I think yuhad the different Saiyans personalities down to a T. Well done!! x
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