Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2009 22:45 CDT
Comment/Review:
This was wonderful! A truly original treat. I loved the way you used the theme of drug addiction and added in the element of Hiei's ki being warded. You took it to another level with that. You did a great job of introducing the story with Kurama letting us know that Hiei had already been missing for a month. And you let us know very quickly, too, that Inuyasha had been dead for a year. Poor Kagome was so tortured with guilt for not being there when he was killed. I think it's always important to establish how long someone has been grieving (or has been drugged ^_~) so we know where the characters are in their journey. Nice job! I nearly howled with laughter when Serin said, "Note the boobs, and don't confuse me with that fool." I immediately thought of that picture you drew. ^_^ I was so impressed with the way you had Miroku use the wind tunnel to combat the Dragon of the Darkness Flame. Him having to try to release it seems like a real possibility to me. And I liked the fact that even with his ribs broken and so weak from he drugs that he couldn't think straight, Hiei was still able to call off the dragon. He would hate being used so much that he would do anything in his power to thwart their plans--no matter what the cost to himself. I was absolutely thrilled to see Kohaku show up to protect Shippou and the jewel. (BTW, I love, love, LOVED the identities of the villains in this! The fact that they were facing off against two of their fathers was a nice touch.) I think you did a fabulous job of characterization in this. Kagome always was one to give her enemies a chance and she was always sensitive to someone doing something against their will. She believed Hiei as soon as he told her he wouldn't work with such incompetents. (Which was an awesome line on HIS part characterizationwise.) She immediately had Miroku release him and was ready to nurse him back to health. I loved the image of Hiei lying there with his head in her lap, too. I immediately got the reference to the canon happening with Inuyasha and it made for a really poignant moment. Poor Hiei's hallucinations! He was in some bad shape. Fortunately for him, Kagome was able to remove the ward on his ki so he could finally get better. And I loved Hiei wanting to try to make her happy--if only for a few moments. The lemon scene was beautiful and their confidences in each other were so touching. Naturally, as a fan of the pairing, and them having realized they were from the same time, I was hoping they would see each other again in their time. But, leaving it off with that brilliant line of Kagome's about not wanting to snuff out a wildfire, was really fabulous. It tugged at my heart. I loved it! This one ranks high on my list of faves.
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