| "never say godbye" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: Kya77 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2004 03:54 CDT
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That was great!!! I could only find minor grammer errors. If you are not a native english speaker then don't worry about minor errors, even I as a native english speaker mess up when writing. As far as your negative reviewers come on people it's a fic. And to tell the truth since it was Hitomi's second child she probably knew she was pregnant because of past experices. Your fic is great don't let anyone tell you otherwise. Stay encouraged to write.
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Reviewed By: Seryn Le Paige On: August 01, 2003 17:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey! i find ur story interesting, and yet very unique better then ErieDragon. her stuff are worst then urs. though i'm bad in english cuz i'm still learning. Eriedragon spelling and grammars might be good. but her idea and creativity are not half as good as urs. please continuing on updating. don't listen to those people;just because their jealous and can't do better. just laugh in their face for they are bitches and whores. |
Reviewed By: Wreeth [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2003 14:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm only dissing it because, while it provided me with a lot of laughs, it makes me want to CRY at the same time. How much money is being devoted to education these days, anyway? However much it is, it isn't enough! |
Reviewed By: Sailor Centauri [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2003 23:15 CST
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How can any of you diss this story! I think it's great! |
Reviewed By: Millenia [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2003 15:47 CST
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to all that dissed and will diss this story...SHUT UP! This was very well done. |
Reviewed By: Candy On: December 11, 2002 22:00 CST
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Look I saw some of the reviews and I had to say something. I haven't read the fic but it is a lot better, just by taking a glance at it, than many fics I've seen At least they are trying. And if you can't say anything to help then shut up and don't read the story!! I am bad at english, and I know there are others just as bad or worse. I just tell them you might want to work on some spelling and grammar. Just rememebr some kids aren't as smart as you and it takes longer for them to apply what they have learned.
Jesters, keep writing and have fun with it! Don't let others get you down, they are to scared anyway to say who they are! Great story can't wait for the next chapter! |
Reviewed By: Vegetas Gyal [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2002 17:25 CST
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That was completely and utterly disgusting. I've never seen such terrible writing. Although a spell and grammar checker may be something you've never once used before, it's not that hard to figure out how they work. You should try it.
Morning sickness doesn't occur the day after intercourse. Are you fucking retarded?
Oh, and by the way, if you think Orgyo, ErieDragon or I can't do any better, go check out our stuff. I can't speak for Squall'sScar or I think i'm going to be sick, but I think everyone's writing is better than yours. The author would have to be in first grade in order to do a worse job.
I would be ashamed to post this on the internet. Good thing it's not mine. |
Reviewed By: Orgyo. On: December 03, 2002 17:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was... pretty bad.
Y'see, normally I'd give you some tips, but in the beginning, you showed arrogance. But you don't even have anything to pack it up. If I could train my penis into holding a pen, it would put this story to shame.
Keep trying. |
Reviewed By: ErieDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2002 17:07 CST
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It's spelled "Goodbye," hon. :P And in a proper title (i.e. story title and chapter titles), all non-articles are capitalized. Also, when a new person is speaking, always start a new paragraph, or start a new paragraph when the idea changes. Don't use numbers in proper writing
(i.e. writing "eight" instead of 8). Also, a grammatically correct sentence has a noun and verb, and don't use "but" or "because" clauses unless you have something to balance it out. Spell check and brushing up on fragments, comma splicing, and run ons might be good, as well as punctuation.
More on content.. Don't just jump into it. How was Yaki born? Why did Hitomi come back? You really need to describe more and just.. take fifth grade English. Come on.
Well, I'm not going to be sick, but it suddenly gives ME new inspiration to write. O.O |
Reviewed By: I think I'm going to be sick On: November 14, 2002 12:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Carriage returns, punctuation, and spell check. I know they're alien concepts, but give them a try anyway. I have a headache after reading this, and my lunch is threatening to remove itself from my body in a most unpleasant manner.
The only reason I would point another person to this story would be if he or she either needed a good long laugh, or if I was using it in an object lesson on how not to write. |
Reviewed By: Squall'sScar [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2002 12:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was very touching. I enjoyed it. I'm not a fan of Van and Hitomi, but it was nice to read. |
Reviewed By: Sheenagami [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2002 20:06 CST
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i never read it yet because i'm lazy ^_^0 anyway i think you deserve some nice reviews! after all it is almost christmas...... if you want you can get ride of your flames .... maybe they have a grudge...... i'll read it now ^_^ i hate to make people feel bad 'cause i hate flames myself.... actually there was this one flame that was funny 'cause it said i should get a life and a job... and it said i was a bitch.... ^___________^ it was funny! |
