Reviewed By: D-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2001 13:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the idea of this fic. I haven't read the whole thing, but I intend to over Christmas break.
A little suggestion: Break up your paragraphs a little bit more. The first paragraph in the first chapter especially. It changed subjects drastically.
Some praise: You have really good descriptions. I can "see" the story. I also like how your fic is kind of fast-paced. I for some reason, like a fast story that doesn't dwell on stupid things. :)
Good job!
~D-chan
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