| "sweet slumber" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Title: to the fic Sweet Slumber
Reviewed By: Vanessa S. Quest On: April 30, 2004 10:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this story very much! I hope you write more Aya x Omi soon, too few of people write it, let alone as well as you did. Please don't keep me waiting. Now onto the scoring: Style - 9 out of 10, you used some phrases a bit too much and had two or three sentences that like, half-way through repeated itself unnecessarily. Spelling and Grammar was perfect, I loved the originality (though some of the earlier angst made me almost cry, kudos!) enjoyment I'd give it a 20 if I could... and that is why your Over-all rating is a ten. ^_^
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Reviewed By: kamibukurosama [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2003 09:27 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^___^ congrats, that was a wonderful fic and i thought the ending was sweet. the lemon helps too ^_~
kami-chan |
Reviewed By: IcaBob On: February 08, 2003 20:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOU MUST CONTINUE SOON!!!
Love & Peace |
Reviewed By: kamibukurosama [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2003 22:13 CST
Comment/Review:
oh wow, poor omi! ;_; That's certainly a good way to get Aya to feel guilty ^^;;
XP that was short! you'll update soon for us all, riight? *chibi eyes*
kami-chan |
Reviewed By: madame_knight [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2003 10:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is getting really good! The fourth chapter was so angsty! You have to have it start to go sweet soon! Awesome work....please continue! |
Reviewed By: Akari-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2003 02:44 CST
Comment/Review:
Poor Omittchi ;-;
Make it better soon please! |
Reviewed By: kamibukurosama [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2003 16:25 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
oh woow, poor Omi! *bops Aya hard on the head* This is a wonderfully angsty fic and that scene back there was hot! Oroo? I reviewed the last two chapters! Mou, why didn't it show up? Evil mm.org slow server! ^^;;
update soon!
kami-chan |
Reviewed By: Angel~Rinoa [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2003 19:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
... *sniff* Poor Omi. WAAAIIII! He didn't get his Aya-kun!!! You must write the thrid chapter. I understand what kind of situation you're going through with classes and such. Pain in the arse...@.@ It's still a good story! Update soon!
- Angel ^_~ |
Reviewed By: Jade Green [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2003 13:32 CST
Comment/Review:
*whimpers* Poor Omi.... *cuddles the little bishounen* Bad Aya! *baps Aya on the head* You bad bad man! |
Reviewed By: Hiruseki [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2003 15:25 CST
Comment/Review:
aaaah O_O *hits the evil aya* oO .. *cuddles omi-kun* ..
this lemon was veeeeery good ^^" OO
but... Oo continue soon OO *pleads* this is really genius.. and yes, I'm dying for the next chapter too OO" |
Reviewed By: Sugar Honey [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2003 04:37 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
*gapes for several minutes* Wow... I'm dying for the next chapter!!! O_O Don't leave me suspended like this! *gets down on knees and begs* I need some Aya x Omi action!!
Very cute description of Omi, btw. ^.^ That outfit is just so cute on him! ^o~ |
Reviewed By: Jade Green [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2003 01:39 CST
Comment/Review:
Awwwwww... kawa~ii! *huggles Aya and Omi* |
