| "out in the rain *lemon*" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: Vilkath [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2007 15:05 CST
Comment/Review:
It's a bit old but I just felt I had to leave a review. Like many people say, a non Yaoi is just to rare. Which is funny, there are a lot of atractive women in the show. Still this story could use work if you plan on doing anything else. It has no real plot, rushes huge events of why they like eachother, why she left joey, why she decides to have sex with him. Lemons may be able to surive without plot, but they do benfit from it as well. On the other side the coin, the romantic bits are a bit dry and undescriptive. They run a mix of virgin's rush, and hardened sex adict's doing oral and such on their first time. A story can go without plot, or graphic and detail sex scenes, but I feel it can't do without both. If you or anyone reading this plans on writing a lemon try reading something like Eva's Homebodies. It's one the hottest lemons I've ever read, and it still has a plot.
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Reviewed By: Melvin On: July 25, 2003 22:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah! finaly some NON yaoi yu-gi-oh! with mai!
i always love it when the older woman get's paired with the younger guy!
and to the guy flaming you for pairing mai with somebody other than joey,
just be glad it wasn't a joey/seto yaoi fic! |
Reviewed By: Lenoh [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2003 17:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
...but you need to fix the grammar and the pace of the story.
This is the first fic that I've thought about re-forming into a gramatically correct fan-fic. That's not necessarily a bad thing ^_~ |
Reviewed By: hey it's me... i'm here On: May 06, 2003 12:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
cool alex very cool |
Reviewed By: rohan On: April 17, 2003 13:31 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
great fanfic. hope u make another 1 just like this |
Reviewed By: True Dark Zero [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2003 11:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU !!!!!!!!!!!!! Finally a yu gi oh story with no yaoi thank god. If I knew where you lived I would send you a million dollars!!! ( if i ever had that much money ) |
Reviewed By: rohan On: April 15, 2003 05:28 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story. |
Reviewed By: MaujinVader [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2003 12:42 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
good lemon, but come on thats just mean, mai was cheating on joey for a year. cruel very cruel. despite that it was pretty good |
Reviewed By: AnimeAna [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2003 19:49 CST
Comment/Review:
This should definitely be rated R or NC-17 |
