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| "Payback" Reviews/Comments [ 93 ] | | Pages (7): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 › » ] | Title: Payback
Reviewed By: lightsaber On: August 18, 2004 21:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
can't wait for more,please update as soon as possible
| Reviewed By: Enigmatic Magus On: August 02, 2004 13:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The style, 3rd person omniscient, was a good choice, and I like how easily you can switch from one character's thoughts to another without disorienting the reader. Spelling and Grammar were fine, I din't see anything amiss, but I wasn't actively looking (but I'm rather picky, sooo)... This is original, compared to my typical reads... and creative-wise, the most recent chapter was good at explaining something I've been wondering for a while now. Enjoyability... well, it is a lemon, but you've managed to make it a fun lemon, and that I read it all means it was enjoyable. Overall rating... well.. despite what it says, I just averaged it out... yanno? All in all, a fun read, though it gets a bit sticky in places (hah! sticky! get it? Ohh, geeze, I crack myself up... anyway). The only real question I have is about the other "families." Well.. Ranma, anyway. Tenchi, as far as I can tell, is about what I'd expect. but Ranma's little collection would make for an interesting story... how he got it and what second impact meant/did for/to him and everything. I'll be watching for more... I'm not much for the usual lemons, but you've got skill, and you can tell a story, which is a nice change from the standard lemon-writer. Or would that be sub-standard lemon writer? I mean, with my standards.... oh well. Running out of characters. Keep up the good work, dude. I'll be waiting.
| Title: Washu's Lab
Reviewed By: Shadow Megatron [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2004 15:29 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My gods that was indeed a hot chapter Warpwizard. Mwahahaha I can just see Wasdhu trying to Nail Tenshi now heh Until next update Shadow Megatron Out~
| Title: We Bow Before Thee
Reviewed By: KeyTobias5 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2004 15:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*millions upon millions bow before Lord Warpwizard* ALL HAIL LORD WARPWAIZARD! LORD OF HENTAI AND THE MOST PERVERTED OF US ALL! ALL BOW BEFORE HIS PERVERSION! ALL HAIL LORD WARPWAIZARD.............
| Reviewed By: dennisud2015 On: June 17, 2004 11:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well it seems that all three Clans are now spoken for and what really surprisd me was that Ranma was with the Sailor Sensai and not the Endo sisters, Shampoo, Ukyo and Koadachi. But hey that could be another intriguing story to erll later. So far a great storyline and thre super-humen bys who can quench the thirst of even an Alein Pirate or a succubus! Npow that's saying something. Oh and BTW a good correction of chapter fve becoming a dream state as it was getting a bit dark there at the end. Godd Job Warp Wiz! BTW, will you do a Eva only story with Rei and Asuka with Shinjilike your Pokegirl one you have going right now? dennisud
| Title: Woah
Reviewed By: AsUkA_mIsTrEsS On: June 17, 2004 01:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woah is what i got to said for this chapter.
| Reviewed By: pyro12 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2004 18:53 CST
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would you write about the interesting things happening in the bed rooms of the neighbors?
| Reviewed By: Ikari_Shinji On: December 23, 2003 23:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
cool, i really like this better than the rest which i have no idea why but i just do.wait a minute, i don't, oh shit, forget it. That was really cool. one question about chapter called 'Kasumi Cums Onto the Scene', the question is that i don't get how Goshujin-sama is so important for the master and slave part. I just don't get how that is really Important in Japan or it's true at all.well, i have nothing to said about this but Thank and have a Merry Christmas, just that like lord guy.
| Reviewed By: Lord Shinji On: December 22, 2003 20:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story but damn, how long does it take for you to write one damn chapter and right now, i'm reading the fanfic. pokegirl that you told the fanfic reading to read. i really hope that upgrade faster.Thank you and have a very merry Christmas and a happy new year.
| Reviewed By: Guruhoro [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2003 13:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
o/~ Tell me how do you do it, walk me through it... o/~ Dammit, it just keeps getting funnier and hotter! Well that's the natural direction for things to go, but you're making me choke with laughter at the same time my manliness is ripping through my slacks in 'excitement'. The only thing that bugged me was the way Yuki was used. It kind of made me feel sick, because even if it is consentual, there are limits to how much abuse I can stand in a fanfic. Didn't stop me from reading all the way through, however, and you're still on my Favourites list, and there to stay. Good escape from the Three Maidens story line, by the way. A reader who doesn't read your LiveJournal might not have noticed that there was something going on behind the scenes between the chapters. Your slower (than mine) update pace has paid off, since this is without doubt the best lemon I have yet had the 'pleasure' *cough* to read. Ganbatte ne!
| Reviewed By: Lord Ranma On: December 06, 2003 18:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story
| Title: HAWT!
Reviewed By: mastermage [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2003 12:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there Warpwizard! Once again you have given us a taste of your masterful writing, which was once again flawless. That's why you get a 10 for Writing and grammer for this chapter. Now for the rest: There's no doubt about it, this chapter was hot as usual and the sex was well written, but something was still missing. I can't really explain it, but it seems you should really try to leave the plot out of writing your story. This chapter just wasn't as...spicy for lack of better term, as your last ones. That isn't to say it was bad, far from it, just not up to your standard, which is pretty high to begin with. That's why you get an 8 for Creativity this time around. You get only an 7 for the enjoyment factor, because this hopping around between Asuka being awake, Asuka dreaming and asuka being awake but dreaming confused the hell out of me. It took me a second reading to get it (not that I minded *g*). That, coupled with the fact that nothing really happend this chapter, made me give you a 7. Still, overall I give it a 9, because it is still one of the best lemons out there.( probably _the_ best) Well, that's all I got to say. Nice Omake by the way mastermage
| Reviewed By: Lord Ranma On: December 05, 2003 03:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
danm, your story, man, i love it. i hoped that you never, never stop. Farewell, Lord Ranma
| Reviewed By: Showstopper (too lazy to sign in) On: December 01, 2003 11:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sitting here in the college computer lab pretty sick and I find that you updated Payback. You just made my day. Awesome effort from you. I enjoyed the dream deal and Asuka riffing on her own dream in MST3K style and Asuka's guilt about how she treated Shinji and all. You did a good job showing the love between Shinji, Asuka, Mihoshi and Kasumi. Ranma getting with Jupiter (I think) in his sequence as well as Morrigan was a nice touch and it looks like you threw in the Sailor Scouts for good measure. Tenchi's harem was fun as well, though I don't think you mentioned Kiyone in there. She needs some love too. Not sure where you can go after you have Asuka and Shinji visit Washu in the next installment, but I'll be looking forward to it. Keep up the good work and have a good day, :)
| Reviewed By: Priest [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2003 02:24 CST
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this is an interesting chapter is there going to be a chapter 7? I still wanna 'see' every ones reaction to the girls getting pregnant and how they handle that situation... eithre way it is a greate story. Ja-ne =(^_^)=
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