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"Payback" Reviews/Comments [ 93 ]
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 Reviewed By: chichi9000  On: November 28, 2003 04:58 CST
Comment/Review:
the fact that i am even writeing a comment should tell you it was a power ful episode both powerfully good and bad haveing the last two episodes turning out to be just one big dream is wrong and your skiping all the good BDSM stuff in yuki's breaking worse yet you give strong hints and stuff but never delever
 Reviewed By: Kail Blade [MediaMiner Member]  On: November 27, 2003 22:53 CST
Comment/Review:
I loved the ending of Chapter 6 where the three guys were hiding from there wives and trying to figure out a way to have a sex-free holiday. I have to admit though, the dream thing slightly confused me(Im a bit slow, okay?!?), but I think it meant the Three Maidens thing didnt happen, but Asuka is going to talk to Washu about making it happen. Can someone tell me if Im right?
 Title: And the Pulitzer goes to...
Reviewed By: Evanhellion  On: November 27, 2003 22:15 CST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
You know I'm a vet fan, but you have once again raised the bar. Only one question, though. Who ALL was in Ranma's harem? I picked up (I THINK) Sailor Jupiter, possibly borrowed from WHBM, and of course Morrigan Aensland from Darkstalkers. WTF? Who else sleeps in that bed? And no damn wonder Ranma is succumbing to exhaustion, he's married to a godsdamned SUCCUBUS! Tenchi, well... I'm just glad the poor guy didn't get stuck with ALL of his former housemates. And forgive me for being a fact-checking hentai, but where's the PREGNANCIES all this nonstop copulating is bound to produce? Is Mihoshi THAT talented, that she can suck a sperm out halfway up the uterus? Ye gods.
 Reviewed By: dennisud2015  On: November 26, 2003 23:02 CST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
What can I tell you! You did what we thought you could do, Give this stry a creative way to accomidate what you had left hanging in the pervious chapter while still giveing us a huge gob of gratuitous sex. Yet you still gave Asuka the guilt trip she would have gotten and we saw Yuki if she really had joined the household. Still I do like the fact that you made the whole thing a dream and still brought Shinji & Asuka closer together while still maintaning the caring all four of them have. Now comes ...what? Well I'm sure you'll come up with something! dennisud
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Reviewed By: no name  On: November 25, 2003 12:54 CST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
this was good i really hope you write more
 Title: none
Reviewed By: no name  On: November 25, 2003 12:53 CST
Comment/Review:
what thats it well i hope you write more
 Title: Still Going Strong
Reviewed By: Tiek Mo Shet [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 14, 2003 08:59 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Well this continues to be probably one of the best lemon's that I've seen, easily in the league of Aikan Muyo, though for a slightly different reason. AM has a great plot with good sex scenes, Payback has incredible sex scenes with a good plot. It's great and is still getting better. This chapter was top notch, however my favorite is still 3 with 2 close behind, Miho and Kas are two major hotties. This chapter was excellent and managed to avoid one of WW only real problems, his "creative" names for human anatomy, they weren't as jarring this time and didn't seem to be as many. (See Iillicit Liasons Chp 4) To be honest I was a little off put by deciding to bring Yuki into the cast but now I'm ok with it. Honestly I would rather see more members of the three series already involved brought in but then again I'm not writing this. On a final note are Yuki, Jun, and Yuri author created characters or are you pulling them in from somewhere, if so where? (Ed. This got posted in the IL reveiws as well, don't ask me how but it did, something screwy with the log in I guess)
 Reviewed By: someotherguy  On: October 03, 2003 00:37 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Awesome fic, when's the next chapter coming out?
 Title: ....Whoa..
Reviewed By: Cinaril Alaron  On: September 11, 2003 02:47 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10
Comment/Review:
Now, normally I'm not one for laying on rampant praise, usually I'm exacting and strict but... you hit just the right spot, so to say, with your Male-Dom and Multiple Female-subbies.. the way you worded things and set up twists that I really didn't expect made this, to the date, the best Lemonfic I've ever read.. I'm serious.. Random1377 should watch his title of "Lemon Lord" Because you might be stealing it soon with things like this.. whether you want to or not.
 Reviewed By: Magefire  On: August 31, 2003 10:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
Fascinating.... By the way, as I understand it Asuka has some more-or-less-angelic DNA herself (it allows her to pilot). Will we get to see a Berserker Asuka? *debates whether to cheer or hide in a corner whimpering at the concept*
 Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member]  On: August 23, 2003 21:10 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Whoa!

I will say this, This is one of the best lemoms I have ever read.

Why?

1. it has a back story which is unique and entertaining.
2.The Sex scenes are very explative and wildly erotic!
3.The development of the characters here even though they are way OOC are fantatic so much so you want to know what happens next.
4. Finally the genuine feelings the characters have for each other is obvious and well developed.

As you mentioned Ranma and Tenchi's multiple marriages, Will Shinji go the same?
Will we see Ranma and Tenchi's wives and their own stories in this as well?
So far it seems Shinji my have 4 wives in the end but I'm waiting to see what happens next.
Damn good lemon!

dennisud
 Reviewed By: Zaber  On: August 23, 2003 17:10 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Just WOW
 Reviewed By: Showstopper [MediaMiner Member]  On: July 30, 2003 11:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
Nice job with the kinky and fucked up shit you've got going here. You gave good reasoning for why Yuki's addicted to Shinji and also planted potential seeds for discontent between Asuka/Shinji with Asuka's reaction at the end of the chapter. I might have missed it before, but where's Misato? Any Eva lemon has to have her involved in some shape or form. Keep up the good work and have a good day, :)
 Reviewed By: Guruhoro [MediaMiner Member]  On: July 25, 2003 12:27 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is the best stuff. I nearly chocked (yes, literally, on candy) as I read some of the jokes, and the Matrix reference made me fall off my chair. I believe this piece represents the absolute zenith of lemon and humour combination fanfiction, towards which I strive. And, although only recently having found out who Washu actually is, I'm greatly amused by your characterization of her. If I weren't male, I'd probably be making some brave suggestions along the line of the other reviews, but I doubt you'd appreciate it, so I'll just say "I love you, man
 Reviewed By: froop [MediaMiner Member]  On: July 23, 2003 17:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
Once again mighty hawt!

Father my children please. You don't have to love me or anything.
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