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| "Cyber" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: yahsa On: November 08, 2003 16:56 CST
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UPDATE DAM U UPDATE!!!! uhh...did i just say that well will u plz update!!
| Reviewed By: Sourcery [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2003 16:30 CDT
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okay, I think you deserve more reviews coz I am loving the ordinality of this fic. Easy to read, favorite pairing, new storyline...I also liked the chapter being long. Please continue with this, pwease? ^_^ | Reviewed By: Sweetdeily [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2003 07:02 CDT
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You have some facinating ideas in play here, but your style of writing requires more detail, you skim things when you should delve into them, it's important to express character's feelings, as well as touch on the surroundings, textures, colors. I would love to see your work in a more detailed enviroment. You have the creativity, you have the flow, but you're missing the detail that brings us (your beloved readers) to your mind. Your spelling is good and your grammar is trustworthy. I would put this rawness down to an accute lack of responses, you could do with more reviews and helpful hints. Given time, and the right enviroment (maybe even a Beta) your work could be quite amazing.
~.^ I look forward to reading more. |
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