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| "Passions A Prison" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Bluejay2099 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2004 20:08 CST
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Wow, this is really great. I too was begining to get upset at all the Tea bashing. I mean come on, what is there to hate? She's kind and understanding, but most of all she's loyal. I think anyone would be lucky to have a frind like her. Anyways, back to the story. I think it really does sow a lot of potential. The backdrop really make the emotions feel geniune. I can almost feel what it is like to love someone so much and not be loved back. This first part makes a good prolouge, but any further chapters really should be a bit longer. I would personally like to see a happy ending from this, but it is your story so do as you will.
| Reviewed By: tea rocks 2003 On: July 27, 2003 16:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
3 words for you I LOVVVVVE YOU to many people hate tea and i loved you story thank you! | Reviewed By: Angelwater8 On: July 23, 2003 05:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! I'm So glad to find someone who actually likes Tea! (Brings tears to me eyes!) *T_T* It's refreshing, for once, to see someone saying that they like Tea. After seeing "Tea sucks, she's a whore, she needs to die" a couple thousand times, let's just say it's enough to drive anyone crazy. O_O; (It's very intimidating and discouraging how people shoot her down. People really need to keep an open mind. I say this in lighthearted affection. *^_~*)
Your story has great potential in it. I'd say the only thing you need to work on is your style, like how you're writing the story. Maybe you could add a little more dialogue, or expand on details to help your story flow. When I was reading it, I felt that the events happened so quickly. To slow it down maybe you could add a monologue of how Tea or Yugi felt when they were getting married or something. Other wise, I liked it a lot! Keep up the great work, and I look forward to more chapters! Till then...*^_^* | Reviewed By: Cherreh [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2003 18:15 CDT
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Usually I don't like Tea but I think this story is really good. Update it soon! |
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