| "Gay Kagome?" Reviews/Comments [ 29 ] |
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Reviewed By: WildWolf13 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2009 14:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please wright more to this one. Yasha/Kagome
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Reviewed By: GothycCoalChambr [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2005 01:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
i agree with mel x and evil eric. you really need to make the chapters longer. everything is so rushed and jumbled together. this is the reason why the rating is so low. maybe you should think about writing something other than fics, try poetry. i'll check out this fic once in a while to see if it's gotten any better, but at this point and time, i've lost interest.
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Title: RayGirl~
Reviewed By: lalalalalalalalalala On: October 24, 2004 19:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
???Funny! Wrong, but funny! I wnat her to be paired with yasha! No crossovers plz! llolololololol
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Reviewed By: Gwin On: April 10, 2004 19:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
see... if u had longer chapters i wouldn't be rating u badly. so keep writing...btw i would like to see Kagome and Rin be paired up.
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Title: sasafrasstea
Reviewed By: sasafrasstea [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2004 05:34 CST
Comment/Review:
Maybe you could add Darkmystic, Lavonne Moonstar and their children,Dee and Hobie, to your story too.
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Reviewed By: sasafrasstea [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2004 05:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please continue the story so that I can know how you are.
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Reviewed By: sasafrass On: February 25, 2004 20:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please continue the story so that I can know how you are.
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Reviewed By: Sango-chan1 On: February 19, 2004 20:02 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
good i like it but make it more romantic,longer,and i want it kag/san!!^____^ plz!teehee
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Title: dianathevampiricmutant@yahoo.com
Reviewed By: Cerebral Beaver of Condemnation and Furor On: February 16, 2004 23:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your yarn has certain meritorious intent, however after subsequently reading your opus through a sundry of times I came to the resolution that it lacks some very substantial factors to it that would be befitting to modify or annex in order to perfect and improve this story immensly. One factor is the shortage in actual character amassment, there is nothing as of the moment that makes your personages personal or different from frequently authored characters that litter the web. At this juncture in time they are stepping hither and thither in the internet expanse as clichés and sketchy cognizances. Though your fiction may have acquainted one with laconic run-through of what occured, it has in no way articulated, convayed, or even probed as how Kagome and her lineage palpated in such an orientation. I found it disapointing that, with such a setting, you did not make this story concurrent in its stage. It was very disapointing. It is burdensome to attempt to apprehend a tale if it requires the most clear-cut and refined of things such as narrative of the scenery, annals of genealogy, and the analogous. An representative of such a misconstrueity is when Rin-chan stated, "I know you make lots of friends." This was at the same time both out of nature for one you might meet as well as grammatically incorrect. I would counsel to proceed through and revamp it. What I fancy about your anecdote was your attempted perspective in the squib. There lacks a myriad of writes who pen about a homosexual Kagome. I esteem your endeavor to secure the aura of such a thing, I feel your yarn is but a shadow what it could morph into. I sincerely hope you will persist in writing, but with more atmosphere. ~Diana
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Reviewed By: Lonely Knight On: February 08, 2004 21:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay. I probably sound very sappy, but put some romance in. Also, I would like to challange melX. I personally think that this story has some potential, if you make the chapters longer. I'm not joking. I have read lots of romantic fanfics and you have some potential. The only thing I want to tell you is that if you like writing, you'll be good at it. Now, that I have said my piece, I shall switch to my more cheerful side. *Warrior King* Hey! nice story! If you want to know, I think you should pair Kagome with Yasha. Well, good luck!
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Reviewed By: WinterWolf On: February 07, 2004 02:58 CST
Comment/Review:
just have kagome have sex with yasha and rin, though not nessisaraly at the same time
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Reviewed By: Mel X On: February 05, 2004 07:51 CST
Comment/Review:
I second Evil Eric's review. There are a few corrections I would make, though: Style of Writing: 0 Enjoyment Factor: 0 First, your chapters are way to short and the way you keep jumping from scene to scene is terrible, the story doesn't flow smoothly enough. Secondly, people who make their fanfictions with short chapters update much more frequently than you do. I can already see that your starting to lag behind with the updates. And lastly, your story is not interesting enough. Even though I've only read the first three chapters, I can tell that this story is going nowhere, there's no plot, no action, no real standouts that would make people want to read and actual give you good reviews. I would just like to take this moment to say that if anyone (and I can tell by the other reviews --except for evil Eric) wants to challenge me on this: THEN BRING IT ON!
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Reviewed By: ? On: February 05, 2004 00:09 CST
Comment/Review:
so ur gay?
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Reviewed By: 555 and a 666 On: February 04, 2004 21:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
kakome rin
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Reviewed By: gundam17 On: February 04, 2004 20:06 CST
Comment/Review:
kagome/rin
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