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| "Blood tears high" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: good work
Reviewed By: shaggy twin On: June 16, 2004 18:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i give this a ten outa ten cause ive never read stories like this one before i usually think there stupid and this one just looked cool and i was right. NICE WORK KEEP THE UPDATES COMIN!!!
| Title: strangley still logged in...
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2004 18:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay...This latest chapter was a little different. The Pilaf "epsiode" was almost as funy as your first chapter. He was the last character I expected to see as well as his cronies ^_^ *good for you I was clapping all the way through your introduction* I'm trying to get off of the Volcano High kick when it comes to leaving reviews...I am...I noticed that your lead character is the extreme opposite of the movie's lead. He *Kim* was rather shy and uncertain and absolutely did not want any trouble. Your character seems to be looking for it-to a point. That's fine. Oh, yeah (it doesn't matter)I'm a girl so to me it seems like your guy is just a little too much into himself...a little too sure that evryone will somehow like him. What I just said has nothing to do with any comments towards women that appear in this fic-it's just something that I picked up on. His views on Pan and Bulma were rather funny ^_^ especially when he found out that they "belonged" to someone else *sorry, ladies I am using quotes here* I do like the fact that he is confident! His power which involves firing shuriken (throwing "stars")is interesting but I am hoping that there will be a little more to this. Are you going to share some more background info on your character? When/if you feel ready to give some background don't do it all at once, okay? Give hints. Flashbacks don't really need to occur.*ahem* anyway, I'm wondering where you will take this story next. *remembers own high school days* There are so many classes out there to "bash." One thing I might add is that you shouldn't wait around or even ask for reviews. You need to move at your own pace. You'll get reads and reviews regardless!!! This story IS a great crossover type parody!!! Sorry, I noticed that you were going to leave the path of your story up to the reviewer. I'm glad that you moved on ^_^ My ratings are a little lower because I did see a few more spelling mistakes and a couple "dead" words (words that are missing in a sentance). It's nothing that can kill the story, mind you, just something you may want to look back on if you choose to revise (it's all up to you) Well, as stated earlier, keep up the good work!!! I noticed that you have added a bit more detail to the story also while still keeping that script fic feel, again that's fine ^_^ Can't wait to see the next update ^_^ ~sephlier (you should be getting more views and reviews this story is SO worth reading!!!)
| Title: something i forgot...
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2004 19:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
the 5-12 thing should have been ages 5-12 (as far as the younger target audience) and up (being anywhere from people in their 20's to people in their 80's *I have seen them and the WWF used to show them in the audience back in Madison Square Garden-they do exist!!!) I did not mean for that comment to make it sound like wrestling is for people between ages 5 and 12!!! I'm sorry!!! I can be very harsh with words...I did not mean for it to sound the way it did!!! ~sephlier
| Title: Wow...Strike The Welcome Comment I Was Going To Make...
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2004 19:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*still in a daze* I was going to offer a Welcome to Mediaminer but I noticed you have quite a few fics in your inventory. I will indeed find time to read them-I warn you I'm not a DB, BBZ, DBGT (DBZGT) fan anymore but after this my interest is piqued. To be honest I was expecting this to be a rip off of...well...Volcano High (I love that movie)Well a WWF/WCW fan!!! Sorry, sue me if you like, but while I can not see the Rock wrestling a rhino I did grow up in the age where WWF meant World Wrestling Federation *hears chants of "Oh Hell Yeah!"* I've been a fan of Wrestling since I was in the fourth grade. I am wondering if you caught the dubbed MTV feature Volcano High...or at least seen the original movie (which I believe is Korean...could be wrong)...your story has that type of feel to it. Your opening lines are almost similar to it also-after that it all turns out to be quite different and unexpected. You really picked up the "crude-ness" or "brash-ness" of the "Texas Rattlesnake" really well!!! Good job ^_^ I gave you these ratings because: "Style of Writing": Honestly, I tend to frown on script fics. I'm a detail fan. I like to read about how the characters have a swagger to their walk or in this case have double knee bracers because they have been wrestling longer than I have been alive and...not to sound harsh-just don't care anymore about their injuries anymore (they're making money, can be seen by millions of people, and are also helping out a slew of worthy charitable organizations *this would be wrestlers*) I did notice a little detail here and there, though...but it all really depends on you as the author. "Spelling and Grammar": I'm sorry but by putting anything lower I feel like I would be doing some kind of dis-service. I noticed the little "*" on certain words...keepin' it clean-I understand. I didn't notice where you put the rating at. I was too concerned with fighting over the Volcano High issue. I believe it was "PG-13". Did you have it at this rating to retain the value of a comedy while keeping it viewable for all audiences? *that was the feeling I got anyway* I'm sure the *ewww* WWE gets all kinds of viewers to this day from ages 5-12 so I can understand the rating not being "R". As for the last three ratings on the review panel, please understand, I have only read a handful of other fanfictions and have been able to keep reading a select few. Some of the stories that I first came accross were terrible and have scarred me to this day (almost four years later.) The very LAST thing I expected to read was a fic that included one of my favorite wrestlers. This strikes me as being quite original for what I have read *Stone Cold meets anime ^_^ XD* Overall, Enjoyment, Originality all 10's!! I hope you don't mind, I've added you to my favorites!!! I'm sorry that my comment has ended up being rather long. Thank you for proving that this story is not what I expected. If you choose to update I would love to read more!!! If you decide to change your style of writing it's up to you. I will still read this regardless ^_^ ~sephlier
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