Reviewed By: KhaosJester [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2005 09:49 CST
Comment/Review:
the first one was better than the second. bedroom was too complexly worded. say for example material, instead of that word you could have used cloth. i dunno, i just think that threw off the rhythm of the poem. pretty good stil tho. and dont feel too depressed, my moms nephew commited suicide after beating his wife to death with a baseball bat this weekend. now their five children have no mom or dad, and have to be raised by the mothers side of the family: they wont let my side of the family have anything to do with them. on top of that my aunt had a stroke in the same time period. so dont be too sad, cause out there is someone who is worse off than you are. hope that you feel better. ^_^ - KhaosJester
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