| "TAILS BECOMES A DAD" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Title: Sorry again
Reviewed By: Kandy K [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2007 00:05 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, it's me Kaitlin, I'm a member now and just want to say sorry again, it's actually pretty funny. Ok, Very Funnie. So sorry again. (I have a really bad temper)
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Title: HOW RUDE!
Reviewed By: Kaitlin On: June 21, 2007 03:47 CDT
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I FIND IT OFFENSIVE HOW IN CHAPTER 13 YOU MAKE A HISPANIC PERSON LOOK LIKE A CRAZED KILLER! I'M HISPANIC! THIS FIC IS PRETTY GOOD BUT I DON'T KNOW IF YOU THINK ABOUT WHAT YOU TYPE UP! IT HURT ME HOW YOU MADE THE HISPANIC RACE SEEM LIKE CRAZY KILLERS! IF YOU WANT TO APOLOGIZE E-MAIL ME AT kgm0209@yahoo.com
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Reviewed By: Emperor Sun Hai [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2006 15:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read this whole fic and... wow. this fic was really good, i liked it alot, especially the Master Diamond bit. Continue with your writing, your fics are awesome!!
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Reviewed By: the not logged in kattx On: June 10, 2006 03:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
yeah.... I don't have enough characters to give my constructive criticism. so I'll do this instead: and now, the top 10 reasons for you to improve on your next story: 10: make sure your story has a reasonable plotline. if you use multi plotlining again, make sure they all have symmetry to the story. 9: when using celebrities, scramble the names up (eg Ashy Ann Kutter) 8: experiment with satire, especially in pretense to #9 7: when eating fancy, know what drink compliments the dinner 6: when doing superforms of Sonic and crew, proper naming and coloring are a must. Sadly, Hyper Knuckles is pink.... =( 5: when making parts of the story where there's ass to be whooped, detail is fine... but don't make battles seem too one-sided. shift control of EVERY FIGHT to both sides. 4: putting the score of the story into the chapters is just sloppy! nobodoy want to read that waste of space, you can put story in there. if it's a songfic, that's fine. otherwise, remember your story is a fanfic... not a damn musical. if possible, save singing for the END of the story, or for chapters specifically designated for song. 3: don't monologue! whether it's your writing, change in scenery/events in time, or character's speaking about whatever. seriously, no one wants to read story, then "blah blah blah" because of monologues. monologues make stories boring. 2: (and even I have to swallow my pride on this one) don't be afraid to use the god damn dictionary. don't fill your balls up with air trying to guess spelling every word in existence. run your pages through a big dic., deflate your balls (and if it comes to the point, your ego) to their normal size and spell it right. you might even have to pick up a medical dic toproper medicines and procedures like Oxycodone, Oxycodene, Diazepam and Triiodothyronine. and the number one reason to improve on your next story: (drums roll) ......(crashing of cymbals) 1: learn proper use of variation in dialect.
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Title: YAY Scratch's appearance
Reviewed By: Ultimate Life form 101 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2006 21:49 CDT
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Yay when Ivo first gets scratch! I hope Cosmo comes back in the next chapter! ^_^
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Reviewed By: the not logged in kattx On: May 22, 2006 05:05 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope this gets interesting soon, because it's starting to sound like you're running out of ideas here. too many times while reading I would "read some story; blah, blah, blah; read more story; blah, blah, blah; read a funny part; read more story; blah, blah, blah; then come the birth chapter. and I caught up from chapter 8. please... if this story is going somewhere, get there quick. it's starting to sound like you're just rambling on, and that's a bad thing.
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Title: How could you Sonic?
Reviewed By: Ultimate Life form 101 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2006 14:06 CDT
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Sonic betraying Tails? What the Fuck?! ^_^ update soon.
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Title: LOL!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Ultimate Life form 101 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2006 13:10 CDT
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wow dude this is halirious ^_^ ubdate soon!!
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Title: finally i up loaded!!
Reviewed By: DIPLOMATIC_FOX [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2006 17:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
well i up loaded sum mo for ya'll to read!!
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Reviewed By: Lucidangel [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2006 19:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
lol!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! omg this made me laugh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hahaha ^_^ and thanx for the advice u left in your comment on my story, hehe. lol write more stories!!!! you totally Rock!!!
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Reviewed By: kattx [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2006 18:51 CDT
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well, it's decent... keep going and improving as you write.
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Reviewed By: kattx [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2006 17:53 CDT
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hmm... how to say this.... the first four chapters (though you were building plot) were boring as hell. 5 was decent and six is.... decent. I'll read the rest later. Sorry, I just can't read this anymore. and the initials are now WWE. WWF stands for World Wildlife Foundation.
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Title: Amy good girl my ass
Reviewed By: Ultimate Life form 101 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2006 14:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
yeah this shit is tight update soon.
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: Ultimate life form 101 (not logged in) On: April 08, 2006 22:40 CDT
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Yeah i like where this syory is going.
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