| "Beyond the Gate" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: Acire [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2008 11:22 CST
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You know I am good at math thank you! hahaha Wow, its been a while. I got a MM.org update for the first time in years and decided to take a look. For some reason whenever I log in it goes straight to this story. So I read it. Wow, the differences you notice after 3 years, amiright? "Shut up Lin I forgot to put my contacts in this morning!!!" Eri barked. That was so random where you put this in the first chapter! Nothing to do with anything! LOL! But I guess thats how I am huh? Wow! I can't believe how different this site has become.
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Title: AWESOME!!!!!
Reviewed By: MAIDEN OF TIME AND SPACE [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2006 21:59 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
XDXD Sorry for not reviewing before! *read it when you updated* Anyways, AWESOME-NESS!! I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT UPDATE!! Sorry mine is taking so long...ehe..^^UU So update and I'll give you cookies!
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Title: And thank you Lin for making her update!
Reviewed By: Acire [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2006 14:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
I've said it once and I'll say it again... YOUR GRAMMAR IS HORRIBLE!!! Are you by any chance not reading your reviews and listening to these complaints of grammar?? Thats it! From now on your not allowed to post anymore chapters until I proof read it!!! Your missing so many commas! As well, there are so many typos and misspellings and... and... *rips out hair*.... OH MY GAWD!! But other than that, lovely story chika! A little more description for the characters would be nice! For example, Larry and George... should I assume that since you wrote 'hairy men' in your title that George and Larry are hairy? Or maybe Ed grew a beard...? haha! Anywho! GRAMMAR! DETAILS! AND.... Its hard enough to keep up with you 'ED' and the FullMetal Alchemist 'Ed', so please keep the 'D' in your name capitalized and his not! Please! Theres been a couple times where you switched it around. Okay! I'm done ranting... *pulls out a rope, some sharp objects, and a huge cannon then glares at ED* Now how about that fourth chapter? Better get crackin'! hehehehe!
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Title: Grammar!
Reviewed By: oldgreeneyes [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2006 10:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gosh, I don't even know where to begin here. Please work on your grammar. Use commas. Be consistent with character's names and/or learn how to introduce characters and their alternate names. Take more English and writing classes. Read more and get a jist of different writing techniques, character development, and other literary skills. Correct spelling is a must as well. BTW, what is droppingsweat? Is that mean to be two words or one? Okay, enough with the corrective criticism for now. I did find some things funny about the story so far. I'm glad that you're writing here. I think that's its great that you're starting to learn how to express yourself with writing. KEEP IT UP. Don't get boggled down with corrective criticism. Take it for what it's worth. Work on the grammar a bit and KEEP WRITING. I love you and am VERY proud of you. You're the best daughter ever! ;) Love, Daddy
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Title: WOOT!!! (It's Kat ^^)
Reviewed By: MAIDEN OF TIME AND SPACE [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 20:37 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE IT!!!! And I'm in it!!!! Squee!!! *huggles the authoress* You must update soon! *gives you pixie sticks and a Edo plushie* ~Kat
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Title: Woot!
Reviewed By: Acire [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2006 16:02 CDT
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Well. That was very intersting. I love how I was all 'super chick' like. Nice! It was very amusing! However.... oh yeah... you know what's comming.... YOUR GRAMMAR SUCKS!!!! Good grief. Give it to somebody to proof read or something! Check your spelling at least please! Also, remember... dictionary.com.... use the thesaurus and use more words. Your doing better than other fics by not using 'said' a lot, however, now your using 'bellowed' frequently. But other than that. Here is your review. Now you must update like you promised. hah! UPDATE!! I'm very curious as to how it all turns out. ^^ lov ya.
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Title: Ta-Dan~
Reviewed By: PinkVampire [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2006 15:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Eeeedddddddd. xD This is the amazingly untalented Lin here, popping in to comment on this piece of work. ..Firstly, It's amusing. We like amusing things. x3 Secondly.. I'm going to have to doodle fanart for you. Fanart is even better. And thirdly - pleasepleaseplease work on the formatting so the speech is seperated. ;_; It's a big pet peeve of mine and it's keeping me from enjoying your writings. Yeah. ..Otherwise, Alchemist names and chibi doodles ahoy! o_O
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