| "Mako Eyes" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: golden_haired_neko_hanyou [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2007 09:05 CDT
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Oh, the end made me start crying!!! I really can't wait for the sequel. I really loved this story, and although I'm sad to see it go, I'm happy that there's going to be a sequel. ^w^ Yay for sequelness!!! I'm waiting for the sequel.
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Reviewed By: Jello [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2007 23:16 CDT
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Oh my gosh! AWESOMENESS! lol I can't freakin wait for the sequel.. I'll be here looking for it all the time. Very evil with the sneak peek.. those always make me so anxious to find out more and I'm not patient lol It was an awesome story.. I'm a big fan of vincent and if I could I would so marry someone who looked like him in the slightest bit. Anyways Awesome story again, can't wait for the sequel!
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Title: Mako Eyes
Reviewed By: Jello [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2007 21:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have awesome writing skills! I'm on the edge of my seat. Love the new updates. Please update soon!
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Title: Mako Eyed
Reviewed By: Jello [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2007 22:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love your story, can't wait to see what happens =)
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Reviewed By: Savvy0X [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2007 14:23 CDT
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Ok good, I'm glad no one ripped off your stories. Haha I understand the username now lol. This was a great chapter. Personally, if I was Aneilla, I don't think I would want everyone to know what happens to me. Anyways, that was an awesome chapter and I highly anticipate the next one! ~Savvy
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Title: hey
Reviewed By: Temari92 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2007 00:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey i love your story! keep updating ok? i'll tell some of my friends to review for you too!! ^.^
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Reviewed By: golden_haired_neko_hanyou [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 20:17 CDT
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I loved it. But.... -growls- DEMON CLIFFIE!!!!!!!! Haha, can't wait for the next chappie!!!!!! ^^
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Reviewed By: Savvy0X [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 17:21 CDT
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I loved it! As always, the chapter was excellent the writing flawless (as far as I could tell.) I highly anticipate the next one! ~Savvy
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Reviewed By: golden_haired_neko_hanyou [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2007 20:46 CDT
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^^ I love it. Can't wait till the next chappie comes out. I'm glad that I can call your story one of the really good ones. I've had a problem finding an AC-based story, since that was the first exposure I really had to the series -in this case, I don't count Kingdom Hearts since it has pretty much nothing to do with the game series. I like how you write this too. I think that you're really making Aneilla fit in amongst the canon characters, and I've been told -and found out myself sometimes- that it's sometimes hard to write OCs. You're doing a great job and I hope to see more of this story sometime soon!!! ^^
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Reviewed By: Savvy0X [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2007 22:13 CST
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So James can control his power. That's interesting. I wonder when him and Aniella are going to meet. That should be interesting as well. This was a great chapter and I await the next one!
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Reviewed By: Savvy0X [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2007 18:32 CST
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Omg this is awesome! VERY good. It's hard to find good stories for Final Fantasy and some of the less popular games and books and anime on quizilla and Fanfiction.net. This is really good so far and I anticipate the next one!
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Title: Yay, For The Update!
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2006 12:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright! You're back! Great! I haven't read the revision of the first chapter yet-I hope it answers a question I have concerning Red XIII rescuing Aneilla(?). The first chapter had me thinking it was a human being who saved her. Anyway, I found some grammar, punctuation and spelling errors in the two most recent chapters. A lot of the errors will not be found by a spell checker so you need to be careful if you plan on revising. In a couple cases there are words that you don't need. One sentence will mention and object being used and in the next sentence it is still mentioned. I wish I could remember some good examples to point out to you...Ah, well it's nothing serious, though. I just end up being picky on certain matters. I wasn't expecting the end of the last chapter to go like that. I am completely engrossed in this story. You write well you've done pretty well at building up each character! Oh, yeah, I did find one other issue concerning grammar-you've got a mild case of the dreaded "had"s. I learned recently that a lot of sentences do not need "had" in them-in fact a lot of the instances in which that word is prsent it can be removed and your sentence will read that much sharper! (trust me, I have a bad case of the "had"s too and 20 to 30 chapters a fic its not fun!) One of the best things I can think of so far, concerning your story, is that you've got it moving along with Advent Children! I have not seen too many fics that pic up from Advent Children-I like that! Anyway, I'll quit my griping and post this. Keep up the good work! Oh, and thanks again for not being the type of writer who posts a short story chapter and either leaves because they didn't get any reviews or did get feedback but didn't get as many reviews as they wanted.
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Title: Wow, The Review Board Looks Different Now...
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 22:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm...where to start and explain my marks... Not to sound bad but I have no idea what the first reviewer was saying... Anyway, here's what I found: I would like to know what your first version looked like if this has been altered in some way. Square seems to have killed Vincent (not that he wasn't already dead/undead before)for "old school" fans but I'll let my personal view slide because this is about your story. Your style of writing is quite detailed. You do have a lot of detail but I think you are ending up saying too much. You kind of repeat yourself a little. Once you have shed light on something you don't need to keep it going-example would be the fire descriptions. Personally, I like the "phase out phase in" way of story telling-you start out with a subject then you let your reader know what is going on right outside at the same exact moment (I do it myself ^^). *thumbs up* Spelling & Grammar is something that I have problems with as well-we all do. Case in point Say firm and have much power, and you can prevent these disasters." You did mean "stay" right? There are a couple places where the words just don't seem right but you have an excuse-the majority of those words are contained in vocal interactions between your characters. Grammar kind of takes a back seat when it comes to speech-listen to most of the music that is out. -_~ Original/Creativity: I can't rightly say that I know where you are going with this story so you now have a faithful reader in me. I think the fact you have gained a reader/readers means that your story has some sort of creativity to it. My only qualm is that it looks like you are writing this for people who already know VII (one version or another.) That's fine if you are. I've beaten the game many times so you write it and most likely I will catch it. Enjoyment factor: In the beginning, to be honest, I wanted to see how mine own update was coming and saw your fic. The fact that you had just started caught my attention-it was short and promised to continue. Stories that have over a certain number of chapters make me feel inferior-like Naruto (the anime) I can never watch that many episodes in a set amount of time. To continue with the enjoyment factor I'll say that I am curious to find who this savior is mentioned at the end of your chapter. I might have missed the obvious so I will re-read. I will tell you that I don't like the "wide chest" description (near the end)because I get the mental picture of Heidegger(sp?) topless and being a "dirty old bugger". O-o;; Overall Rating: You do have a few mistakes here and there. Square doesn't seem to have ever given the Shinra father a first name (much like many of the other characters (non-playable) have no last name) so when you mention Shinra(senior)it just doesn't seem to flow-it's a stumbling block but it's not your fault so don't worry about it! I can say that I am genuinely interested in reading more and finding out more about everyone's role in this story. I would like to know where you are going with this. In closing I'll just say "keep going, nice job so far, and good luck!!!" ...oh, and I tend to be harsh with words when typing. I'm a sweet old girl at heart so don't mind me-I do like your story! I'm leaving this review to try and help you for your next chapters (hopefully, we will see plenty more!!!)
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Title: Shoot!
Reviewed By: kiwi711 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 21:12 CST
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Thanks, I completely forgot about that... I'll have to fix it. Really shouldn't try to write on five hours of sleep...
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Title: Hmmm....
Reviewed By: Lady Valtaya [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 20:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting... I love Vince but I'm a little confused because remember that if Rufus' dad is still alive, then Vincent should still locked in the basement of Shinra Manor where Hojo put him after Lucrecia tried to kill herself...
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