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| "The Relative Merits of Fast Food" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Awesome Story!
Reviewed By: Iceberg60 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2008 21:20 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this was such a great story! ^_^ It was super fun, and it was really amusing~ I like how you made the situation evolve into something like that, but i'm sad that it was not continued! But i think i was just as confused as Squall was at the end! lol. Why would Squall feel cheated, and why does Zell think he 'got' Squall? Me so confused >.< But i must say, i greatly appreciated your story, and i really hope that you can continue it, despite it has been...needless to say a while since this was written. But i'm wondering where the other characters were, and why Squall was enjoying to torment Zell. Seemed a bit OOC, but in a fun an appropriate way. I don't think i would have changed a scene ^_^ except i might have made a second chapter. Wow, ok thats a long review. Anyways, Please continue this if you can!
| Title: That Was Just Great!!
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2006 12:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have added this short (or is it) to my favorites. I will have to disagree with the other reviewer and say that you did a wonderful job of keeping Zell and Squall in character. I loved the story all the way to the ending! Honestly, I was expecting it to turn out to be more then a kiss-while I love yaoi, I just can't stand it in written form. I noticed that you have a couple spelling erorrs (that would mainly be the word brunette) but other then that everything was well written. It looks like you had a problem with formatting, though. The text of the first paragraph is much smaller then the rest and I have noticed . I know what you were trying to do but this site uses lowercase letters. None of the items I mentioned detracted from the story. It was still a very enjoyable read!
| Reviewed By: Whatevergirl [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2006 15:39 CST
Comment/Review:
wow! i loved it! its was very amusing! lol.
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