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| "All the World's a Stage" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: Second One Shot
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2007 18:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I feel the same way as Balthier concerning re-use of lines right now. I feel that I have been saying the same thing over and over again-it's all the same but it's all the truth. You keep everyone in character and even add a bit more. I think Square really flubbed...you've made these characters yours! You truly have! You also make very very few mistakes in your writing. I have never seen any author maintain an almost error free status in grammar, spelling and punctuation. I can't even do it without numerous rewrites. ^^; About this selection: I was laughing all the way through. Honestly, I don't want to sound pushy or anything, I think it would be great if you continued this short. I can definitely identify with what you said about all the possibilities. Don't spread yourself too thin and don't push yourself too hard. You have done an excellent job with these stories and all of them have their own different path and feel. Thank you again for sharing your talent! I can't wait to see a spin-off of the second one-shot it ended to soon and seems to be begging for a continuation!
| Title: *still blushing*
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2007 19:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's funny...I was trying to think of something to write in order to begin my review, instead I found myself reliving Penelo's discovery of the scented pillow-couldn't help but burst out laughing! Everything was dead on and absolutely priceless! In fact-I'm still laughing! The no Balthiers caused me to do a double take! I've been able to see so much in these characters due to the love you have put into them-I'm seriously considering restarting the game. Where I'm at isn't too bad as far as story goes and I've always thought I could do have done a better job in advancing the game(just too tired of getting my arse handed to me time and time again.) *laughs more* Before I go on: I did find a couple points that I wanted to mention. Your spelling, as always, was excellent but a couple words didn't fit: was at a lost of how many left turns-lost doesn't sound right for some reason, I thought "loss" would be a better word...but even that doesn't sound completely right. and recalling what just happen-I think "and recalling what just happened" works better. ^^; Something else that caught my attention was the author's note. That is a clever title! But something else-I keep wondering why does she keep thanking me?! 1)You're talented. 2) It's obvious that you care about the characters and game. 3) Your writing has so much heart and personality! (not too mention Balthier *fangirl blushes*) When I say, "I can't wait to read more" I mean it and stand by it! I really can't wait to read what you have planned for this latest selection as well as your other stories! Thank you so much for continuing to write and thank you for the mention!
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