|"No Need For A Lunar Brother" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ]|
| Reviewed By: Vilkath [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2007 00:49 CDT|
Style of Writing: 4 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10
Not bad, I rather like the idea and suprisingly one the more orginal Ranma/SM/Tenchi cross's I've read in a while. Sadly your orginzation needs work. Tons of flash backs, deep flash backs, random character scene shifts etc really leave the reader a lot more confused then they had to. The plot is pretty nice, I think this story could really go some where if you continue it, would do even better if you did a rewrite imo. The first few chapters sort of all over the place with the plot and events. Might also suggest posting this else where like FFnet, since your unlikely get many reviews here even with the best of stories.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2007 03:22 CDT|
Damn. These three stories you've posted all look interesting. I'll take a further look later on, but this story is awesome (though I like the Superman story best). Still, keep updating, and I'll review more deeply. Please update these stories as often as you can. Later.