"Fall of the Mighty" Reviews/Comments [ 85 ] |
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Reviewed By: Vege_Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2002 14:27 CDT Comment/Review: I love the different reactions of the family, it allows for developement in the plot. I await the period of time that Goku's stomach begins to grow... *giggles* |
Reviewed By: Manawolf On: August 26, 2002 21:23 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: The only reason the whole fic's not a 10 is because it's not finished yet! Normally I squick at male pregnancy fanfics, but I am an incurable Vegeta fan... and the characters are really handled very well. Keep it coming... pleeeeease? |
Reviewed By: Vege_Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2002 13:06 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: I can't wait for chapter 15. I'm loving it! I've seen a lot of fanfics with Vegeta pregnant, but not many with Goku. *lol* I'll bet their child will be sooooo handsome!!! |
Reviewed By: Eloy Brightdreamer [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2002 18:13 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: Well, I can't say I didn't see this coming, but I like it! :) Please update soon! |
Reviewed By: Eloy Brightdreamer [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2002 17:38 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: OK, I haven't reviewed so far, but I just gotta say, love the "Pitch Black" reference! One of my favorite movies. You really should write a fic based on what little Vegeta told of his story there! I would like to see that.
Also, it might make your story easier to read if you start a new paragraph when a new person starts talking. Those big paragraphs with everything mushed together get a little tedious. And also, this chapter and the last seem to be too wide for the screen... I don't know why it wrapped weird this time, but you might want to take a look at it.
Good story so far! I usually don't read yaoi, but this is good. You've kept characterization pretty consistant. Off to read the rest... |
Reviewed By: Shayne On: August 01, 2002 17:02 CDT Comment/Review: Wow! I'm so glad that I found this fic! @.@ It's so great! I love it! Is there anyway that you could email me when the next chapter comes out?
Love,
Shayne
P.S. butterfly_in_reverese@evilportal.com |
Reviewed By: SaiyaSith [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2002 19:03 CDT Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: And you just LEFT it there??? AAAH! This is a really cool story. Sometimes I indulge and read yaoi's, and this is a cute one. I love the whole "breeding stock" thing! I never considered this angle! Keep it up! |
Reviewed By: Chibi Hoshi On: July 15, 2002 21:15 CDT Comment/Review: okay, so?? More!! I know this isn't the last chappie!! but it was a good one. good angst. It makes sense that Vegeta would have a hard time dealing with intimacy with someone stronger than him, based on his past... I love it!! Do please write more, okay? Thankies muchly!!
Chibi Hoshi* |
Reviewed By: sunrissa [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2002 23:10 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: I really Njoy this fic and it is very well written. Can't w8 till the next chap! |
Reviewed By: Chibi Hoshi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2002 23:15 CDT Comment/Review: Oh Rogue!!! that was so wonderful!!! I loved it!!! yay!!! *_* (sighs) and I have this thing about Goku calling Vegeta Ouji-sama... you know he's gotta love it!! and I love the way you orchestrated the scene. they were kinda thrown into it, but I loved it!! thankies!!!
Chibi Hoshi* |
Reviewed By: Kioko On: July 09, 2002 14:02 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: YEAH, another chapter! The only thing that I found ...dare I say "wrong"...was that well...(hesitantly) I got confused during the lemon and I had to go back and re-read parts of the chapter to understand what was going on. But other than that it was a perfect chapter!
Hope you update soon! |
Reviewed By: Kioko On: July 03, 2002 12:41 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: This story is GREAT! to tell you the truth I don't thing the raiting fits the story though.
heheh...poor Vegeta indeed. ^^;
Please update soon!! |
Reviewed By: Chibi Hoshi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2002 21:21 CDT Comment/Review: Chinsy with reviews?? ME??? *brandishes large mallet pulled from cyberspace* I review every time I read! But that's only cause I love it! and Vegeta's so sweet with his granddaughter!!! *big sparkly eyes* it's so Kawaii!! of course, we all love Vegeta anyway, and it's because he's an arrogant bastard, not beside it... *sighs* Okay, so it's great!! Post more!!! Love it, Rogue!!
Chibi Hoshi* |
Reviewed By: Psyfire [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2002 20:05 CDT Comment/Review: this is turning out to be a very interesting Yaoi fic :) it's funny too...Keep writing and I'll keep reading :) |
Reviewed By: B-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2002 08:43 CDT Comment/Review: Dear writer,
This is Veresti reviewing your lovely peice of work. I must say that I quite enjoyed reading it and hope you will get the next chapter out soon.
Love,
Veresti
(Who d@mn mediaminer.org won't let change her pen name) |
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