| "Every Heart" Reviews/Comments [ 39 ] |
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2008 14:32 CDT
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i've never before seen the parallels between inuyasha's life and rin's life quite as clearly as you pointed them out. it looks like sesshoumaru was trying to right a worng in his life by taking rin in. you made me feel inuyasha's desolation over the seperation from kagome, and kagome's anticipation of a breakthrough in being able to reunite with her friends. for a chapter that at first seemed to be mostly developmental, there was a lot of content. thank you for a wonderful chapter
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2008 16:33 CDT
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this was a great chapter. i could feel inuyasha and kagome's desolation over their forced seperation. i could feel sango's joy over hearing news of her brother. i love it when a story is good enough to make me feel. the only problem with the flow was at the beginning of the scene with sango. 'the celebration feast that commenced their stay' made me read it over three times before i found out what was bothering me. the dinner itself can't begin their stay; it can, however, mark the commencement of their stay. it may be a small point, but it made me stop in my reading. thank you for posting this wonderful chapter.
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Reviewed By: HentaiSouljaShoujo On: April 04, 2008 19:47 CDT
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Please Hurry Up and Update
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2008 16:47 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your story kept me involved from the start to the point it's at. i love the way you kept the characters in character. you have a good take on their motivations. the flow of the story never lags, but it doesn't feel rushed, either. i have added you to my alert list, and will be looking forward to future chapters. thank you for sharing this wonderful story.
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Reviewed By: DARKENED DEMONESS [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2008 20:51 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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YOUR STORY IS PERFECT IN EVERY MEANING OF THE WORD!!! PLEASE UPDATE AS SOON AS YOU CAN.
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Reviewed By: ayame shizakura On: March 23, 2008 12:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i liked it i think it really goes with the story and you should ask(i forgt her name)if she should publish this cuz i really love it its like yoou made the story in the first place.*kirara is an girl*so kepp up the good work i cant wait to read chapter 7!
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Reviewed By: rainydays [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2008 01:17 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this story! :o) Sesshoumaru actually has a soul... who would have thought? :o) I like that you have involved all the characters in your story. It's quite good. I wonder what is going on with the well and the jewel... I wonder what you have up your sleeve. I can't wait for you to update!
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Title: 2&3
Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2008 22:56 CDT
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nice to see them together, the scenes were sweet, emotional. . . one wonders what is up with the well and the jewel. i would have wanted to travel together and not gone separately from the beginning. it would be a shame if they were stuck on opposite sides with little hope to unite although yasha would have a better chance of surviving to her time than she would if she was stuck in the past and him in the future. . . eloquently written, well described. so far in the story i am worried they won't end up together, i am emotionally invested. ~ thank you, ginny
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Title: chapter 1
Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2008 21:45 CDT
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nicely written, one only hopes the final battle ends with all of the 'good guys' intact as it looks like naraku is gaining an edge from sango/miroku's despair. ~ thank you, ginny
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