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| "Fleeting" Reviews/Comments [ 42 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Reviewed By: fluffysbabe [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2016 07:23 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update this story because I can't wait to see how everything
works out.
| Title: woohoo....
Reviewed By: Knittingknots [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2013 12:56 PDT
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Nice to see your name in the new chapter listings, woman.... | Reviewed By: MissRaven On: June 26, 2013 01:36 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I LOVE this fic. I catch myself checking daily to see if there's an update. I'm rooting for sesshoumaru's company even if he has been somewhat foolish through most of this. I definately approve of the uniqueness of this story and how you gave each character amazing development without losing the essence of who they are in the anime. Keep up the good work and please update soon? | Title: I can't even...
Reviewed By: rktot On: April 28, 2013 22:39 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm an avid fanfiction reader, especially for inuyasha - I cannot even TELL you how much I love this. It's 1 in the morning here, I have an anatomy final, and I can't. stop. reading. I have this ff bookmarked and I swear I should get an update when you update this - I'm obsessed. Keep up the good work - i've laughed at parts, and I've even cried for kagome a little. Sesshoumaru reminds me of my own boyfriend with his privacy, so it's incredibly endearing to potentially see things through his eyes. I love this. I cannot tell you enough. | Title: Sunday, Sunday, Sunday
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2010 14:38 PDT
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Wow. Looks like Kagome let all of the doubts go to seed. I'd say that Inuyasha succeeded in putting a wedge between them, even if only temporarily. I felt so bad for Kagome. While I don't think Sesshomaru's taking the right tactic by hiding his intentions to apply for a job at her father's company, I also know that he had that in mind before he knew it WAS Kagome's father's company. If he had only been open about it once he knew. I could so clearly see Kagome pacing, worrying. As much as she tried to convince herself that what Inuyasha had said was wrong, it nagged at the back of her mind. I can't entirely blame her for snooping into Sesshomaru's room. However, I think whatever wedge Inuyasha could have driven between them pales in comparison to her invasion of his privacy. She knows he's private, that he values it utterly, and because she couldn't wait to confront him, she invades it. I'd also have to say that despite what the reader knows to be true (ie: Sesshomaru IS seeking a job at her father's company), that Kagome is allowing Inuyasha's doubt seeds to bloom without thinking it over. She finds the evidence of the internship applications, and decides that Inuyasha was right. Sesshomaru is using her. It's a prime example of how a relationship built on secrecy is a house of cards. I think if Sesshomaru hadn't come home right then to find her in his room she might have come to that conclusion as well. I'd have to say that the fact this is out will actually advance the relationship. I say that because there won't be any more hiding or withholding. It'll take awhile for the two of them to trust one another again---although if you truly think about it, neither one did trust the other in the first place. It'll also take awhile for them to actually want to be with one another, but I don't think they'll be able to help themselves. If anything, they'll now know where things stand. I think there's going to be a lot of hurt from here on out. There will be some things said and done that will make things worse before it gets better. Somehow, now that Inuyasha has blown his brother out of the water, I don't think he'll get what he wants. He's hiding truth from her, too. He's never told her how he knows Sesshomaru or that he's Sesshomaru's half brother----and that he's doing the same thing he accused Sesshomaru of doing. I think Kagome will have to tread very carefully from here on out. The same will go for Sesshomaru. He wants Kagome. He knows that he wants her. But, he also wants to take over his father's company through her father's company. I wonder, now that things are exposed, can he truly have his cake and eat it, too? Will he have to choose one or the other? If Inuyasha knows of this, I'd have to guess that Sesshomaru's father knows, too. If that's the case, then Sesshomaru will have been doomed from the start. I look forward to seeing where this goes next, and what thread unravels next. Things have certainly heated up. I have a funny feeling there's a lot more mines to explode.
| Reviewed By: And the Nominee is. . . On: March 07, 2010 20:57 PST
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I must admit that I feel Kagome's pain. Here's so so close to having it all with Sesshomaru, and then he's always keeping her at arm's length just when things get hot and heavy. Talk about the mixed signals that are swirling throughout her head. I can't imagine knowing that my boyfriend is hiding something from me. I can imagine just how frustrating it is to finally being intimate with him only to be turned away at the last moment. It's no wonder she ends up having to find her release by her own hand. I know I'd have to if I lived with him and hadn't gotten anywhere. As the reader, we know why Sesshomaru's doing these things, and yet it still is hard to watch how that effects their relationship. If Sesshomaru isn't careful, he'll eventually push her away. I just hope that Kagome can continue to be aggressive. She's much closer than she knows to getting what she wants from him. I'm not surprised that Inuyasha was there to console her. While I don't think he's entirely prying into the situation for her sake, I do sense the concern is genuine. I think he's very much in the exact same place Sesshomaru is in concerning Kagome and a relationship with her, be it romantic or friendship. I sense Inuyasha's desperation in this scene, actually. The reason he ends up telling Kagome Sesshomaru's plans is because he's hoping she might leave his brother for him. As much as we've seen what their father does to Sesshomaru, I have a funny feeling that off the page Inuyasha has just as much pressure put upon him to succeed---if not more so for being the bastard son. I think while Kagome demands that Inuyasha prove his allegations, she believes them. It also does put that doubt in her that if he won't tell her this than what else could he be hiding. If Sesshomaru isn't careful he might find himself holding a ticking time bomb. I sense that this is where the plot is starting to truly thicken. Up until now, we've only seen Sesshomaru's machinations inside his head about what it is he wants to do with minimal push back from his father. We're finally starting to see where this is all going, if only due to Inuyasha's utter desperation. I think from here on out the outside world will rock both Kagome and Sesshomaru's inner world. I look forward to following it through and just what other obstacles might emerge, especially upon the heels of such a revelation. As always, the writing is crisp, flowing, and wonderful. Is it next Sunday yet?
| Reviewed By: It's Monday... On: March 01, 2010 19:17 PST
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I hope that the wait was worth it. I know I really enjoyed this chapter, hence why I had to re-read it first. I can see why it is your favorite chapter in the series. This chapter started off so much more openly affectionate than we've seen thus far. Sesshomaru isn't holding Kagome completely at arms length, as he once had. He's allowing her to kiss him, and in public no less. He's saying things that I don't believe he would have said a few short chapters ago. He's also acknowledging feelings that he's been aware of but denying up until now. If it weren't for the complications of the situation, I firmly believe he would have let a lot more of his walls drop by now and advance it a bit further. Perhaps not so much in the physical sense as the emotional, but advanced just the same. I also see how we approach Sesshomaru in similar ways. He's rather charming in this first section here. He's not stiff or aloof in any way until Kagome's left him, when his thoughts can invade once more. I've always thought that his potential to be charming is under utilized within fandom. Sometimes I wonder if I'm over-thinking this, It's about time! He should have realized that he was way overthinking things ages ago. As much heartache as he's trying to advert due to the business manipulations of his father, if he continues to overthink he'll eventually make this relationship blow up in his face. He's gotta learn something from Kagome about being emotional here. I like how the mention of the stuck door is brought into play again. It just puts you right into the scene, even before he realizes that something is amiss with Kagome. He's so lost the moment she throws herself into his arms, isn't he? It's just so funny sometimes how such a capable and controlled character as Sesshomaru can be that he will be thrown completely off balance by something like this. I see we see along the same lines when it comes to shaking his world up a bit. If there is one emotion he hates, it is that of panic. He also suffers, probably due to his overthinking, from the bad case of the "what ifs." As one of my favorite characters of all time would say, what ifs won't get you anywhere, so don't do them. I love how, even though he's aware that he's crossing his own lines, he's going to give Kagome this massage. I'm sure the lead in to it made people think it was going to be sexytimez, but I'm glad that it wasn't. I also think it's a tell that while he's angry with his father, when it's done he mentions that his mother used to administer them to both of them after a session in the dojo. He may not get along with his father, but there's so much more to their relationship than what we've seen thus far. On another note, can you send Sesshomaru to my house so I can get a world class massage like that? No seriously. I've had a mosh pit injury that flares up in my back since 2005. I think it'd fix it. I can't wait to see where this goes, especially now that at the end of this chapter Sesshomaru crosses that big line. Sunday can't come fast enough.
| Title: Another Sunday, Another Chapter
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2010 09:49 PST
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Inuyasha is deceptively subtle, isn't he? He really gleaned a lot of information out of this lunch. I don't think Kagome even noticed how he nudged her to open up here and there on strategic matters concerning her father's company. It's probably the first chapter that Sesshomaru doesn't make an appearance in, yet I noticed the emails had him protesting to his father. Even in emails his father can't help but make a swipe. I also got the impression, even if it is for show to some degree, that these tactics and behaviors disgust Inuyasha. He might be playing the game, but that doesn't mean he has to like it. I do think that his sympathy was genuine, however. He understands how Kagome feels about losing a parent, and while it can garner him more confidences with her, he means it when he tells her that he's sorry. It doesn't mean that he'll miss a chance to pump her for information, though. I get the feeling that while he got this information it's already common knowledge to his father. Perhaps the only thing that he needed to absolutely verify is who had a vote on the board and who didn't within Kagome's family. So it's almost Valentine's Day, eh? Why do I get the feeling that this hasn't crossed Sesshomaru's mind at all? Speaking of him, Inuyasha certainly made Kagome comfortable enough to spill the beans, and spill them she did. I think he knew that his brother was his competition, but I don't know if he knew he was the competition for Kagome's affections. I think this will make things much more difficult for Kagome and Sesshomaru down the road, especially as their father puts the screws to Inuyasha to close the deal. Again, I do think Inuyasha is sincere in his vow to protect her if Sesshomaru should hurt her. He may be pursuing her friendship---and more---at his father's behest, but he truly cares for her, too. His manner around her speaks to that. Up until now, I don't think Inuyasha's had many friends, either. Kagome could be a real friend, and I think he knows that. If it had been any other circumstance, they probably would have been without any shadiness lurking. Best line/quote of the whole chapter: "Hey, rules of the road - that's why most guys never want their girlfriends to have other guy friends. We're a protective lot." I can't wait to see just where this leads next.
| Title: Taking an Olympics Break
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2010 13:02 PST
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Reality was almost sweeter than the fantasy. I actually enjoy the idea of them taking this relationship slowly. Despite all of Sesshomaru's internal misgivings and his disgust at his father's machinations, he'll take the risk on her anyways. I'm seeing a subtle shift from his head to his heart, and I'm enjoying the ride. I have no doubt that he'll continue to have a further tug of war between the two as we continue in the story. I'm not surprised to see him at the same cafe as Inuyasha and Kagome, either. Or his reactions to his brother being with Kagome, for that matter. He clearly wants to be with her and the fact that he knows her true identity makes it so very hard on him. He's also super competitive and isn't about to let his brother win the contest. I'd say it's a part of his male ego coming out to play. He's couching it in honor and protection, but we all know better. On one hand, he truly means it, but on the other he sees the challenge and is willing to meet it. I have a feeling it also comes from the fact that Kagome is not like the other girls he dated in the past. He's challenged by winning her heart for business reasons just as much as the pure challenge of her. She's fiery and stubborn, and he needs someone who will push back on him. I think he knows this, too, even if he's trying to deny his feelings for her. Again, language in this chapter was beautiful and fit the situation. I loved the lines: His eyes wandered aimlessly over the page as his mind kicked restlessly, refusing to absorb the information offered. and There was a soft thump behind him as she dropped the spatula; for a moment, they could only stare at each other, chests heaving, hearts beating in unison. I think these stuck out so much to me because I could see them so clearly. They put me right into the story. I loved their dinner. It was going so well at the start, and his internal debate had to nearly ruin it. I'm glad that he had the sense to notice her upset in time before she could leave the kitchen. It's showing his character growth brilliantly, too. I also love how she took him by surprise. I don't think he realized until then that she can read him. She knows he's hiding something, and she called him on it. It was nice to see them have a realistic conversation. So many stories have a conversation between the two romantic leads end in a fight and then an awkward make-out session. Here they realize and vocalize that there is something between the two of them and that they should take it slowly. I know Sesshomaru has his reservations about telling Kagome the truth of the situation, but she did tell him that she's a big girl. He should take that to heart. I have no doubt in mind that he'll regret it if he doesn't tell her in time. She values openness and honesty. The more he finds out about her and reveals her true self under his party-girl preconceptions, he'll find that out. If he just talks to her about what he knows, I have a feeling that he'll be surprised by her reaction. I do look forward to see how this is all resolved and how this comes to light. Most of all, I can't wait to see more romantic scenes like these between them. There's such a spark and connection. They just have to bridge the gaps.
| Reviewed By: kmoaton [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2010 18:27 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As usual, you've done an awesome job!! I can just imagine how hard it is for Sesshomaru to hold himself in, especially with such a dick for a boss. The man is just too hateful to even comprehend. I can also feel for Sesshomaru's agony with having to wait to show Kagome what he really feels and the jealousy that is in him because of the relationship of Kagome and Inuyasha. It's really obvious that he doesn't want to trust him due to past behavior but is forced to for his plan to be successful and for Kagome. So much turmoil, so much angst, so much drama!!! I lubs it all!!! I've told you before I've not been a Kagome/Sess fan but this is one story I follow faithfully and actually want Sesshomaru to get the girl. I need to lay down, I can't believe I said that!!! Until the next time...
| Title: Because Sunday Is Super Bowl Sunday. . .
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2010 20:54 PST
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Wow. Seems like to me that Kagome's in the wrong major. That girl should go into creative writing. I wish my dreams were that---enticing. I really loved the descriptive details you tossed in. Not many people will use the word "pectoral" in their smexy writing. They should. I noticed that the Sesshomaru in Kagome's mind was a bit OOC, but hey, it's her fantasy. Hell, I can't really blame her. It really set up the reader for the later scene in the kitchen when she was actually awake and trying to make her move. I loved how awkward and brave it was. She knew it could have blown up in her face, but she did it anyways. Sesshomaru may have been hesitant and distant, but he really seemed to like the attention. He must feel so trapped, considering what he now knows about Kagome and what his father intends---not to mention how a relationship with her could benefit him. This whole scene stuck out clearly in my mind for some reason. They both really want to be together, and Kagome's trying to make an effort, but with all of his barriers and her insecurity, it won't happen over night. It's not going to be an easy relationship by any means. I got the feeling that Sesshomaru was rather down about not being able to meet her for lunch. Kagome's really trying to prove to him that she's not the party girl. Outside of his father's ambitions for her, I think Sesshomaru would have been much more receptive towards her. I also must commend you for this scene because too often romance is shown to be so easy, breezy, and carefree. So much of the time the storyteller has the couple in question share one kiss and suddenly they're all fine and dandy and declaring their undying love. The couple becomes a sound foundation. It's not really like that. The fact that they're fumbling in the dark makes the story that much more appealing. I'm not surprised that Inuyasha managed to meet up with Kagome after their class. He seems to be genuine, even if his father's pulling his strings to a degree. I got the feeling from this section that he wants to get to know her and does truly like her. I also got the sense that while he's doing what his father wants that he hates it. If he could, I think Inuyasha would do anything else. He pretty much said it himself when he said that he had no head for numbers. Even though he's down about Kagome not being available, I get the impression he wants Kagome in his life in any capacity. His father can't make him feel all that warm and fuzzy, after all. I like the touch that you threw in from canon concerning his character. The fact that he adores ramen in this story as much as he does in the manga just made me laugh. I also got the sense that Inuyasha has a protective streak, also another canon characteristic. The more I read of this story, the more I start to think. I'm pretty sure if I re-read it and re-reviewed it I'd find something new to touch upon. The best stories have that ability on the reader. I'd say the biggest thing I love about this story is your choice of language. Not many fanfic writers take the time to pick the right word to describe something. I adored this line: As he stepped under the spray, his shimmering hair became the color of molten silver, clinging to his face, his neck, his shoulders before he brushed it away. There's such beauty in this single line. I can clearly see this and it is such a fresh description. It's really hard to describe Sesshomaru's hair in a new manner that doesn't bore or cause the reader to skim. I really look forward to seeing much more of the story in the coming weeks. I know I could probably keep reading and keep reviewing all night, but I want to savor the story. It's probably the best compliment I could give, knowing how much I like to hear the same from my readers. So, until next week.
| Title: A Revived Sunday Tradition
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2010 14:40 PST
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I know it's been ages since I properly reviewed this story, but with football season nearly over (Super Bowl Sunday next week), I thought I'd get back into it! It's completely official. I hate Sesshomaru's father. What an asshole. I wanted to shake Sesshomaru from the very start of this chapter, I must say. He has to eliminate the head when it comes to the heart---at least on some level. If he truly wishes to capture Kagome, he will have to give into it wholly. Kagome won't expect anything less. It's also why I think Inuyasha will ultimately fail with her in the long run. He's not with her for her. He's with her because money bags daddy said to be with her. It makes me agree with Sesshomaru's warning all the more---Inuyasha, at least in this AU, is BAD news. It's interesting to see the tussle between Sesshomaru's emotional and rational mind. You've got such a great handle on his character here and it just fascinates me to see how you approach it. On one hand, he sees Kagome as, at first, an obstacle to what he wants in his plot to take over his father's company, and then as an asset. Rationally, he knows to get what he wants he'll have to go full bore to win her. Emotionally, and because of his honor, he won't do it simply to get the leg up at the company he wants a job at. Kagome means too much to him for that---even if he doesn't really know why. I think Sesshomaru truly wants to be with Kagome. He just has this difficultly with separating personal and private. I think he must sit down, too, and contemplate what is really important in life. I see that Sesshomaru is competitive, resents his father's disapproval, and really wants to show his father up, but he also has no real desire to be like his father. His father is dishonorable in the methods he uses in his business. Sesshomaru can't stomach such dealings, and won't employ such tactics. I do think his father, albeit clever and sly in the business realm, has made a critical error. He is forgetting that Kagome is an individual and a person in this equation. She's not going to be very happy when she finds out that Inuyasha's only been treating her with such attention because it'll help him advance his father's take over of her father's company. Kagome will show off her spunk, her temper, and ultimately spurn Inuyasha in the end. I just hope she won't do the same to Sesshomaru---who seems to genuinely want her for her and not necessarily for business reasons. I just don't think it'll be simple for these two to get where they want to be---even when this plot unravels. I also see that Sesshomaru's making a mistake in his own reasoning. He has an idea that love makes one vulnerable. Given his family's infighting and double dealings, it's no wonder. I think he's just discovering, however, that it doesn't have to be complicated---and that scares him. Thus far, I think everyone around him in his life has had some ulterior motive. They want to do something for him, but only if it'll benefit him. Or in the reverse. I think he has to rethink and re-approach this situation carefully, or Kagome will think that he's no better than Inuyasha in the long run. I loved how you described his mental replaying of the New Year's Eve kiss. He is so totally rattled by this. I have a funny feeling, even if he told himself, regardless of his father's plans, that he wanted to stop it right here and right now that he couldn't. It's too late. He's given in, and while it is a single kiss, it's more than enough to make him keep coming back. I really can't wait to see how it all plays out. Hopefully Sesshomaru won't just sit on his hands for too long---and play into his father's hands. Inuyasha's really rather pathetic here, letting himself be nothing more than a pawn. I'm sure I'll enjoy how you make it work out---no matter how many twists and turns there are along the way.
| Title: *glee*
Reviewed By: psyco_chick32 (not signed in, whoops!) On: November 04, 2009 18:36 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*squee* Better late than never, right? So sorry for the late response to this AWESOME chapter that I have been ABSOLUTELY DYING FOR! I was sooooo happy with this chapter like you cannot even imagine. All the characters are so beautifully expressed - Sesshoumaru's coldness, InuYasha's hesitancy in some matters and open-heartedness in others, and Kagome's willingness to listen to him even after everything that's happened... This is love, baby (and how DARE YOU MAKE ME LOVE A S/K FIC! *flails*) Kagome's attitude about the whole thing - finding neutral territory, trying to facilitate InuYasha's need to speak with his brother no matter how much he's been blown off - is so incredibly both in-character canonically AND fits well into the stronger Kagome you've rounded out a bit for this fic (as is generally necessary in an AU, of course). It's a beautiful blending of the two - you help her stand on her own without losing what makes her intrinsically her and I love it. *snickers* And of COURSE InuYasha would show up when he did - it'd have to be then, and not a moment earlier or later, because that's just the way he is (both in this world and canonically - which, again, you capture so beautifully I'm so damn jellus). The description of Sesshoumaru's growth from irritation to full-blown anger and Kagome's ability to differentiate the two was really well-played as well; well-written and a nice look at how close the two are growing. I always say it's a sign that my husband and I are close enough that he just knows when not to talk to me before I even open my mouth and that's something that's growing between Kagome and Sesshoumaru. Now - on to what I know you've been waiting for: MY REACTION TO INUYASHA OMG THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU! \o/ When I read InuYasha's true motivations, I wanted to sing. I wanted to carve a statue of you out of butter. I wanted to cry tears of joy. I have remained firm in my stance that you would not make my boy the OMG-evil-one he always ends up as in SK fics and you have validated my hopes and dreams for this ^_^ I knew you wouldn't let me down!! I feel so awful for him, too - poor guy. He's been raised with his father as this elusive, amazing man. Raised to believe that his father could do no wrong, was fabulous, and then to face reality is so painful. I almost actually cried at his admission - he wants to go home, he wants to be with people who love him and care about him. Again, the beautiful blending of AU and Canon InuYasha - the searching for his place, the uncertainty of where he stands, makes this such a masterful piece and guarantees that it will remain among my favorites. *cheers* And I'm so excited to see what happens now... how will Kagome get the two to see eye-to-eye in order to face their father's scheme? Can the three pull it off? What could it mean for the future of the companies? This is so incredibly amazing... and it's a story about COMPANIES. And it's SK. I don't know how you've gotten me so absolutely obsessed but whatever it is, it's amazing.
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2009 14:34 PDT
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Congratulations! Your story has been nominated by the Inuyasha FanGuild for Best AU/AR and Best Romance (Other) for the Second Quarter of 2009. If you would like to track the progress of your story through the voting process, or simply find out more about the IYFG and perhaps join yourself, you can find everything you need to know on our website: www.inuyashafanguild.com (Inuyasha Fan Guild dot com) If you have any other questions, don't hesitate to contact our moderators at IYFGModerator@gmail.com (IYFG Moderator at g mail dot com). Congratulations again! -- IYFG Beta Group
| Reviewed By: Lady Sianna [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2009 18:40 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I came across this story when I was looking through the Inuyasha Fan Guild nominations, and I can clearly see why it was nominated there!! The story is so engaging and interesting, well written and complexed! I find myself questioning Inuyasha's motives even now. I wonder if his father has something over him, and that's why he was so willing to act as his pawn, or if he is doing it of his own accord. I nearly screamed in outrage when he sent that "Checkmate" memo to Sesshoumaru! All I could think was, "That sneaky little bastard!!!" I am really interested in seeing more of this. I am a terribly picky reader, yet this has thoroughly drawn me in! Keep up the fantastic job on this and please update as soon as time and opportunity will permit! ~Sianna
| Reviewed By: Raeko [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2009 20:09 PDT
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I've been reading your fic in spurts, several chapters at a time, but I've been a bad reader and haven't reviewed yet. >.< Sorry about that. Today I had to say something, though, even if it was just "good job." I've truly enjoyed this. There have been times when I really wanted them to just spit everything out and come together, but I'm glad you're in charge of the story and not me. I hate it when fics are dragged out unnecessarily, but this is a purposeful dragging-out. They aren't people who can automatically understand each other--Sesshoumaru for obvious reasons, but even Kagome isn't only what she appears on the surface--and you're giving them time to figure each other out. I really do appreciate that. I cheered a little on the inside when Sesshoumaru shot down his father's forgone conclusion! And I had a sneaking suspicion that Inuyasha really was still working for his father when he made up with Kagome. I don't really know what to think about his character, though. He may actually like her in addition to any other motives, and he's pretty obviously out to win his father's approval, but is that enough to redeem him when he's doing what Sesshoumaru refused to do? I'm looking forward to future updates, and in the meantime I'll continue to ponder. Cheers!
| Reviewed By: kmoaton [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2009 13:30 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sesshomaru finally standing up to his father, what an interesting turn of events! I totally enjoyed this addition. I can't help but wonder what is going through Inuyasha's mind as he listens to his father and Sesshomaru talk. I liked the idea of Sesshomaru not allowing his father to bribe him with the carrot and possibly completely destroying his renewing relationship with Kagome. At the same time, one can't help but wonder what else does Dad have up his sleeve. Excellent!!!
| Title: Another Sunday
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2009 14:15 PDT
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Well finally! It took these two long enough to admit to one another that they truly want one another. I am getting a bad feeling from Inuyasha here. I don't think he's a bad guy, but I get the sense that Sesshomaru might be right---his father told him to do this. If not, Inuyasha's just taking after the old man and playing games with Kagome to get back at his brother. Either way, he had better be careful. I don't think Kagome will forgive him a second time if that's the case. It just seems rather odd that after socially shunning her Inuyasha suddenly wants to pay so much attention to her again. I'd be as suspicious of him as Sesshomaru is if I were Kagome. I also understand why he's disappointed in her. She had moved on from these types of people for a long period, and I think it made her behave much better. It almost seems that since she feels she can't truly have Sesshomaru she's willing to surround herself with popular people to fill the void. These two are in serious need of a long talk, one where they simply state what they want and how to get it. It's too bad that he's so stubborn and won't go after her due to his pursuit of his studies. And I'm also not surprised that Sesshomaru has a warning for Inuyasha when it comes to Kagome. He knows his half-brother well enough to know that Inuyasha isn't going to respect Kagome any better than Koga did. I attribute that to Inuyasha's age here, too. I do like that Kagome gets upset with Inuyasha for inviting way too many people and then going to Sesshomaru to apologize. Inuyasha thought he had her where he wanted her, but she still cares a lot for Sesshomaru. And again, finally, at least now they're sharing some kisses. Something tells me, though, that it won't lead to a direct conversation about their feelings--as it should. These two are so stubborn that I want to shake them for being so. They're both miserable without the other and should just fess up, unless they like being miserable, of course. I'm curious, though, how will Inuyasha react now that the girl he's been in hot pursuit of is now all over his brother again? I'd also like to compliment the use of setting here. I love the warped door. It just adds this extra touch to it that the story needed. Over all, I can't wait to see where it goes next and what happens now that Inuyasha's decided to meddle. Hopefully Kagome will follow her resolution and not fall back for the easier target. Sesshomaru's worth it, he's just a bit harder to unwrap so to speak. I'll be curious to see if she's successful or not.
| Reviewed By: SaM lA La On: May 29, 2009 16:46 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh! Man! Kagome should dump Inuyasha and leave his ass in the dust. He a lying CHEAT!! They shouldn't have ended up as friends! I would have dumped Sango as well. But anywasy GREAT writing, very creative.
| Title: If It's Sunday. . .
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2009 12:14 PDT
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Oh my. Poor Sesshomaru. Can't live with her, cant live without her. He's really put himself into a rock and a hard place, and he really has no one to blame but himself. I loved the image of him walking through the snow, something so often used in canon stories. It worked, but I liked the touch of his wool cap. I actually could see it and it didn't seem out of place. I think it's the detail that he slipped it over the tip of his ears. I like how he refuses to go home, even if he can't find a rational reason for not doing so. Ending up in the coffee house is touching, too, because the tea that he orders is more subconcious than deliberate. I suspect that if someone were to tell him that he had behaved this way that he would deny it. He misses her completely and is doing things without really thinking about it that reflect it. That's the beauty of Sesshomaru---ever deliberate and analytical, yet reactive and subconcious to things that emotional affect him. The waitress reminds him of Kagome due to her quiet kindness, seeming to know what he might need in that particular moment. The fool should stop sitting on his hands and go find Kagome. Take action in true Sesshomaru sense---before it's too late. It would seem he's going to miss the boat if he's not careful. Inuyasha has swooped in, and I have to say that I am surprised by this, somewhat. I thought it could have been Koga, as he's so stubborn and thick skulled. I could see him chasing Kagome down. It's interesting that it's Inuyasha, though, and his sweet atentions are welcome, but don't seem to entirely satisfy her, either. She's delighted and finds that it soothes her ruffled feathers, but it just seems to safe for her, the way you've presented it. Inuyasha and Kagome in canon or most Inu/Kag stories tend to have an edge about their pairing that is lacking here. He seems easier to approach than Sesshomaru, therefore easier to romance. Sesshomaru's tougher to crack and I can see her frustration being released in her exchanges with Inuyasha. I just don't see it lasting here. The edge and excitement lies with Sesshomaru and it's almost unfair to this earnest Inuyasha to say yes to dating him when they return to campus. She'll be pining for Sesshomaru and imposing him upon her date. My guess is that Kagome will realize that she hasn't simply physically ran away from Sesshomaru, she's done so emotionally, too. I also sense a fatigue on her part. She's pretty much made it clear to Sesshomaru that she's willing to "finish" it, yet he holds her at arms length for his honor's sake. That boy had better let go of some of that honor quickly. I also have a sense that a bombshell is waiting. I have no question that in this universe Inuyasha is Sesshomaru's little brother. Much like in the canon where Inuyasha receives the inheritance with little effort really, I sense that their father is handing Inuyasha a position in the company on nepotism. Not surprising, but I see dark storm clouds in the future. Until now, Sesshomaru has pretty much ignored Inuyasha as a party boy underclassman. Now he's stepping into the his territory of company and love interest. I do look forward to the fireworks I'm sure are to come!
| Title: It's Our Sunday Date!!
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2009 15:09 PDT
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Oh my. The plot has certainly thickened with this latest installment, hasn't it? Poor Sesshomaru actually realizes he is lonely and needs her, no matter what he might say aloud or what actions he might take. I love how you portray his miserable state, first through his meeting with his advisor and then him making the tea. I enjoyed the fact that you brought in him sniffing the tea and trying to conjure up memories of her being with him in the apartment. It was a nice nod to canon Sesshomaru's sense of smell while fitting AU Sesshomaru's dilemma. He has a big problem on his hands, considering that he was lucky enough to acquire an extension on his assignment, but will also have the distraction of Kagome---rather she's there or not. His actions, again, are speaking far more than his words. He's looking for her in her things, taking comfort in the fact that if her things are still there that must mean she's coming back. Even Sesshomaru needs someone, no matter how much he denies it. I enjoyed Kagome's misery almost as much. It seems her family is rather shallow. I'm not surprised that Kagome's rebelling against it, either. I'm also not surprised that she's rather unimpressed by the peacocks strutting around the ski lodge, hoping to be seen with the right people to gain advancement. As trapped as Sesshomaru is with his father's challenge, Kagome seems equally trapped with her family's social status and ideals. I like this twist on her character. Too often Kagome is the poor girl being paired with Sesshomaru (or Inuyasha in some of the AUs) and has to overcome that. From this little drabble, I get the impression that either they're rich and want to keep their name unstained or that they're not and want to appear as such. It's a wonderful device for her to fight against. She doesn't want to be superficial and worry about who she talks to or who she's seen with. She wants to be around someone genuine. I'm not surprised that her thoughts drift to him immediately and that she's miserable now that she's left him, either. She should have known better than to run, and I hope she learns this lesson, rather than repeating canon Kagome's tendencies to flee from Inuyasha. If she's serious on her intent to prove to Sesshomaru that she is not a little girl, she'll face him directly and head on. He'll respect her much more for it and they'll be brought together all that much closer for it. Something tells me that she might not have to, although I'm not going to jump to conclusions and simply assume that Sesshomaru has put two and two together and arrived at the ski resort to make some overture to her, either. It's not his style, no matter how lonely he is or how much he misses her. I suppose I'll have to wait and find out, though. She's very surprise to see this mystery person, that's for sure. If it is him, I bet he covers his real reason for being there. I do very much look forward to the next installment. Something tells me we're going to start seeing the meat of their relationship begin to bloom here. Until next Sunday, then!
| Title: The Weekly Review
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2009 19:04 PDT
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It would seem that Sundays is when I peek at your story and leave the longest review written in history. Where to start on this chapter? I love how we got into Sesshomaru's head this go round. Poor guy has such father/son issues, which isn't surprising. I think, too often, people focus too closely upon the fact that Inuyasha never knew his father and grew up alone. Sesshomaru, as the first born son, has as much pressure upon him. He is to be the successor, the heir apparent, the one to fill dear ol' dad's shoes. That's a lot of pressure for someone, and it's no wonder he's so serious and stoic. I've often thought that his behavior was all attempts to prove his worthiness to his deceased father and/or prove that he was a bigger bad ass than dear ol' dad. Here we see him trying to live up to an always disappointed father that has demanded too great of expectations of his son to inherit the family company. He works very hard and graduates early and at the top of his class, but it's just not enough. I think part of it is Sesshomaru's own mind working against himself, but from the challenge directly from his father, he's right. Makes me want to get him either really drunk and see what would happen or take him out on the town against his will just so he can loosen up. Poor thing is so overworked. And poor Kagome, getting pelted by that hail and having Koga rush in as always to her rescue. I'd rather take the hail stone and walk home alone, personally. Koga's way too overbearing and immature. I get the feeling Kagome's growing up as we go along and she's realizing exactly HOW flaky Koga is. I'm not surprised he's there with her because he perceives her to be easy. I'm hoping Kagome can read between the lines, though. Sesshomaru wants her and wants her BADLY, but he's still stuck in his own personal hell to do anything about it. It's nice to see him exert some physical dominance over a rival suitor here. Even as a modern man he can practically crush Koga's wind pipe. That's impressive. I think he deserved it, though. What a jackass to treat a girl in such a way. I'm suspecting that as time goes along, Sesshomaru won't have a choice about revealing his true feelings directly. Kagome has to learn how to read him properly. He drops hints all the time, with such a subtle flair, and you've captured that in these stories thus far expertly. I liked the fact that he noticed the peppermint tea and remembered what happened the last time it was made. I just hope he can break out of his shell and drop the anger act before she gets fed up and moves on. I have a feeling he's chased away plenty of women with the behavior. He's such a pretty one to look at, but such a difficult nut to crack. I think he should be careful, though. He's stubborn, but I think she's far more stubborn. I'll be curious to see what happens next between these two. If one of them would simply make the first move they'd finally get somewhere.
| Reviewed By: luvininu28 On: April 30, 2009 16:07 PDT
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I absolutely loved this chapter!! I could really feel with the characters instead of only for them. I really liked how you ended it and how they both felt relief to know that they could still be connected (even though only "friends") somehow. I'm so glad you updated. Thank you for making my evening a little happier!!!
| Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2009 19:31 PDT
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Somehow I couldn't help but hold my breath throughout this whole drabble. Kagome played a dangerous game with a vulnerable Sesshomaru, indeed. I love how we see him here as not the all perfect, hair always in place, in control Sesshomaru as we've always been led to believe, but someone who is very tired and overworked, only showing it when he is unable to uphold the mask any longer. It seems that Kagome is missing a key sign here as she longs for him with a dwindling hope. He has shown her his vulnerable side from the moment he steps through the door, something he doesn't do with just anyone. She should have realized that, but I think she's far too close to the situation to notice. I think it's interesting, though, that she does notice that he doesn't approve of her friends. Her thoughts on Koga are dead on. He is a flake and I've always thought that even if Ayame only appears in the anime. He just doesn't seem the type to keep an interest of any kind for very long, and even in the end of the manga runs off into the sunset without finalizing the deal. In contrast, it seems that Sesshomaru finishes things straight through until completion. It was a nice touch to have him, in his tired stupor, address Kagome as ma'am. Here we see him hand over control to her when if he had not been utterly exhausted would have never happened. He has chosen her, without her realizing it. She just has to learn how to read his signs that much better. I liked the way she pampered him immediately, only to come back and find him fast asleep. I think while we see her being attracted to his appearance, it's his personality that she's becoming more attracted to over time, which his is nice to see. Too often it seems that people have to overtly point out the fact that Sesshomaru is beautiful and that's why a girl would love him. It's this softness to his face in sleep and his trust of Kagome that makes her want him here, not that he's a pretty face. It's also why she's sitting by the phone waiting for a phone call from Koga when she could have called him herself and gone out if he had agreed. Instead, she chooses to wait for Sesshomaru because I think she was unconsciously worried about him. The way she kisses him was sweet, too. I had a feeling, though, when she "woke" him that he wasn't really sleeping at that point. He knew what she had been doing all along, just wanted to indulge in it for awhile. It's another sign that she should truly take notice. Best of all was his veiled challenge. She started it and had better be careful that she is able to finish it, indeed. It's nice to see that someone else gets the subtle nature of Sesshomaru's sense of humor. He plays, just not as overtly as others do. If it's pulled off correctly, Sesshomaru can be the comic of a piece, but only if one can savor such dry humor. Bravo and I hope to have more time to read through this at a faster pace!
| Title: From Your Sess/Rin Shipper
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2009 16:23 PDT
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You know that I am a hardcore Sesshomaru/Rin shipper, and while we don't agree on that, I had to comment on your work. It's only fair after all of the help you've given me on mine as of late! The first drabble in this Fleeting collection really worked for me. I am abhorrent to the Sess/Kag pairing usually due to the fandom cliches we have discussed in the past, but this, this is different. It wasn't the modern era setting, either. Both characters were spot on in comparison to their canon selves---and yet you teased MORE out of them. You captured both Sesshomaru's strength and his vulnerabilities all at once. It is so easy to play up the strong,all mighty fanon version of Sesshomaru while ignoring his inherent weaknesses. I like that he is bothered by the little details. I love that he and Kagome have become roommates. He might justify it as needing someone to split the rent, but I can see right through him. He needed a companion and didn't want to voice that. The fact that he's the one taking her home seems so appropriate, too. I like Kagome's fighting against him at every turn. She frustrates him, and he frustrates her, but not so overtly that it becomes its own cliche. Here, I can actually SEE and BELIEVE that these two could work in an actual relationship. So much of the time I find them to be totally OOC and doing things that don't fit their personalities, and here you have them doing things I couldn't imagine them doing, but working so well. I loved the way Sesshomaru spoke in clipped sentences to her throughout the story, up until the end when his vulnerable side showed and he had to admit that he CARES for her. Brilliant. It was grudging and with reservation that he admit an emotion, but he did it anyways and in such a convincing way that I felt that emotion from him. It wasn't just on the page, I could sense it in him, and realized it had been there the moment he had peeled her from the floor and took her home. I think it's interesting that he almost acted like her chaperon at the party, disenchanted by both Koga and Inuyasha's behavior.I can see them in a pissing contest over alcohol, however, and it is so Kagome to join in and prove to the boys that she can handle herself. Nice touch having Sesshomaru also admit that he was impressed with her tolerance level. He might not be able to express himself easily, but when he does, he gets to the point! I think we see him much the same way, believe it or not. It's simply the woman that he's with that's different. He loves to project that he is the alpha dog of the roost, the one in complete control, and yet, here he almost yields in that split second to her--almost but not quite. He desires someone who he feels is truly his alpha. I think he also hides a lot of his true self behind his clipped speech or his aloof mannerisms, and you captured that as well. It's how I approach him quite often. He's not all about the kicking ass and taking names! I intend to follow this to the conclusion, and I admit, this first drabble in the series has me hooked---much to my surprise. As I've said, any pairing can believable if it is only presented in the correct manner! Look forward to more of my longwinded reviews. You should be getting quite a few of them from here on out.
| Reviewed By: emmibubbles On: April 16, 2009 23:41 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yet another chapter that kept me on the edge of my seat! i can't wait to see how kagome confronts inuyasha! keep it up!!!
| Reviewed By: DARKENEDDEMONESS On: April 16, 2009 19:52 PDT
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Poor Kagome!!! You gotta be strong girl or just have a breakdown and show Sesshoumaru how much your hurting!!! Keep up the great work!!!
| Reviewed By: emmibubbles On: April 10, 2009 15:32 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks for the amazing update! I can't wait to see what happens! Keep it up!!
| Reviewed By: luvininu28 On: April 09, 2009 17:57 PDT
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Wow!! Great chapter!! I can't wait til' Inuyasha gets his!! I've trusted you this far with the story and it's great, so I will patiently wait for more!! Thanks for the update!!
| Reviewed By: emmibubbles On: April 05, 2009 12:45 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
In all honesty, I've become addicted to this story. Every time it ends a little voice in my head screams 'nooo!',lol. I cannot wait to see how the next chapter goes!! Awesome work!
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