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| "I'm the Mother and the Father?" Reviews/Comments [ 35 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 ] | Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 17:17 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Glad to see more of this. You describe the situation really well. The only problem is the wall of text. It makes the story difficult to read. Try and put an extra space between the lines. That should help.
| Title: Wow.
Reviewed By: adriannrod [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 16:41 CDT
Comment/Review:
Certainly a unique story. I sincerely hope you decide to continue this story. :)
| Title: Troubles Ahead
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 14:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
Something's telling me that the news of Ranma's pregnancy is going to come out shortly, and not in a good way, nor due to a slip of the tongue on the parts of Ranma, Nabiki, or Tofu. Good, if misplaced, intentions have likely caused more harm and damage to the innocent than downright evil intentions ever have. In other words, I don't see that doctor from the women's clinic as being able to mind her own business and ignoring the advice of someone more aware of the circumstances surrounding Ranma's pregnancy, possibly even convincing herself that Tofu's somehow 'involved' or simply covering for someone.
| Title: Like Minded
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2009 23:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bravo! Well done! I presented nearly the exact same concept, minus Nabiki's involvement, to the AniFics Forum several years back and was severely ridiculed for the very notion of Ranma self-impregnating himself by the so-called 'established' writers on site. This, of course, was shortly followed a couple of months later by a one-shot by one of those self-same writers in which an attempt by Ranma to cure himself of the curse left him permanently female save for one ovary being replaced with a testicle, thereby resulting in Ranma-chan getting herself pregnant on a near continuous basis. ... And, of course, the 'established' writers of the site lauded the writer for his 'outstanding' idea and exceptional writing, completely forgetting what had occurred only a couple months earlier. In any case, good job. I, for one, would like to see this carried on further. Might I suggest doing something different with Shampoo and adding her to the mix as a 'co-wife', rather the overly cliched 'psychotic' barbarian intent on killing Nabiki, the baby, and possibly Ranma now that he's once again 'locked'. Also, do not make the lock permanent; there has to be a reason for the Locking Ladle's existence, after all. And with Ranma presently female, and already pregnant, perhaps...Nabiki might convince her to 'experiment' further, as in 'Instant Jusenkyo Powder'. Hmm, if Shampoo's involved by that point, Nabiki might just find herself with 'two' pregnant wives and forced to take up a male persona on a more permanent basis in order to bring in enough income to support her growing family.
| Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2009 12:05 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
A great idea you have here... and I would like to see some hot girl on girl Ranma/Nabiki action. This story has a lot of potential and I'd really like to read more.
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