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 Title: awesome
Reviewed By: xepher [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 27, 2010 16:06 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Ok this story made me think of wat its be like to be prego and im a guy that made me had a dream that i was like ranma and had a kid
 Reviewed By: Pamela_Ibis [MediaMiner Member]  On: April 11, 2010 03:23 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
All and all a very good story the format and grammer was very good. I only noticed a few typos here and theres. As to my giving "Enjoyment Factor" and Overall Rating" 9's i felt that what the story and plot itself were great there was at times too many lemon scenes, resulting in me skipping to after the aforementioned lemon scene. Aside from that i loved the story ^^
 Reviewed By: WootMannen [MediaMiner Member]  On: November 24, 2009 12:08 CST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Well, I can honestly say this has been a very good read. That whole getting-yourself-pregnant thing is an awesome idea, and definetely not something I've seen before. Keep up the good work!
 Reviewed By: darthme1011 [MediaMiner Member]  On: May 13, 2009 23:22 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
wow that was a surprise
 Title: Epilogue
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member]  On: May 11, 2009 00:18 CDT
Rating(s):
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Beautiful ending here. This was such a heartwarming story. I really loved it. But you should have mentioned what happened to Kodachi and Tatewaki and how they reacted after Ranma's return. I'd also like to read more about Ranma-chan's interaction with the friends she made in school.
 Title: Chapter 16
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member]  On: May 10, 2009 06:24 CDT
Rating(s):
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
WOW! 4 chapters at once. I love you. Let's see. For the loopholes in the Amazon laws couldn't they have asked Mousse? I'm sure he must know the book by heart by now. He's probably spent a lot of time researching ways for him to legally get Shampoo.
 Reviewed By: D Travler [MediaMiner Member]  On: May 07, 2009 18:21 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
you are doing a good job with this and I agree with you in your note at the end of chapter 12 I have just one thing in this chapter would not Nabikis empolees have informed her about any gossip about her or her family if it was spreading as quickly as you seem to make it other wise it is a great story and I do hope life lets you finish it
 Title: Chapter 12
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member]  On: May 07, 2009 12:31 CDT
Rating(s):
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I love this story more and more. Excellent like always.
 Reviewed By: AMWOOD co [MediaMiner Member]  On: May 03, 2009 14:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
You yourself said she didn't know where things went wrong. I think that kind of states what is going through her mind. As much as I enjoy those stories as times, I'll vote against the foursome idea. As for the Phys Ed vote, I like the idea of 1 in favour, and even of Ranma attending with that, but what about having some members of the class making a stink of the issue. You know the kind of thing, "If HE attends then I don't." From the offices of AMWOOD co
 Title: Chapter 11
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member]  On: May 03, 2009 10:12 CDT
Rating(s):
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
First time I see Kasumi/Akane pairing. Very nice idea. All in all, another very enjoyable chapter. And I can't wait for the foursome. You're right not to rush things.
 Title: Chapter 11
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member]  On: May 03, 2009 08:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hate to say it, but an agreement to allow Ranma-chan to attend the girls' PE class passing by one vote is...hardly encouraging enough to justify attending. That narrow of a margin implies strongly that it would be far more trouble than it would be worth. If you're going to have Ranma attend, then the vote should be at least two-thirds, three-quarters or three-fifths, something to indicate that a majority of girls are willing to at least try to accept her as one of them.
 Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member]  On: April 29, 2009 19:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
Going fine so far. Once Ranma's been accepted by the girls at Furinkan things should move along at a more accelerated pace, as nine months written out day by by or even week by week would involve a _lot_ of writing and grow rather tedius quickly, _but_...that is _not_ to say that it will all go smoothly. Far from it. There'll no doubt be some girls that simply won't accept Ranma-chan among them, and there'll almost certainly be some boys who'll feel 'cheated' that Ranma-chan has, seemingly, always been interested in having sex with guys but always gave them nothing more than tantalizing glimpses...a cocktease. Either of which is likely to make life more difficult for Ranma. As for future children...all I can recommend is that at least one be a boy, as the majority of stories featuring Ranma's kids tends to have them all being girls. Girl/boy for Ranma and boy/girl for Nabiki would work too. Too make things a bit simpler, or more complicated depending on how you view it, you could go with the old standby that each subsequent use of the Instant Nanniichuan runs the risk of the temporary curse becoming permanent. To my knowledge, limited as it may be, pregnancy outside of wedlock still carries a considerable social stigma in Japan...this could lead to Ranma and Nabiki having to change their plans...as well as possibly creating new identities for their opposite genders. The Saotomes could adopt a daughter that was previously ronin (will likely need a new name, as Ranko is already taken), and the Tendo family could similarly adopt a son (will definitely need a new name, as Nabiki just won't work for a boy). Of course, this would also necessitate the revelation of the Instant Nanniichuan to the parents...although, I don't really think any of them are intelligent enough to figure out the full ramifications of their possession of it (at first anyway). And on a final note, while the incest angle between the Tendo sisters (and brother) is tempting...it's been done often enough in other fics and would likely only add unnecessary complications to the story.
 Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member]  On: April 28, 2009 23:55 CDT
Rating(s):
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hehehe. That was great. Too bad there won't be a foursome. Oh well... Ranma and the Mallet... priceless. I'd like to see Kuno on the receiving end of a double mallet strike by Ranma and Akane.
 Title: Chapter 9
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member]  On: April 27, 2009 04:21 CDT
Rating(s):
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Not much happening in this chapter, but some nice ideas. Good job.
 Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member]  On: April 25, 2009 14:47 CDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Wow this is an interesting idea. I'll admit it is something I have never considered. This is written well but there could be some more details in places, but overall it seems to be a good work to date.
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