| "I'm the Mother and the Father?" Reviews/Comments [ 35 ] |
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Title: What happened to Ch 6?
Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2009 18:40 CDT
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Good up to this point, but there is zilch in Chapter 6! Get it fixed. Nice read so far by the way
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Reviewed By: AMWOOD co [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2009 13:29 CDT
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Question about chapter 6. Where's it go? Perhaps it's just bad timing, but the chapter isn't here. Seven is, but... Anyway, I'll be back later to check again. I'm looking forward to reading more (as I said for chapter 5 before). From the offices of AMWOOD co
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Reviewed By: AMWOOD co [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2009 09:02 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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You're right, this story is a novel idea. Also, this last chapter reminds me of a song (sort of) called "Which to Bury, Us or the Hatchet?" by Relient K. Anyway, I'm looking forward to the rest of the story. From the offices of AMWOOD co
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Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2009 00:13 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 5. Excellent like always. Nice idea with Ranma using her ki to 'heal' morning sickness. Can't wait to see more.
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Title: Woo!
Reviewed By: adriannrod [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2009 20:52 CDT
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I checked vack to find a whole 2 more posts. This fic is love. :)
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Reviewed By: CelestIndigo [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 21:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Some grammer errors, some spelling (name) errors, but overall a great fic. I like the concept of Ranma becoming self-impregnated, Akane getting a dose of her own medicine, and R/N matchups. Lookin' forward to your next chapter.
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Title: Put on the brakes!
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 04:15 CDT
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Interesting. Judging from the comments you posted at the end of the fourth part you seem to be planning for Ranma to experience an accelerated pregnancy. Jusenkyo magic, again? Cologne made no mention of anything about such a pregnancy being unusual, other than the conception itself. Being hyper-fertile was mentioned, and understandable within the context of the story. An accelerated pregnancy is not. If it's not going to be accelerated, then it's highly unlikely that Ranma would begin experiencing morning sickness so soon. Or is this going to be a psychosomatic response to what she's going through?
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Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2009 23:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it. I don't think I've read many fics where the writer describes the pregnancy and its consequences in such great detail.
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2009 13:20 CDT
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Oh, chapter 3 is less than 20 words. Wanna fix it?
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Title: Chapter 3
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2009 04:11 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great new chapter. Can't wait for more. Oh, chapter 1 is gone.
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Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 17:17 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Glad to see more of this. You describe the situation really well. The only problem is the wall of text. It makes the story difficult to read. Try and put an extra space between the lines. That should help.
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Title: Wow.
Reviewed By: adriannrod [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 16:41 CDT
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Certainly a unique story. I sincerely hope you decide to continue this story. :)
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Title: Troubles Ahead
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 14:02 CDT
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Something's telling me that the news of Ranma's pregnancy is going to come out shortly, and not in a good way, nor due to a slip of the tongue on the parts of Ranma, Nabiki, or Tofu. Good, if misplaced, intentions have likely caused more harm and damage to the innocent than downright evil intentions ever have. In other words, I don't see that doctor from the women's clinic as being able to mind her own business and ignoring the advice of someone more aware of the circumstances surrounding Ranma's pregnancy, possibly even convincing herself that Tofu's somehow 'involved' or simply covering for someone.
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Title: Like Minded
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2009 23:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bravo! Well done! I presented nearly the exact same concept, minus Nabiki's involvement, to the AniFics Forum several years back and was severely ridiculed for the very notion of Ranma self-impregnating himself by the so-called 'established' writers on site. This, of course, was shortly followed a couple of months later by a one-shot by one of those self-same writers in which an attempt by Ranma to cure himself of the curse left him permanently female save for one ovary being replaced with a testicle, thereby resulting in Ranma-chan getting herself pregnant on a near continuous basis. ... And, of course, the 'established' writers of the site lauded the writer for his 'outstanding' idea and exceptional writing, completely forgetting what had occurred only a couple months earlier. In any case, good job. I, for one, would like to see this carried on further. Might I suggest doing something different with Shampoo and adding her to the mix as a 'co-wife', rather the overly cliched 'psychotic' barbarian intent on killing Nabiki, the baby, and possibly Ranma now that he's once again 'locked'. Also, do not make the lock permanent; there has to be a reason for the Locking Ladle's existence, after all. And with Ranma presently female, and already pregnant, perhaps...Nabiki might convince her to 'experiment' further, as in 'Instant Jusenkyo Powder'. Hmm, if Shampoo's involved by that point, Nabiki might just find herself with 'two' pregnant wives and forced to take up a male persona on a more permanent basis in order to bring in enough income to support her growing family.
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Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2009 12:05 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
A great idea you have here... and I would like to see some hot girl on girl Ranma/Nabiki action. This story has a lot of potential and I'd really like to read more.
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