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| "I'm the Mother and the Father?" Reviews/Comments [ 35 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] | Title: Chapter 16
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2009 06:24 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! 4 chapters at once. I love you. Let's see. For the loopholes in the Amazon laws couldn't they have asked Mousse? I'm sure he must know the book by heart by now. He's probably spent a lot of time researching ways for him to legally get Shampoo.
| Reviewed By: D Travler [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2009 18:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you are doing a good job with this and I agree with you in your note at the end of chapter 12 I have just one thing in this chapter would not Nabikis empolees have informed her about any gossip about her or her family if it was spreading as quickly as you seem to make it other wise it is a great story and I do hope life lets you finish it
| Title: Chapter 12
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2009 12:31 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story more and more. Excellent like always.
| Reviewed By: AMWOOD co [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2009 14:06 CDT
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You yourself said she didn't know where things went wrong. I think that kind of states what is going through her mind. As much as I enjoy those stories as times, I'll vote against the foursome idea. As for the Phys Ed vote, I like the idea of 1 in favour, and even of Ranma attending with that, but what about having some members of the class making a stink of the issue. You know the kind of thing, "If HE attends then I don't." From the offices of AMWOOD co
| Title: Chapter 11
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2009 10:12 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
First time I see Kasumi/Akane pairing. Very nice idea. All in all, another very enjoyable chapter. And I can't wait for the foursome. You're right not to rush things.
| Title: Chapter 11
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2009 08:59 CDT
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Hate to say it, but an agreement to allow Ranma-chan to attend the girls' PE class passing by one vote is...hardly encouraging enough to justify attending. That narrow of a margin implies strongly that it would be far more trouble than it would be worth. If you're going to have Ranma attend, then the vote should be at least two-thirds, three-quarters or three-fifths, something to indicate that a majority of girls are willing to at least try to accept her as one of them.
| Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2009 19:01 CDT
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Going fine so far. Once Ranma's been accepted by the girls at Furinkan things should move along at a more accelerated pace, as nine months written out day by by or even week by week would involve a _lot_ of writing and grow rather tedius quickly, _but_...that is _not_ to say that it will all go smoothly. Far from it. There'll no doubt be some girls that simply won't accept Ranma-chan among them, and there'll almost certainly be some boys who'll feel 'cheated' that Ranma-chan has, seemingly, always been interested in having sex with guys but always gave them nothing more than tantalizing glimpses...a cocktease. Either of which is likely to make life more difficult for Ranma. As for future children...all I can recommend is that at least one be a boy, as the majority of stories featuring Ranma's kids tends to have them all being girls. Girl/boy for Ranma and boy/girl for Nabiki would work too. Too make things a bit simpler, or more complicated depending on how you view it, you could go with the old standby that each subsequent use of the Instant Nanniichuan runs the risk of the temporary curse becoming permanent. To my knowledge, limited as it may be, pregnancy outside of wedlock still carries a considerable social stigma in Japan...this could lead to Ranma and Nabiki having to change their plans...as well as possibly creating new identities for their opposite genders. The Saotomes could adopt a daughter that was previously ronin (will likely need a new name, as Ranko is already taken), and the Tendo family could similarly adopt a son (will definitely need a new name, as Nabiki just won't work for a boy). Of course, this would also necessitate the revelation of the Instant Nanniichuan to the parents...although, I don't really think any of them are intelligent enough to figure out the full ramifications of their possession of it (at first anyway). And on a final note, while the incest angle between the Tendo sisters (and brother) is tempting...it's been done often enough in other fics and would likely only add unnecessary complications to the story.
| Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2009 23:55 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hehehe. That was great. Too bad there won't be a foursome. Oh well... Ranma and the Mallet... priceless. I'd like to see Kuno on the receiving end of a double mallet strike by Ranma and Akane.
| Title: Chapter 9
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2009 04:21 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not much happening in this chapter, but some nice ideas. Good job.
| Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2009 14:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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Wow this is an interesting idea. I'll admit it is something I have never considered. This is written well but there could be some more details in places, but overall it seems to be a good work to date.
| Title: Chapter 8
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2009 19:07 CDT
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While I think the girls would accept a pregnant Ranma-chan as just another girl amongst them - after all, how much more proof of femininity do you need than being pregnant - I don't see Ranma-chan attending PE after receiving a doctor's excuse. Instead, she'd likely be relegated to study hall (or in Ranma's case, specifically, and after certain teacher's become aware of 'her' condition, taking 'make up' classes that all girls are 'required' to take...I believe Planned Parenthood is a required course for girls in Japan, although I could easily be mistaken, it's optional for boys).
| Title: Chapter 8
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2009 07:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great work like always. Your author's note made me laugh. I've thought the same thing more than once. Keep up the good work.
| Title: Further Experiments
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2009 10:17 CDT
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A remarkably well done account of how Ranma convinces herself to try out sex with a male Nabiki, much better than most other such attempts. Can't say that I approve of Nabiki-kun's being 'larger' than Ranma-kun's, as it was already pointed out earlier that Ranma-kun's was 'impressive' in Nabiki-chan's opinion. 'Course, it could just be Ranma-chan's altered perspective, being overall smaller while female. Still favoring getting Shampoo into the mix, by the way. Nice touch with the doctor as well. Hmm, might there be a future visit by her to the Dojo to see how things stand with her own eyes? As for Ryouga...I have a bit of a love/hate opinion of him, myself. The anime episodes featuring the oni that took over and brought out the characters' 'dark desires' was a good indicator that Ryouga isn't at all clueless about sex, not if one of his dark desires was to rape Akane in the shower. Shy and easily flustered, yes; ignorant, no. Which is rather at odds with his fainting nosebleeds when exposed to female nudity. Still, can't really see anything occurring between Ranma-chan and Ryouga, even if Ryouga's having a few 'fantasies' now and then. Too, I could see Ranma-chan willing to see if she actually feels any...desire...when confronted with the option of a nude Ryouga-kun...at full attention. Ranma-chan leaving an aroused and horny Ryouga-kun in the furo, upon finding that he just doesn't do anything for her sexually, could be a good time for Akane to make one of her (un)intentional appearances in the furo, also nude and likely intending to ease a bit sexual tension herself. Then, before Akane can explode about finding Ranma-chan and Ryouga-kun together in the furo, nude, Ranma-chan blithely walks out and informs her that Ryouga's all hers and to enjoy herself. Will she or won't? With all of his blood presently occupied in the lower portion of his body, would Ryouga even be able to pass out with a nosebleed...even if he wanted to? Just some ponderings.
| Title: Chapter
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2009 23:55 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent. That was one hot scene. Although, Ranma probably wouldn't have agrred to try sex with a man so soon. But who knows what the hormones make you do. I like it. But please, no Ranma/Ryoga sex scene. Adding Kasumi and Akane though, I wouldn't mind. Seems to me that all of the daughters are big perverts.
| Title: Chapter 6
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2009 23:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not much to say about this chapter except that I love it.
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