| "Final Chapter" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: Babs Bunny On: August 30, 2003 09:30 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the ending, very original, and it is better without that last paragraph.
Write more please. |
Reviewed By: dogbertcarroll On: July 10, 2003 21:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
I liked it. I hate the 'jump to the future another story bit' but the rest was great. |
Reviewed By: Mar [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2003 21:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed your story quite much, yet there are some things that bothered me.
On the plus side, it's not another Ranma/Akane storie. There's just too many of them. RANMA/FEMALE ORIGINAL OR GIRL FROM ANOTHER SERIES STORIES RULES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And the best part that Kat accepted Ranma for who he is. That's all what Ranma truely wanted.
But on the down side, This story ended to shortly. You made Mousse and Ryoga hooked up with Shampoo and Ukyo. Those pairings had been done to death. MOUSSE/FEMALE ORIGINAL OR GIRL FROM ANOTHER SERIES AND RYOGA/AKARI STORIES RULE!!!!!! And what about Kuno and Kodachi? How did they felt when their enemy/beloved one disappeared? And how did Ranma and Kat fell in loved with each other?
Above all that, it's was still a pretty good story and I hope that you'll make more of them like this someday.
Keep it up,
Mari |
Reviewed By: 0058 On: January 08, 2003 12:32 CST
Comment/Review:
I realy like your story...
Well, to be honest, I like everything better than ranma/akane ;-).
It would also make a great continuation without the last paragraph. |
Reviewed By: yy8 On: January 07, 2003 17:00 CST
Comment/Review:
I actually really enjoyed this fic. I haven't really seen many of this type original character insertion anymore. I like fics that end up happy. Your writing is quite solid. I don't mind the dialog to not be in prose format (but maybe because I dont mind screenplay format?) Please keep writing. |
Reviewed By: Marktwain On: October 15, 2002 09:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey Grey,
I love the dialogue. Your much better at writing dialogue than myself. But on the down side I cant say it struck me as too orginal. But a couple of nice plot twists and you'll really have something. Well thats my opinion for what its worth. |
Reviewed By: MadPsyence On: October 17, 2002 05:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok.. I'll be honest. I only read half of it because the dialog pattern was very annoying. I think it would be much improved if it was written in the standard fashion of; "Come back here boy!" Genma yelled around a mouth full of food.
Nabiki sighed. "Geeze Mr. Saotome," her face contorted in disgust, "swallow first."
Your grammar is decent. You chose a tense and stuck to it for the most part. Bravo. |
Reviewed By: Grey Destiny [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2002 15:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
Horray, a review.
Thank U.
I'm so happy. |
