Reviewed By: Kohaku [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2003 18:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting start... MACKENZIE! lol! The main character is YOU XD!!!! lol. nah. you have black hair anyway. Good start as I've said before. One tinie-winie-little thing though. Make your chaps longer, bud. That's pretty much it. Just some very damn blunt advice from a friend...lol XD;
Your spelling and writing is also quite bad in the beginning. Sorry for such harsh ratings for just gettin' here, but MM is a pretty harsh place... *shudders* *cough* btw... I never actually knew you were good at writing... you never seemed to show it... You just drew pictures... lol X);; yeah, well, you can edit that chap to make it better if you want... you'll have to erase the whole thing, fix it in whatever program you have (Microsoft Word? I use Microsoft Frontpage) and then repost the chapter. That's pretty much it... yeah, well, your ideas are definately unique. Keep it up, Bubz1! *gives 'er a thumbs up and continued listening to Hamasaki Ayumi's song Hanabi* I love this song... |
