| "A Disaster Play" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
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Reviewed By: zinx On: September 20, 2003 14:52 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey!! Whats th idea here
I like your story why you stop writing ?
why didn't you update the story?
Oh yeah if you notice the date from this reviwe
it be like hmm... let me see.. 8 MONTHS since you worte anything . please write soon. |
Reviewed By: GREEN EMBER On: August 21, 2003 19:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story was good overall. The originality was quite impressive. The spelling was something else to consider. But I liked it overall.
"MORE!!!" My friend shouted. Sweat drop. |
Reviewed By: Ooahati Elf [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2003 10:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
I didn't relaize that I wasn't logged in! If I flame people I want them to know that I am not a coward, so I won't do it anonymous. Kaser can apologize, but I like being upfront and Frank. If it seems cruel...::shrugs::
~Zufluchtsort~ |
Reviewed By: Kaser [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2003 00:21 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Comment/Review:
First I want to appologize for my friends, they have been cruel for quite some time now.
Second I would like to tell you that I do not mean to insult you.
For originality/creativity I gave you a five for several reasons, I think there are some good ideas in this, when I read the summary I was sure Jounouchi would be the princess...I'm sure most people would have done it that way. I can't give you higher because it isn't uncomon for people to put the characters in existing stories, also the main plot will have to follow Sleeping Beauty.
As for spelling and grammar: there are several points where this needs work. Sure am I, for example is a grammer mistake. Also there is a point in chapter one where you say a few people sweet droop. Like OoshatiElf said, you could use a betareader, I would be happy to do this for you, if you like. At the very least you should read through it carefully and correct any mistakes you see.
Again, I hope you don't feel offended by my review, I just want to help. |
Reviewed By: OOshatiElf On: July 16, 2003 22:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Muttered Kaiba as he was brushing...brushing?! I will reiterate myself...spellcheck is our friend! Is English your first language? If it is not then I can understand...but if it is your first langauge, then God save us all.
~Zufluchtsort~ |
Reviewed By: OoshatiElf On: July 16, 2003 22:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one of the worst fics I have ever read.
Your grammar and spelling are horrible!
Instead of the title being Disaster Play,
it should be Disaster English. Yamo?
But I do have to say that this story gave
my friends and I funny quotes. My advice BETAREADER!
~Zufluchtsort~ |
Reviewed By: Taffy On: July 11, 2003 13:44 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
The reasons behind my ratings are as follows:
Take some kind of course in English, please. This whole fic sounds like you had to look at a something-to-English-dictionary for every other word. The plural of "woman" is "women", among other things.
Also, the plot is lacking... kind of lame. When you're working with "The Sleeping Beauty" (where all the characters are female) and "Yu-Gi-Oh" (where all the characters are male)... you're trying to make humor out of it, I think, but crossing over those two just doesn't work out.
On the other hand, I have been enjoying this; it's so bad it's hilarious. Please write more, so I can keep laughing myself to death over it.
Well, I'm sorry! I can't bring myself to give a glowing review to an awful fanfic. |
Reviewed By: sprinket On: June 29, 2003 05:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Tat was so funni but mabe a bit more grammer but tat doesnt mean i don wanna c next chap |
Reviewed By: Evil Inga and Evil Yami Inga [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2003 15:53 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!! that was so cool! you gotta update this! OH FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THAT IS SAINE PLZ UPDATE!!! |
Reviewed By: purplechaos04 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2003 14:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lol... Looking at the reviews I notice Dark Lady Setsuna complaining about spelling errors. Maybe she should check her own "speling" first. Anyway, I like your story so far! The plot is very original and funny. Hehehe, just wondering, but do Kaiba and Joey end up falling for each other? That would be cute although a bit predictable I guess. Well I'm looking forward to more chapters! |
Reviewed By: Saphirerose [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2003 19:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was cruel. I really really liked this. Poor Yami Bakura is so dead when Seto and Joey get their hands on him. Anyway I can't wait for the next part. |
Reviewed By: Shashomiru On: March 01, 2003 18:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hah.That was so funny.Especially, because Joey is my favorite character and..(looks at fingers:Joey,Marik,Seto,Bakura--)~_~;Oh wait.Seto is my third favorite character--I think.(Starts counting on fingers again.); (Gets lost in happy place thinking of more ideas for my story)Oh yeah.So anyway I'm a really good artist.But do you need a scanner--anyone?Natsume Nara. ~Shashomiru~ ~_~ |
Reviewed By: Millenia [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2003 23:11 CST
Comment/Review:
OH THAT'S BAAAD! ^_^ CONTINUE! |
Reviewed By: Dark Lady Setsuna [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2003 21:28 CST
Comment/Review:
^_^ that was really good!! keep writing although i caught a few speling errors they kinda bug me so could you be more care ful plz? ^_^ i like how kiaba is the princess i would have thought joey would be it ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Saphirerose [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2003 19:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh that is so evil. Joey as the prince and Seto as the Princess talk about original. I can't wait for the next part. |
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