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| "Expectation" Reviews/Comments [ 82 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: Shinobu/miwaofKurama On: October 18, 2003 20:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
THIS IS GRRREEAAT!!!!!!! /bwonderful job!/b PLEEAASE pretty please write more!!! Mabe even add SesshouMaru-sama!!! Good job! Nice idea of adding Kouga! I sense a confrontationfor inuyasha. Keep up the good work!! ;)
| Reviewed By: Ehioze On: October 17, 2003 12:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WRITE MORE PLEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAASSSSSSSSEEEEEEE!!!!
| Reviewed By: originalNekoYasha [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2003 01:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow! good story plot, very emotional. this is wonderfully written so keep writing! please update soon
| Reviewed By: flame81 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2003 23:16 CDT
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good well-plotted story, keep on the work!
| Title: Oh no! My precious paragraph deviders!
Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2003 18:42 CDT
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Curses; they suck! At least the story was fun. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The dream sequence, hmmm... I can see all those things blending together in Kagome's dream. Fear of familial disapproval, fear that Kikyo's accusations are more than half-truths, fear of losing her education, a few fuzzy benefits...
| Title: Blame the New Math!
Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2003 18:40 CDT
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I grow weary of mm rendering my comments into one paragraph... The new math was to blame for everything. Amen! What if Mama finds out? Honey, if Mama's seen your tummy, she already knows. The dreamlike math was a good touch. Kept it from looking like a contrived dream-lemon. I was just thinking that the Miroku / Sango arc was a little on the boring side, and now Kouga shows up. Mmmmmmm! Now I can't wait! I must see if my html tags have worked!
| Title: ? ....the future ruler of the world! muahahaa....
Reviewed By: a lazi tOkU-cHaN On: September 06, 2003 22:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YO!!!! hilo Nanda! how my forum daughter doing? (that sounded odd).... LOOK!!! it's the rE v I e Wi E- mOb I l E!! as Ithilwen calls it.... ^.~ Weeeeellllll...... wanna popsicle? .:looks at Nanda who's about to go crazi:. JKJKJK!!! ^^''' well, I really don't know what to say, except I love this, and I feel so sorri for everone! (with the exception of Kikyou) ^_^ so update as soon as you get over that damn writers block! I know! meditation!!! ^^* thats what my dad says....=_=
Close your eyes and take a deep breath. focus on your breathing. Now in your minds eye, see an auther being crushed by bricks. imagine that author you. imagine that that is your writers block. Then start to lift the blocks with an invisible force \, and proceed to crumble them until they're a fine powder and blows in the mind-created wind. Whe the wind dies away, you now see..... a SUPER AUTHOR!!! WITH LOT OF IDEAS!!!
^_^'''' well.... everything up to the last sentence.... eheheheheeee..... ^_^ | Reviewed By: Hopeless14foru On: August 19, 2003 15:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh this was great. I almost cried (I don't cry so I probably would be crying if I could) Bravo!!! | Reviewed By: Babsie On: August 18, 2003 23:44 CDT
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Sooo good!
I like very much this chapter, but when you intent to make the fuck stupid hanyou realized that he only had to say the three little words???
And kagome had to be tought...she crying too much...
Kikyo was perfect...seh is sooo mean all the time...perfect.
I love
Please, update soon | Reviewed By: kirayasha [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2003 07:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oi Nanda! This is one powerful scene here at the end! It's like just who saw what? & I love it! As for those people who hate this chapter and/or for introducing Kikyou back into the mix. Let me say this to all of you. What you all forget & Kagome too, is that while once upon a time Inuyasha did love Kikyou, he doesn't now, or at least the love he feels for her isn't romantic love. For a while there he hated the bitch for what she did to him, then after a long talk with Miroku, where he sorted out his feelings, he realized, that while he does have feelings for her...it's more of a fondness & that the whole thing whether he's aware of it or not is tinged with guilt. He feels responsible for what happened to her. The reason he holds her every time they meet is beacuse they have a history together as well as the fact that what do most normal caring people do when comfronted by someone who's hurting? They touch them...he's merely trying to make her feel better. & I think both of them know he doesn't have the same feelings for her that he once did. This pisses off Kikyou & she the whole poor little me thing simply because she knows he loves Kagome now & she knows it bothers Kagome to see them together like that. Kikyou is pushing Kagome's buttons here. She has no feelings for Inuyasha other than how to bring him down to hell with her, not because she wants him there with her, but simply because if I can't have him, then nobody will. In another time and place Kagome would happily forgive him, because she knows that to be true. Or why else would she constantly forgive him? I don't think she's that stupid....But you all need to have faith in Inuyasha, he will do the right thing by her. She just feeling depressed somethiung neither she, nor Inuyasha I think, has picked up on. Remember she feels she can't go home to her mother which is probably where she wants to be, she feels huge and unattractive because he's went all cautious and chivalous on her...some guys just can't handle the idea that a pregnant woman can have sexual feelings... he sees her as a madona figure, something not to be touched. Kagome is doing her best to get him over that & Kikyou's arrival isn't going to help things, but she has to realize he in no way shape, or form finds her unattractive. But then again as someone around 16 from a time when body image is everything, being pregnant and the accompanying weight gain isn't going to do a lot for her self esteem. There's conflict here people real conflict, Nanda has done a wonderful job of making you care enough about Inuyasha, Kagome & the 'pup'that you all got upset with her. So rather than shoot her down in flames you should be applauding her talent as a writer! I know I for one do! Bravo Nanda! luv kira
PS: for the reviewer who thought this story was depressing...I don't know, it is & yet it isn't. Inuyasha really isn't a jerk & Kagome knows this. You have to look at his life for a minute here: Orphaned at the tender age of 5 he was left to raise himself, because his older brother was in no possition to raise him. He has his own issues to deal with & that has nothing to do with this story. Kikyou never really loved him either if you sit down & take a good look at that relationship. Because say what you will, if you love someone, you don't try to change them! Kikyou wanted Inuyasha to use the Shikon no tama to become HUMAN! She didn't love him for who is like Kagome. Inuyasha feels responsible & he's being what he feels is a man about it. Once he realizes what Kikyou is doing...and well we all know how dense he is & that's why we love him, he's not going to go running every time she appears... But in being deprssed about this chapter you're telling me Nanda did her job & did it right! Life as you stated isn't all chocolates & sakura blossoms! This story kicked in the gut like it was supposed to because it felt real! I think you should come back & read the rest of it! & That's for anyone else turned off by this chapter too! I've been lucky to read this before hand & I have to say I LOVED the fact that Nanda brought in Kikyou! It's exactly what Inuyasha & Kagome need! They always seem to grow closer each time she shows up. Actually they do that too when Sesshy shows up....(hint, hint) *laughs* so stop all the flames people, take a go look at the story again & I think you'll be applauding & standing alongside me when they hand out the awards for best fanfic to Nanda! | Reviewed By: Aisuru On: August 11, 2003 15:34 CDT
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Good fic! I'm pregnant right now (almost finished with the first trimester), so this appeals to me on many levels. Can't wait for chapter 11 to come out. ;) | Reviewed By: kookie On: August 11, 2003 10:10 CDT
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Poor Kagome is in for some more pain. Inuyasha doesn't have a clue does he? Great writing! | Reviewed By: Julia On: August 11, 2003 20:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright, I just want to start by saying that I've read all your fics (mostly on your web site), and I've liked them all a lot until this one. I made the enjoyment factor so low simply because this story depresses the crap out of me. And I mean that in the sense of I realize Inuyasha was/is in love with Kikyou in the manga/anime, but also in the manga/anime you get the sense that he loves Kikyou and Kagome, and he really can't choose, but he always goes to Kikyou out of regret and guilt. I know you don't need me to tell you any of this, it's just that, well, Inuyasha has basically ruined Kagome's life in this fic, and being the moronic jerk that he is, doesn't seem to have a bloody clue. She can't go back to her time with a quarter youkai child, she wants the child to have a father too, so she has to stay in the past, not to mention what her family thinks. So, she has no home except with him really, and she doesn't have him. She'll never no love unless it is with him, though, simply because of who the father of her baby is, not to mention the fact that she isn't married and that was looked on real well 500 years ago (sarcasm). She's tainted according to both humans and youkai, no one will want her, and apparently neither does the father. So for real family she basically has Shippou and the baby, and of course friends. But for all the love Kagome gives, she recieves almost none in return, and it just hurts to read. I realize this isn't the end of the fic, I don't know where you're going with it, and I know Kagome would sacrifice her happiness for Inuyasha's, letting him go with Kikyou if that's what he wants. But honestly, if it were me, even if he didn't decide to die with Kikyou, I'd seperate myself from him, letting my child have a father, but being honest with myself about the situation, and I wouldn't forgive him. He had sex with her, he knew the consequences, and as far as I'm concerned, I don't care who he is or isn't in love with, Kikyou is dead, it wasn't his fault, but he has ruined Kagome's *life*, and it is completely unforgivable. Unless he loves her, Kagome. But right now, he doesn't seem to, and that's kind of why I'm glad the manga/anime is a lot more innocent. Inuyasha in cannon would never have sex unless he loved the girl I think, and thankfully this situation isn't an option. Though crap like this happens all the time in real life. Like I said it's just painful to read. I hope you get this review and take my thoughts into account, because I'm not a Kikyou hater by any means, I pity her I suppose, but I do hate the idea of Inuyasha and Kikyou together at the end, and I hate what it does to Kagome. But if you end with Inuyasha and Kagome not together, I get it, I just want Inuyasha to know fully what he has done, the only good thing to come out of it will be the child, and above all, I want Kagome to find some sort of happiness, and I want her to find love, real love. I've gone off on a tangent, I don't blame you if you're annoyed, but I just wanted to tell you why this story bothers me, as realistic as I guess it could be. Thanks for your stories, you really are a wonderful writer, and I do enjoy them, this one just... hurts.
Arigatou :)
Julia | Reviewed By: Hopeless143foru On: August 10, 2003 21:11 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
EVIL EVIL EVIL chapter 10!! OMG WHY WHY WHY. Oh man I can't believe you brought kikyou into this... although it is a great twist. WOW you are good. Oh man great writing.... I hope you have Inuyasha like kill her or something.... that would be cool. I hope you get the next chapter up soon. I can't take to anexity of waiting!!! Bu-Bye ~*~Jess~*~ | Reviewed By: Babsie On: August 10, 2003 21:07 CDT
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OMG
I´m so sorry for Kagome...
She must be sooo hurt...
Why Inuyasha has to do such a think?
Please, fix it.
And update asap...
I Hope you are doing a happy end :-)
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