| "The New Student and Kagome's Secret" Reviews/Comments [ 1030 ] |
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Reviewed By: bejinder On: July 15, 2005 14:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love it, one of the best i have read from MediaMiner. I hope you update soon. I'm waiting for the special edition chapter. I hope there's a sequal!
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Title: wow This is good...
Reviewed By: skits_revenge On: July 06, 2005 00:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I rated cruely and it still is high! I have been reading two days straight and i absolutly love the originality and the rance and action of the story... You should literally publish this is a book or somthing. People all over would love to read this. Inuyasha is my absolute favorite anime and you have made him into somthing with feelings that actually smiles! I just have to say this to you:: WRITE ON GIRL!!!! (book humor, haha) O.o Dont ask...
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Title: mistake
Reviewed By: Inuyashaskoishii [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 17:38 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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you have pretty good ideas and writng. i just wanted to let you know, even if someone has already told you, that new moon means NO moon. as in the sky only has stars and the moon is non-existent. anyway, ur writing rox.
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Title: mistake
Reviewed By: Inuyashaskoishii [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 17:38 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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you have pretty good ideas and writng. i just wanted to let you know, even if someone has already told you, that new moon means NO moon. as in the sky only has stars and the moon is non-existent. anyway, ur writing rox.
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2005 04:06 CDT
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Continued- To keep in character, I've had the same trouble myself. And to have Inuyasha "die" (I don't know if he is really dead but I think I can guess judging from the rest of the story) after he just had this big transfromation didn't click right. Why go through all that trouble just for him to die? He was apparently given more energy from this transfromation, he was cleaned up and groomed, and had no trouble fighting Sesshoumaru. It wasn't needed for him to die, again just mellow drama. If it had not been hinted at so much in the previous chapters it would have been a good twist. But he just kept talking about how he felt like he wasn't going to make it through this battle and living all his power to rule with Kagome. It killed the twist. But at the same time it would have been no different if he had been going on about how he was going to be fine. He should have just been ready for either outcome. Well I'm going to start reading again even though I'm sure by now that you don't want me too. Keep in mind please that this all just my persoanl opinion and I'm not trying to insult you. You really are one of my favorite authors and I just couldn't lie to you. I would have felt bad if I had simply wrote you a review saying "Wow I loved it! It was so amazing!!! WOOOHOOO!!!" And I didn't really mean it. So I hope you don't hate me for giving my honest opinon. Even if I did take up three full reviews to give it. ^_^
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2005 03:54 CDT
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Continued- The big storm in the sky with lighting, the energy darts from Tokijin, the wind scare, and backlash wave, and Inuyasha's transfromation. It was this big show of a battle designed to entertain a live audience not captivate a reading one. There should have been less energy and light power and more real hardcore fighting. That would have been something more able to be felt and visualize. I have no idea what it feels like to be hit with a pink ball of miko energy, but I do know what it's like to be punched and to throw one. I think that would relate lot more to readers. Sesshoumaru I thought was too wordy. He talked too much and that stepped so far out of his character that it maight as well have been a completely different character that you made up. You said in the battle that after his transfromation Inuyasha was the one this time to be calm when facing Sesshoumaru's attacks. But Sesshoumaru was never really calm. He kept going on about how he hated Kagome and how he detested Inuyasha and a half-breed couldn't challenge him, he was growling, his eyes were turning red, etc. So he wasn't scary at all. The frightening thing about Sesshoumaru was that he doesn't talk very much. You never know what he's thinking or when he's going to attack. He is the definition of the word "calm" his face is set in complete indifference most of the time. This was not Sesshoumaru in these chapters, it was someone else. I can't even picture him acting the way you described. But he is hard |
Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2005 03:38 CDT
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I know I haven't read or reviewed in a long time and it seems pretty pointless to try and give you advice now since the story's over but it may help you in the future on other stories. Please don't hate me by the way.I've only gotten up to the part where Inuyasha has no seemingly died after the transformation. My thouhhts on the battle and the chapters with Sakura was that it was like you tried to hard to put in drama and as a result the deepth was lost. Everything moved so quickly (that may have been your intention of trying to end the story)but it took away from it alot. There was no suspence at all. I wasn't worried or excited because I knew Kagome would be fine, and I knew Sakura would get caught. Even the dialogue was lacking. Sakura:"I hate you because you left me and I want to kill you!" You tried to make it look like she had suffered and her hate had been born out of that. But the story was too predictable and moved to fast to give her character and her words any subtance. To me she was just a speed bump thrown in to create some mellow drama. Her character didn't make any dent or envoke any emotion. The plot structure got really basic in these chapters. The fight between Kagome and Sakura and the battle I felt were too showy. If I were there actually watching this battle I wouldn't scared, I would judt be looking at the big light show. The pretty pink and blue balls of miko energy with different colored electricity, the sword and staff spinning trick, the big storm in |
Reviewed By: whiteshadow [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2005 11:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I luv this story!!!! You need to either write another chapter, or write a sequel...cause believe me, I will read both!!!
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Reviewed By: alatero [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2005 14:43 CDT
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I know you haven't updated in a while, but please post the "special edition chapter" soon! I've been waiting for more than a month for it! I'm dying here! And I would love it if you wrote a sequel, but I think it might actually take away from this story if you did....it's just so good!
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Title: YUPP!!!
Reviewed By: whiteshadows [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 20:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOOHOO!! YEAH!! BEST STORY EVER!!! You most make more!! i can live with out your storys!!! and i just read the "last" story >.< NOOOOOOOOO!!! *sniff, sniff* you just have to keep going! ever give up! GO GO GO!!!!!!!
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Title: Im...In LOVE!!!
Reviewed By: whiteshadows [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2005 19:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
HEHEHE!!! i feel so good!!! It most be love! Im totally in love with your story! YEAH! your a great writer! and i hope to be as good as you. I have all these great idea's just floating around in my big fat head. (and you would think with my fat head that i would get at lest a B- on my math test) enyhow...I can't wait to rad the rest of your story. OH be the way im only on Chapter 21 (at lest i think i am ~_~' hehe) and so far it soooooooo COOOOOLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!! WOOHOO!!!!! Ok i think im talking to must so im going to stop here, and please let me know what you of me be comeing a writer?! PS: this is a mother *beep*ing kick *beep* STORY! YEAH!!!
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Title: love your story
Reviewed By: iloveanime8(hope no one has that name On: May 04, 2005 15:17 CDT
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THE BEST STORY EVER EVER EVER omg i totally love your story i will wait for that adicional chapter i will miss this story when is done
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Reviewed By: Jason C On: April 22, 2005 13:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
One of the best stories I have ever read on this site or in case any other site. I really hope that you will one day continue this story (Sequal) Until then I will be looking out for any other stories you write. So bye and good luck with your stories
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Title: Lesa
Reviewed By: Inu-Kag15 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2005 17:31 CDT
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hurry hurry, i've been waiting forever and i can't wait any longer, i've gotta know if they get together or not, you're so cruel, lol update fast!
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Title: Love your storys
Reviewed By: 1Inuyashafan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2005 00:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really love this story its one of my favorites I think you should defenitly write a squeal. good luck on deciding to write a squeal, and if you do I can't wait to read. love always: Maria
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