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Reviewed By: Lemony Fresh(not SIed) On: March 05, 2004 22:22 CST
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"Go out with me." ??? wow! how blunt O_O update soon! lol im excited!!!! HAHAHA and add more fluff damnit! XD
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Reviewed By: YasashiiAme [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2004 22:20 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE!! USE COMMAS!!! It is getting VERY CONFUSING! Thank you for the Japanese word translations. I really hate stories with J-words unless if there are translations. Thanks again. Good job on the chapter. Write more soon!
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Reviewed By: Lagra [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2004 19:21 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice.
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Reviewed By: DBZ Lover (no time 4 signin' in!) [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2004 16:48 CST
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Damn, InuYasha's being pretty straightforward, isn't he? Wonder what Kagome's reaction's gonna be to that? Anywayz, g2g, be back 4 da next update!
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Reviewed By: Orb [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2004 15:09 CST
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Super great chappie. I'm glad Kagome is ok. Shippo is so cute ^__^. I have 23 new updates to read so I better get cracking. I cant wait till I get to your next updated chapter.
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Reviewed By: Zero Satotome On: March 05, 2004 01:39 CST
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Aww, yay! ^_^ He finally asked her out. I hope she says yes. Please write more soon.
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Reviewed By: Tangy_Lemon On: March 04, 2004 16:15 CST
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ok i feel like a dumb ass >_< i meant inu/kag...not kaff >_< im sucha fuckin dolt! sorry o.o!!! BTW update soonies!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Lemony Fresh(not SIed) On: March 04, 2004 16:13 CST
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nice chapter. update again soon :3
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Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2004 16:12 CST
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Another okay chapter. I'm sorry, but the story is just dull. You might be trying to be realistic, but boring, everyday lives don't make good reading. So, yeah, you should spice up the story a bit.
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Reviewed By: DBZ Lover (no time 4 signin' in!) On: March 04, 2004 16:12 CST
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Update soon!
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Reviewed By: MIztikal_Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2004 01:50 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awweee how cute. keep up the good work. i cannot wait until you update. so peeeeeees and carrots hurry up..*sniffles* oh well. its soooo cute.. Krystal.
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2004 01:21 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awwwhow sweet
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Title: Some Cnstructive Critisism
Reviewed By: Melphina_xgp [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2004 17:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
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I just read chapter six and realized you took care of most of the things I said before but there was one part in this chapter where Inuyasha takes Kagome to a fancy restaurant and he says Shippou was at an aunt's house and then later, that same day, they go to Sesshoumaru's house and Rin was there becuase she spent the night and she told Kagome that she spent the night with Shippou. Now, if I'm not mistaken, you said Shippou was at an aunt's house and did Kagome ever call Kaede to let her know that she wouldn't be coming to work for a week? Maybe after you put the finishing touches on your chapter, you should leave it for about an hour and then come back and re-read the chapter again becuase a lot of the things don't make sense. Well at least not to me they don't! I'm not trying to be overly rude but I think so far the story is pretty good and you just need to improve the plot and the chain of events because I really would like to see you get better at this, not that I'm such a great writer myself but....well anyway, you get what I'm trying to say here, right?
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Title: Baby sitter
Reviewed By: Melphina_xgp [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2004 16:43 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your fanfic is great and all but I'd like to ask you one question? WHO IS WATCHING SHIPPOU? I don't mean when he goes to the daycare place and Kagome keeps an eye on him. I mean like when they go to the club after Kagome comes n=back from work and Inuyasha goes, too, and Sesshoumaru always seems to be there, too. I mean, what the hell? It's not like the kid can take care of himself--he's only five years old for crying out loud! Anyway, I had a few suggestions and I think one might be a baby sitter or something for Shippou and when will Kaede be coming back to work? Will Kagome ever have a nervous breakdown or something because getting only two or three hours of sleep a day makes it physically impossible for the body to maintain consiousness over a long period of time (and I'm not bragging or anything, but I would know becuase my major is in the pharmaceutical department, not actually a pharmacist but close enough). Currently, I'm only on the fifth chapter, so sorry if things are a little rude or stupid-ssounding. Good luck and thanx for updating so frequently. I hope my suggesstions help. Ja ne.
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Title: Daman 388
Reviewed By: Daman 388 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2004 05:26 CST
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yeah, you had best be done with your spacing out tina! lol, jk this is turning out great so far, keep em coming!
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