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| "Office Supplies" Reviews/Comments [ 49 ] | | Pages (4): [ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: ShadowFireHeart [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2009 12:14 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AKIO U R MY HERO!!!!!!!!! I LUV U SO MUCH I...I'm STALKING U!!!!! (Yami: that a little wrong...) Okay, actually I'm not, but the point is, YOU NEED TO WRITE MORE ALREADY!!!
| Reviewed By: Danielle! On: March 09, 2007 17:04 CST
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^_^ Not as funny as the other chapter, but that's probably b/c the other chapters were more original. (This one was less original b/c of the Harry Potter thing...) But this was still funny, though! ^_^ And you UPDATED! What was the Michelle thing? It made me think of Michael Jackson...
| Title: Mistakes I found!
Reviewed By: Danielle! On: March 09, 2007 16:52 CST
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^_^ FUNNY! I'm still rereading. In chapter 5 I found some mistakes I didn't point out before. First mistake! Thanks for finding it Yami! (..Kaiba was threatening to beat me up… O O;;) Is that supposed to be in parenthesis? And then a few lines later, you said "Clicky. I guess you forgot to finish the quotation marks. Anyway... ^_^ I think when you said "the fanciest..." and then they were at Taco Bell, that was my favorite part of this chapter. ^^; Ok, I'll keep on rereading!
| Title: I'm rereading this before I read the new chapters
Reviewed By: Danielle! On: March 09, 2007 16:27 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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XD XD XD XD XD I'd forgotten how hilariously hilarious this is!! XD XD And how original the humor is! ^^ Lol!
| Reviewed By: Malik and Bakuras kinky slave [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2005 11:30 CST
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YAY RANDOMNESS!!!!!! I love this story!! Randomness is da boom!!
| Title: What's the Difference is an awesome song... i think. I've only heard the instrumental. What's a title again? Oh, it's optional. Alrighty then.
Reviewed By: Sour Akio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 22:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
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*The "What's the Difference" instrumental is playing as I stand against a background of a deserted street and act like an idiot* You haven't been neglecting this fic! ...Have you? I mean, you DID remember to feed it, right? (Fic: *looks like the bony remains of a roast chicken*) Ee! ...Oh. Yeah. Maybe. Anyway, this chapter needs a name! ^_^ o.O Penny's a boy, too!?!? ---- Yugi- My "Yami's being an idiot" senses are tingling! That way! Seto- *holding a frying pan* Lead the way! ) ---- XD XD XD XD XD XD XD XD XD God, Seto menacingly holding a frying pan is just the most awesome image ever. ^_^ ---- Marik- Hey, do you want to go see a movie? Malik- Only if we can throw popcorn at the scene and yell "THAT DIDN'T HAPPEN IN THE BOOK!!" ---- XD XD XD XD XD "That didn't happen in the book!" That's hysterical, Megan!! I'm not just sugarcoating that, either. My face shall never be the same. *is all scrunched up from laughing* I loved the way the snack guy & snack girl--- OOH! They sound like superheros! ^_^ HMIII! --- treated Malik and Marik. "Here's your popcorn concoction and your soda buzz." ^_^ And man, Malik is difficult. ^^ (Marik- Is that a bag of kernels? Malik- YUP! Marik-Nice.) Lol. The last line was also very effective to make somebody get all pumped up for the next chapter. ^_^(Bakura: ...You know that your idiotic ramblings don't go with the background music, like, at ALL, right?) Did you just say like? (Bakura: I refuse to answer to that.) Whatever. I reached the limi | Title: BoBoBo!
Reviewed By: Sour Akio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 22:17 CST
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Yay! ^_^ I remember the ice cream idea! ^_^ Lol! Hah! The whole ice cream/Dorothy/envelope floating from the sky was hysterical... so was Seto acting like a school girl and getting to Yugi's house before he could say "okay." &_& My dad called me down earlier to watch Bobobo-bobo-bobobo. He likes it too. ^_^
| Title: Review of chapter... uh... is this six?
Reviewed By: Sour Akio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 22:11 CST
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Ryou likes ME! ROAR! ^-^ Yugi planning to hurt Kaiba! Lol! ^_^ "Yugi is literally talking about hurting Yami": You wouldn't use "literally," because you'd usually use literally when saying somebody is doing that something that's usually metaphorical. >.< That sounded complicated. But, you'd say like, "Yes, there is LITERALLY a skeleton in my closet," or when you'd use literally when talking about something exaggerated... "I literally ran ten miles!" Or something like that. It didn't seem to fit. And I think you could've written the part with Yugi plotting to make it a bit more dramatic, to get the point across a bit better.
| Title: A review for PENNY!
Reviewed By: Sour Akio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 21:47 CST
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I remember when you wrote this chapter telling me about it because Bakura beating Yami up is about the closest you've ever gotten to shounen-ai. ^^; Ryou- Ma'am, please excuse my friend's behavior. He's.. lost his mind and he seems to grow attached to inanimate objects, namely pens. RLG's Mommy- I see. Sweetheart, give the psycho his pen back. Bakura- *who is up at the counter ordering food* Hm? Did someone call me? Who has my pen? I didn't know I had a pen. I always stole Ryou's. ----- ^_^ LOL! That was hysterical! HOWEVER! -----Marik- But then.. What was this? *holds up the pieces of paper* Isis- *shrugs* Weren't you writing a paper called "Isis's Important Documents"? Marik- …Snap… ---- Now I'm confused. Marik was writing a paper that was called "Isi's Important Documents"? ^^ Is that what you meant? ...o.O Eh, wait, that's pretty obvious. It just threw me a bit off track is all. ^_^ ......Did you really name that puppy Bakura Jr. ? O O; I can't remember... I remember us talking about "Bakura Jr" a couple of times... ...Bakura is to Bakura Jr as Yami is to Chocolate. ^^
| Title: That's NOT GOOD!
Reviewed By: Sour Akio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 21:35 CST
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Dear Akio the Dragon Master: I regret to inform you that you must DIE, sinner!!! *strikes a ninja pose* --Not really. Of course not! But, actually, you did a TERRIBLE, TERRIBLE thing! (Ryou: Unforgivable!) You mispelled the most IMPORTANT word in the English language! (Ryou: It's a VERY important word!) That's just NOT GOOD, brudda! (Ryou: Word, girlfriend!) ...Ryou, why don't you just sit in the corner. (Ryou: Don't you try to quell my inner--) NOW, Ryou. (Ryou: Fine.) Good. ...........Megan, you mispelled "Shiney". *cries* (Ryou: Are you okay?) *snuffles* I'll be fine. Chapter 5. It's "shiney". Just so you know. O o Megan.... WHY?!?!? Why, Megan, WHY!?!?! (Ryou: Dramatic, much?) Very. ~_~ How could you?!!? My heart is breaking! (Ryou: That's okay, I've got English tape!) ...It's called scotch. (Ryou: Not anymore it isn't!) You're a bit too patriotic. ^_^ Anyway, funny chapter, just one typo that I'm majorly overexxagerating in hopes of influencing you to update this chapter and make sure that "shiney" it spelled-- (Ryou: Uh, Danielle, it's spelled SHINY.) .........WHAT?!?!?! *dies* x.X
| Title: Rereading is fun! ^_^
Reviewed By: Sour Akio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 21:20 CST
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The disclaimer was, again, VERY entertaining! Lol! ^_^ FOR THE STORY! Hooray! ^-^ Pens bleed? Lol. Hm... something that could improve this chapter? Mmm... thinking... *scrunches face up and sticks out tongue... a lightbulb appears above my head while I do this, making me look like a total retard* Ok! Hm, when Yami asks 'What talk?' it might have been funnier if you hadn't had Yugi tell him what talk it was yet. Dramatic irony, y'know? ^_^ This chapter was really awesome. ^_^ As are all. [insert more blatant flattering here]
| Title: Rereading is fun! ^_^
Reviewed By: Sour Akio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 21:16 CST
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Hm... Disclaimer was intresting! ^_^ Mwahahaha! Clicky's in the dressing room with the salad. Hah. Oh, you used "the" instead of they. I like ???? ^^ Fun. What's a ????? Lol. ....Bakura has BAD taste in ice cream. When Marik and Malik burst in you put "tot he wall" instead of "to the wall". Where did Yami learn to say "Omg"? Lol. Maybe he knows Vincent? *has an image of Yami and Vincent both posing together* Lol. Why does Ryou chuckle twice? Bakura has ice cream on his nose... nice. ^^ Very attractive, right? But of course.
| Title: Rereading is fun! ^_^
Reviewed By: Sour Akio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 21:08 CST
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Once, in Chapter 1, you said "we don't need this guys!" Yami said it. ^_^ Anyway, rereading this was awesome. ^_^ It made me totally fall in love with this story all over again. *hugs story* (Computer- Uh... this is awkward!/Me- Shut up! You're spoiling the moment!) Also, in the part with Malik & Marik, "nowhere" is one word, not too. ^_^
| Reviewed By: yamifreak On: August 14, 2005 20:37 CDT
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This was a very nice story. The yami part was funny. GO CLICKY
| Title: Love Your Story
Reviewed By: tyler_1993 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2005 15:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your fanfic is so crazy and funny and I can't wait, until chapter 9
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