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| "Move" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: Cute!
Reviewed By: musichika [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2006 17:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it! It's adorable. Altho I think Nanjirou was a little OOC, but that's okay! It's not the end of the world! It's still REALLY cute!
| Reviewed By: devildice708(forgot to log in) On: May 13, 2005 08:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know nothing about the anime, but I most definetly like this story. Keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: LadyLark [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2005 22:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
Your story has been featured for the following reason -- This story stands out because it does three major things. One, it keeps the characters in character. Two, it fills in a much needed gap in the PoT universe. Three, it tugs at the heartstrings a little. These three on top of good grammar and style, truly make this vignette a joy to read.
| Title: Great look into the Echizen household
Reviewed By: Ayapon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2004 02:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
Not too many of these types of stories out there, so thank you for writing one that delves into Ryoma before Japan, the Echizen household, and Ryoma's mom. (I can't figure out why she is never featured in the anime *sigh*.) I especially enjoyed your pacing of the story as that the flow of time felt right, not too rushed and not slow. The interaction between Ryoma and his classmates seem very in character, making me laugh. I also enjoyed that it was the conversation between father and son that was the focus rather than the game itself. You did a great job in painting the picture of them playing with a few well placed sentences. My only criticism is that Nanjirou, Ryoma's father, addresses his son most often as "seishounen" (youth, young man, young person, young one), then "Ryoma", or lastly "Ryoma-sama" (when he's trying to get a rise out of Ryoma) rather than "chibi". The person who normally calls Ryoma by "chibi" and it's varying forms would be Kikumaru Eiji. Please keep writing. ^_^
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