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Reviewed By: Tatsuki from BleachAsylum On: January 26, 2011 03:33 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a lovely compliment to the oneshot "Father Again." At first, I thought it would be another, expanded, babyfic (which I enjoy!). But then you delved deep into Vegeta's memories, creating a very interesting introspective of his life. I'm not a DBZ fan, so I don't know what you took from canon and what you added (for instance, I know that Vegeta was a prince and that his planet was destroyed, but did Frieza destroy the planet because Vegeta innocuously displayed his true power? Are the centipede creatures canon? Did Vegeta meet Raditz before the planet was destroyed? etc) It didn't take away from my enjoyment of the fic, though. I love how Vegeta reflects that Trunks' abilities may be "an amalgam of Saiyan things and human things." I also really enjoyed the depiction of Gohan. I know enough about DBZ to know that he's the Clark Kent in Toriyama's world! ;P Thanks for the story! |
Reviewed By: Chaotic Serenity On: June 20, 2006 16:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've got a beautiful style, Debbie. It's not overly eloquent or abstract, but it captures meaning, and in doing so, simply and without flash, it understands more about the characters and their humanity more than anything else. Your words are infused with a liveliness I can't quite put my finger on - if anything, I get the sense that you have a very firm grasp of the absurdities of what makes a person, all that glory and failure that makes it so interesting. All in all, there's nothing really worth poking at in this story - I think it's actually canon that Celipa likes kids (some sort of manga or comic companion to the Bardock special or something threw out a few facts about the crew), but it's hardly worth negotiating further changes to the story when the circumstances and rest of it is spot on, regardless. Wonderful work. You're a very talented author. :-)
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Title: what is a bastard
Reviewed By: Chicharu On: June 10, 2005 10:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow really great story , I really liked the part about vegeta being a young prince .. and the army base was also really awsome to read ! wow really great :D Hope you gonna make more story's I am a fan :D
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Title: Very Nice!
Reviewed By: Vegetas_Queen On: April 02, 2005 08:33 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed this fic immensely. I love reading Fics where Vegeta isn't the sadistic fish he normally is. I especially enjoyed the part where he commented on Bulma's appearence. Thank you for writing such an enjoyable fic!
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Title: Perfect ten!
Reviewed By: Bulma16 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2004 00:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't know why, but I like this one better than "Father Again". Well, I think it's probably because of how you told the story of Vegeta-san's childhood in there. He was really true to character throughout (an arrogant ass to the very end) and had some real depth. I loved the ending too. I like to think that it is symbolic how he stepped into the sunlight, as if he's leaving the darkness of his past for something better, his life with his family. But I digress!! Fantastic work!
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Title: Excellent
Reviewed By: harmony_22 On: October 30, 2004 16:00 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Incredible writing. I loved this story. It was very original. I've never seen somebody write from the perspective you did. I hope you have some other stories out there or you're going to write somemore and post them. Keep up the great writing!!!!!
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2004 10:52 EDT
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Wow! I can't even begin to tell you how good your fic was. It was serious yet had comical moments. The oonly thing that bugged me was the opening sentence...it just didn't grab me as a strong start but I continued reading regardless. I loved your descriptions though...great visualizations and metaphors. I can't wait to go and read more of your work.
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Reviewed By: Gie-chan On: October 23, 2004 02:17 EDT
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Very retospective story, Deb! It flowed very well...each part streamlined into the next. I like how Trunks has an extra bit of Saiya-jiin in him than human....he has a thousand and one kings of Vejiita-sei reunning through him, ne? Although, I spit out my juice at the word 'mustachioed'....lol...is that the actual use of the word? Does it actually exist? ^_~ ANyway...this is an excellent portrayal of how Vejiita has changed from the hard badass he was at the beginning of the series to the father figure he is now. Or that we think him to be. Gie
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Reviewed By: Caralin Fury [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2004 12:59 EDT
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This is an amazing story and you have every right to be proud. I loved the visit to Vegeta's past. Everything about your story was dead on...even Videl's appearance being similar to Celipa's. Never noticed that myself! Thanks for a great read. Writers like you inspire me and for that I thank you.
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2004 00:15 EDT
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This is a beautiful story, Deb. I so loved the young Vegeta memories. It really fit into the characters' personalities, IMHO. I can just imagine the little guy standing there all regal-like... well as regal-like as he could get with the yaraki guts all over his person. And then deciding he's 'bored' just walking away. Yup, that's the Vegeta we all love! I also love Vegeta's perspective of childbirth and the funny things we do afterwards. For some reason, "brightly colored vegetation" just cracked me up. Still does. :D I think the very best part was his final acceptance of both his past and the present and the need of one for the other. Beautiful!
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2004 23:15 EDT
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I don't blame you, this is your best one shot so far. It took me two sittings but I read it fully. your work is so good and you seem to grasp the core of Vegeta. -El-
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Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2004 10:21 EDT
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Very intense. I liked this one a lot because I like it when writers get inside Vegeta's head. Nice job.
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: October 12, 2004 23:44 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent...almost no mistakes. I almost never read stories that don't have lemons in them, but i decided to try this one out. This was so incredible that I couldn't stop reading (it's 12 in the morning) and I have to be up at 6 to go to school. I hope you write more stories soon...maybe even a few chaptered story about v and b? that would be awesome. thanks for being such an awesome author!
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Reviewed By: Poptartfrog On: October 11, 2004 04:32 EDT
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Heh.... I mean "write". Sorry for leaving another message. o.O
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Title: awesome
Reviewed By: Poptartfrog On: October 11, 2004 04:28 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT fic. I really enjoyed this. You did a nice job of portraying Vegeta. He seemed very much in character (as an adult and as a child) I liked how you wrote Vegeta as a kid. He wasn't too hard, and he was respectful towards his father. He was serious but in a believeable way. (I liked how he was uncertain sometimes as any kid would be...some authors right him too much like an adult even when he's very young.) I think that was a believeable take on Vegeta's past. There just aren't enough fics that really talk about his life before he came to Earth. (and definitely not many that are well-written) I enjoyed the interaction between Vegeta and Nappa/Radditz/King Vegeta. A very nicely written fic all around. I've read your other stuff, and I like them too but I can see why this one's your favorite.
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