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Title: Awsome!
Reviewed By: tears_of_sapphire On: June 02, 2005 12:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it! You're a great writer! Keep up the good work. I can't wait for your next fic. It truly was amazing. It made me realize that Kirara really was a very smart cat. ^^ 100000/10 If I could rate it that, it'd definately have been rated that.
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Title: ryokoyuy1@yahoo.com
Reviewed By: Ryoko Yuy (offline) On: June 01, 2005 01:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, you did a terrific job; I can't remember the last time I read such a well-detailed narrative such as this. I couldn't move from my seat the entire time I was reading this; it was captivating. ^_~ Kudos to you!
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Title: ffrg review
Reviewed By: angelica incarnate [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2005 11:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
I have read this before now on a recommendation of a friend, a very interesting piece of work. Thanks for submitting for review! You have so much freedom and fun to explore with Kirara and I agree that she is likely a very intelligent creature. You gave her a distinct character and you stuck to it and that's probably the most impressive thing you did. Your descriptions are good, as is your action if I recall correctly. I don't mean to sound like I'm belittling any of your writing, because I'm not--I really enjoy it, but your ability to keep Kirara within the boundaries of the characterization you created for her is just wonderful. You spelled violet wrong the first time you used it... a bit of an after thought there, sorry. Anyways, thanks for sharing your piece and good luck in your future endeavors.
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Title: Ch 2-3
Reviewed By: Aquamarine [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 20:31 CDT
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(And now I'm just going to review the rest of your fic as a civilian.) Not only was this entertaining and suspenseful, but the characters also grew a little bit. (It's not everyday Kirara gets some character development.) Both Kirara and Inuyasha seemed to come out of this with a little better understanding and respect for one-another. This story makes me wonder why I haven't read more Kirara-centric fics. This was awesome. I just have one suggestion. You might want to fix this from Chapter 2: "I had to get to camp; my mistress needed warned. The camp needed roused." I think you mean, "My mistress needed to be warned... needed to be roused." Other than that, I didn't notice anything that needed fixing. You're a great story teller! ~ Aquamarine
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Title: FFARG Review Ch 1
Reviewed By: Aquamarine [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 19:23 CDT
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Oh, wonderful! There are so few stories in which Kirara is a main character! I love how this starts, with a simple sentence that you repeat, adding more details. It's a great way to bring your reader in. Kirara's musing about Inuyasha is very insightful. I always thought she was probably the deepest thinker of them all, since she never talks. I thought Kirara's frustration with Inuyasha not talking to himself was cute. I'd like to know if she came out of hiding after Inuyasha spoke to her the first time, or if she stayed out of his reach. Her movements are a little unclear after she mewled to get his attention. Also, how far away from the camp are they? It seems like the demons are heading right for Inuyasha and Kirara, but then Kirara later is worried about being seen. Are they the target, is it the Jewel, or do they just have the bad luck of getting caught in between two fighting demons? Even though this was a short chapter, it was very enjoyable. I'm going to go read the rest of the story, now. ^_^ ~ Aquamarine
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Title: FAILED
Reviewed By: pookymon On: May 27, 2005 01:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was awesomem for your first fanfic keep writing good job. I really love it.
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Reviewed By: Xakana [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2005 03:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was great! I've never thought of Kirara's perspective before. She's a great character, too. "The Hunt For The Ears" ROFL!
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Title: Pic-A-Fic Review
Reviewed By: Lady Lark (NSI) On: April 12, 2005 14:09 CDT
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I read Chatper one and I have to say that you have a very interesting piece here. Amusingly, I did not get a chance to read it when it was up for featured status (which it got) and now I wish I did. This is an interesting Inu Yasha story outside of the typical vein. I like the fact that you used a lesser known character's perspective to tell the story. You've done a good job.
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Reviewed By: Rose Fury [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2005 19:54 CDT
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That was very good. I applaud your work.
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Reviewed By: prongs-gurl202113 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2005 17:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was the best fic that had Kirara in first person that i have ever read. The only thing about it was it was a little short. lol. my fave part was about the ears at the end.
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Reviewed By: Fanilia [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2005 15:01 CST
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Sueric said, read...read... I'm gald I did. The action was so well written it I could follow it in my mind as if I were there watching. Kirara's thoughts concerning humans was very good. I also loved the ending. Very nice.~Fanilia
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Title: Kirara ROCKS!
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2004 21:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww! This was GREAT! I had so much fun reading it! Not gonna say a THING about your action sequencing... I liked very much (and since I, myself, am not an action type . . . LOL!!!!) Ahhh, let's see... we're supposed to 'critique' right? And ... if there really isn't anything TO critique? What then? Hmm... I guess if I had to say anything, I would just say that ... umm... too short? And I don't even think that, really. Grammar and spelling dead-on. Characterizations? InuYasha's was awesome. Kirara? Exactly like I'd expect from the voiceless youkai. Just really nice, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it! Thanks for the highly entertaining writing break! God bless, ~Sueric~
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Title: Great work
Reviewed By: RadiosNmyHead-not logged in On: December 01, 2004 12:41 CST
Comment/Review:
That was a great little story, tnough I would love to see more... Battle seens are pretty difficult to write, but you did pretty well with all of these. I really did enjoy this, and I think you should try writing more like it!
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Reviewed By: Thornwitch On: December 01, 2004 10:12 CST
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That was great. I've always thought Kirara was the most under-appreciated character. And her observations about Inuyasha's denseness were superb.
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Reviewed By: notzathros On: November 30, 2004 20:10 CST
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Love it!!! What a great story idea. Great character development!! Wish this story could have gone on for many more chapters. It was wonderful. Thank you!
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