| "The new spirit detective" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Reviewed By: ~HIEI LOVERS~ On: January 26, 2005 17:29 CST
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Hey that was mean. You are mean to Hiei. Just because Hiei is a better fighter and has a bad past doesn't mean can just cotrol him and make him do what ever you want and try to make him happy. I think Hiei is happy the way he is.
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Reviewed By: ~hiei lovers~ On: January 26, 2005 17:27 CST
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Hey that was mean. You were mean to Hiei. I like Hiei. I the way I think of him I would be glad to be his brother and take care of him.
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Title: DV here!!!!
Reviewed By: DreamVixen [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2005 15:55 CST
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DV- Hey!!! I saw your review for Time and Again and thought 'what the heck!' hehe... Raven asked for a Yus/Kag, huh? ^_^; She's obbsessed with that pairing, I swear. Chiisai- This story is really interesting! It's a little hard to read, thought, since the paragraphs are so long. DV- Yeah, spelling is the worst part of writing. I could beta read for you if you want. I've got spell check here, plus I'm pretty good with spelling to begin with. Ganko- Plus she's a grammar freak. She still cringes whenever people use chat things instead of spelling words out. DV- I can't help it!!! 13 years of english has warped my brain!!!!!!!!! Chiisai & Ganko- -_-;;; DV- Damn muses....
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Reviewed By: akumi himura On: January 23, 2005 09:37 CST
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Well, I think that your gonna make him kiss one of the girls or make him go in the closet with a girl or make him sleep with one of the girls except for yukina.Update soon. ^_^
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Reviewed By: Foxylilraven(not logged in) On: January 22, 2005 17:04 CST
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oops i forgot to add this in there...umm can you make this a Yusuke/Kagome pwease *puppy eyes*
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Reviewed By: Foxylilraven(not logged in) On: January 22, 2005 17:00 CST
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Raven:*sigh* same as my review for "jewel Protectors" the easiest way to correct spelling errors is to use a spell check or get a beta
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Reviewed By: HIEI LOVERS [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2005 22:36 CST
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Oh and my birthday is on Feb.4,1994. ^_^'
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Reviewed By: HIEI LOVERS [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2005 22:35 CST
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Okay...um...I didn't really mean it for you to take it so seriously. I'm sorry for embarassing you. It happens to people sometimes. They are great spellers, but then all of a sudden a word just slips their mind and they can't remember it so they try their best the write and/or type it. So don't take it too seriously and forgive me for that happens to me sometimes even if I am a really great speller. So update and forgive me. ^_^
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Reviewed By: kaja1234 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2005 19:46 CST
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good fic, but try starting new paragraph for each person speaking, its difficult to see whos saying what. love the fic, not this not a flame and update soon!!!!
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Reviewed By: HIEI LOVERS [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2005 18:54 CST
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Ok um.... shadow This is how you spelled landry. Read on if you want to know how to spell it. It is spelled like this laundry. Ok sorry bout that it's just....you are suppose to know how to spell laundry and I am only 10 and you need help on how to spell laundry. Okay,okay sorry bout that thing and all, but I am really only 10. My birthday is on Feb. 3,1994. Hope you update soon and I really liked your story.
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Reviewed By: yuki sohma's bitch On: December 06, 2004 17:21 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
you need to fix up the chapter this fic has potenial note this ain't a flame i do not like flaming people.
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Reviewed By: fanfic fanaticim a poet and i didnt know it [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2004 06:34 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
its really good! please please please updat soon!?
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Title: Trying to help, not flame.
Reviewed By: telosphilos [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2004 18:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
You seriously need to copy everything and dump it into a wordprocessor like MSWord, Wordperfect, or whatever else you prefer. The netspeak and lack of capitalizations make it very hard to decipher what the characters are saying and doing. A wordprocessor should be able to do most of that with a minimum of fuss for you. You have a decent set up for an actual plot and characterizations, but it is almost impossible to find for the spelling and grammar problems. I'm sure you also has this formatted much nicer when you originally wrote it and that the formatting disappeared when you added it to the MM.org input screen. I think a double carriage return should be enough to put the line breaks back in. Do keep working on this, it does have potential once the technical bugs have been worked out.
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Reviewed By: telosphilos [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2004 18:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
You seriously need to copy everything and dump it into a wordprocessor like MSWord, Wordperfect, or whatever else you prefer. The netspeak and lack of capitalizations make it very hard to decipher what the characters are saying and doing. A wordprocessor should be able to do most of that with a minimum of fuss for you. You have a decent set up for an actual plot and characterizations, but it is almost impossible to find for the spelling and grammar problems. I'm sure you also has this formatted much nicer when you originally wrote it and that the formatting disappeared when you added it to the MM.org input screen. I think a double carriage return should be enough to put the line breaks back in. Do keep working on this, it does have potential once the technical bugs have been worked out.
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