| "Not Again!" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: amishamj [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2006 21:55 CST
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i love this story and also my little brother has soul caliber 2 and 3 and i always beat him with talim cause hedoesn't know my special move Mwhahahahahahahahahahahaahahahahahahaha
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Reviewed By: PrincessRock323 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2005 14:32 CDT
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Please update soon. This is a good fic and I would love to see it continued.
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Reviewed By: Sesshy81 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2005 14:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this story a lot, but it really needs a beta reader ... someone to pick out plot holes and smooth it out so it flows better. as it is, it needs a lot of work in the language and punctuation department. There are better way to describe what some one looks like or is wearing than writing out a paragraph saying it out right. I think this could be really good if you gave it a little more attention to detail. Keep working on it and I'll get back to you.
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Reviewed By: tbiris(not logged in) On: March 22, 2005 21:01 CST
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that IS interesting... never heard him do that with a dragon before...
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Reviewed By: TheStatue On: March 21, 2005 16:12 CST
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Iie... "Shikon no kakkera" are shards of the jewel. The jewel itself is the "Shikon no tama"
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Title: plz update
Reviewed By: KagomexYoko(didnt feel like loging in ) On: January 31, 2005 00:01 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have a great imagonation and i really really hope u update soon k oh and um I dont know if u did or not but can u try 2 make a pic. of kagome as a kitsune if u do thanks.
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Reviewed By: Tiny Kitty Cat On: January 30, 2005 13:50 CST
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Hmm...reviewing as I read. lovely thought eh? Anyways you spelled Keiko wrong. Since I just spelled it I won't again. Wow...hmmm If you're unsure about the spelling check a fan site. its spelled Reikai, there's the Reiai Makai and Ningenkai. Yusuke Urameshi has al rights too be scared of Keiko also. She scares me, too much like Madison. Watch out for run on sentences! Loe the suspense on what the mission is. On punctuation mark per sentence please. I think I figured out your spacing problem. Your space key is stiff isnt it? Sango and her village are taijiya. YOu misspelled that. Don't worry though. *winks* I had to look it up myself. As interesting as it is that you didn't capitalize Onigumo's name, and as much as I agree that he doesn't deserve it, grammar states you hav to. Despite our best wishes. Did the arrow or the jewel shatter. If I didn't know the story I would be a bit confused. The first words of a few sentences about 1/10th of the way from the bottom are missing.
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Reviewed By: Tiny Kitty Cat On: January 30, 2005 13:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay. You may need to change the chapters to have paragraphs. It makes it easier to read if it's all not just one big block. And you need to double spacebetween sentences to distinguish them. I lie the stroy so far and if you need a beta reader contact me: girlsbyte@yahoo.com. I'll help out there. Hrm...This has been done but not in such a way so points for creativity. I would have enjoyed it more if it was proofread. Since you said you were new, that was you right I read enough i forget, I actually expected a heck of a lot worse. Do you have a general idea of where the story is going? It always helps If you do. Please contact me when you update as well. Leaving little authors notes in the stories is a no no. If you do have a comment or a question then mark it with an Asterisk (*) More than just one, add more. There are several spelling of Inuyasha's sword name. There's Tessaiga, the more American way, and then there is Tetsusaiga, the original Japanese way. At least I think I spelled it right. I'll check. Yeah, short authors notes and only at the top with the disclaimer is best. If you're ever late just remember...you arent bound by your reviewers, you're only bound by yourself. If they can wait for a sequel for a paper book they can most certainly wait for a chapter in an online book.
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Reviewed By: Dark Soul On: January 30, 2005 12:39 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story!!!Please update!!!!!
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Reviewed By: kaja1234 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2005 12:38 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
soooo happy you updated! hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: sesshi and youko lover (to lazy to log in) On: January 30, 2005 02:18 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is still going fantastically i love the story, just to say though sesshomaru has no hyphen in his name ^_^ i know only because i've seen it in english and japanese...just thought you would like to know ^_^!! great chapter though!
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Reviewed By: kaja1234 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2005 19:06 CST
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okay, i pick: Kagome and Kurama! -thumbs up, update soon!!!-
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Reviewed By: Kaikou247 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2004 00:06 CST
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*claps* You're good! Keep upadating!!!
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Reviewed By: rocknroll7806 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2004 22:46 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
hehehe good job. My compliements to you.Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: Sesshi and Youko lover [MediaMiner Member] On: December 23, 2004 18:37 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is really good but i have a couple things you might want to fix. first you need to put spaces before some of your paragraphs start otherwise they get pulled into the border line and you can't tell what they say. two its called the "shikon no tama". and finally the name is spelt keiko. ^_^ other then that its great...i will definately be keeping an eye on this story
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