| "Caged Doves" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: foxtale3 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2008 17:41 CDT
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I have been enjoying your story, and after reading your pleas for reviews, I just had to let you know! I have yet to read a GW story with this particular angle--so kudos for creativity! I can't wait to read the rest!
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Reviewed By: dark irish sorceress [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2006 14:12 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh plz plz continue! there aren't a lot of H/R stories and all the good ones i could find are all incomplete! i love your story, it has a great plot and i love how you changed the characters (mostly Heero lol). plz plz continue this story for the sake of Heero/Relena pairings!!! *pumps fist in air* ^^ ~dark irish mistress a.k.a shigome
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Reviewed By: Uplifted [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2005 09:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like the turn in this plot. I can't wait to read more, but I thought I'd leave a review. Your grammar is excellent, and your spelling is good too! This is one of the first HY/RP stories I've read, and I like it so far.
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2005 16:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
alright! now he has help! not that he needs it, i think. to bad he can't risk barging in and rescuing relena. oh well. guess he has to dance to the piper if he's going to get anywhere close to her. great story so far. please keep going!
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Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: KACD2 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 22:10 CDT
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Ok, First I just want to say this: I plan on reading the rest of the story. Ok, now on to the criticism. Not that there's much, but it could be a bit longer. I like having more. More info, more dialog, more... More. But, for a first chapter, it's nice. Really gets ya goin. Made me want to read the next chapter. Clever chapter titles by the way, and please post more at FFARG. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: TMcCaine [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2005 01:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
If I were to ignore certain flows within the fic I would enjoy it more. However, something hits me when I read the first chapter. I do notice how your descriptions are unnecessarily done or aren't done at all. To sum it up, I would say that you describe when you don't need to and don't describe when you should. Example, how would a mobile suit look when it's powered by coffee? And how does one not put on much makeup? I don't wear any so I don't know. Questions like this pop up and I would like to see how you see these things in your head to know your vision of the GW universe is. Rather than leave things to assumption or general "your an assumed GW fan and should know" attitude. If I were to advise, I would say never assume someone knows what you're talking about. With the exception that I don't need a detailed working description of a MS powering up, summarizing works fine there. On a completely different note, the camaraderie felt between the characters in the first chapter is felt between them and there is a slight sense of humor lingering within the words. It would also help to examine each paragraph apart from the rest of the story and then each sentence. And examine it as if you didn't know anything about the GW storyline or universe. This way you can include good details and make the reader feel more of a part of the story and less like a visitor.
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Reviewed By: HeeroYuy135 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2005 00:40 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh I am loving this!!! It keeps getting better every chapter! This is really getting good!!! Keep it up!!!
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Title: oh you bad woman!
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2005 16:05 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
how dare you leave me hanging like that! well... then again... i kinda do the same thing. wonderful. simply wonderful so far. please keep posting. i want to know how far you're going to go with this. all i ask is don't make this a "tragic" story. i don't think that my heart will hold out. *sniff*
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