| "The Beer Hutt" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: SamusAran of SR388 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2005 10:07 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Do more! i wanna see something happen between the girls! EG, both girls kiss without regrets! good so far. DO MORE!
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Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2005 20:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
Alright. I reviewed the first chapter, and it took me a while before I recalled who Jink was... Now, the story telling is effective, and with me not really knowing the effects of alcohol, I can't judge if that is OOC or not.There were a few grammer problems, if you have a grammer cheak program you might want to run it. You didn't do too badly with the romance, however a little more character description and depth would have been nice. This isn't horrendously bad, but you can still make it better. Description is the key to that.
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Title: This is awesome!!!
Reviewed By: Saint Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 22:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such a cool story! You must update very soon please!
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Reviewed By: Ayanami-san (not logged in ((phibbs_is_an_anime_junkie@yahoo.com.au))) [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 04:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read the 1st chap of this on FF.net yesterday! I loved that chap aswell as this 2nd one, but the 2nd one was SO much better!!!
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